Heatherstar of Windclan: Thank you so much for being my first reviewer on this story. I agree with you a lot and I hate her so much! Poor Flatkit...Thank you again! The small white kit whimpered with fear as teeth gently met the scruff of her neck." It's alright my dear Flatkit,, I won't hurt you," a low male voice sounded softly in the kit's ear and she couldn't help but be comforted by the tom's voice.
My name must be Flatkit, the tiny kit thought, unsure whether she liked it or not " Are you sure she'll be alright," this time a feminine voice spoke," her eyes aren't even open yet and it's a long journey for such a small kit."
The tom set Flatkit down gently to respond "She'll be fine Petalmist. You said so yourself that if we don't do this then she will die. Besides she is a strong kit, she is of my blood after all."This was the tom's voice again and Flatkit wondered who they were talking about.
Suddenly the scent of another cat filled the kit's nostrils and Flatkit heard the tom snarl as the new scent came closer," What do you want Brightflame?" The tom snarled, his voice dangerously low.
" Keep your fur on Cedarstar" a she-cat,Brightflame, said sweetly ,but with a cutting edge ," I just wanted to say good bye to our kit."
Cedarstar snarled as Brightflame said 'our', " I think you mean my kit, Brightflame. You gave up the right to call her yours when you shunned her. She'll be better off without you."
Flatkit heard Brightflame snarl quietly but she quickly regained her falsely sweet voice ,"Good bye my dear Flatkit." Flatkit's heart plummeted when she realized that Brightflame was talking to her and she shrank back in fear, but Brightflame wasn't finished yet, she dropped her sickly sweet voice and adopted a venomous snarl low enough that only Flatkit could hear," good riddance my little monstrosity," before turning away, her scent growing fainter as she walked farther away. Flatkit let out a tiny, involuntary whimper."
Cedarstar snarled at Brightflame's retreating back before letting out a yowl," all cats chosen for the gathering meet me by the camp's entrance!"
As the cats he chose gathered, Cedarstar exchanged final words with Petalmist that Flatkit couldn't quite make out before gently grabbing the kit by her scruff, joining the rest of the group and yowling,"Riverclan, let's go!"
Sorry, I failed at that chapter and it was really short and boring ,but it was necessary. I also want to show more of how much of a jerk Brightflame is. Please review and I'm open to advice! Oh and please tell me if I have any typos or anything, I'm still pretty new to this!
-Mothstar