Tell me what you think about the story
The girl And boy walked in perfect unison, the crowd parted as the walked through it.
People whisper, " Who would ever let them in?"
Then the boy disappeared right before the main groups eyes and the girl started chasing something or someone that wasn't there. Fitz said to the main group, " What is she doing is she crazy?" "No maybe she's just confused, Biana whispers"
Sophie watches her closely curiously. Time passes and now it lunch. Jamie and Axen arive at a crowded table and sit down all the elves scatter. Jamie opens a lunch box with some substance in it. Sophie knows the smell of it but can't place it. Keefe sits down at the groups table, " Weird she's eating human food"
Stina goes straight toward the table walking like she's going to cause an uproar. Jamie looks up from her soup. " Ugh what's that smell, Stina sneers, oh it's just a Lizon. Why would they even let one in it's not like your gonna last long." " Sigh ,Jamie says, if they didn't let me in then why would they let your dad in?"
" That has nothing to do with this"
"Sure it does and let me eat my ramen in peace please"
" ...uh"
"yeah before you say a thing sweetie stop while your ahead"
I would appreciate some conservative criticism thanks