Here's the prologue of the rewrite. Enjoy
"Mother! Father!" Ciel cries out as he runs throughout the mansion looking for his parents and his brother. But they are nowhere to be found. Someone has broken into their home and is killing all of the servants. He even found their dog Sebastian dead. "Mother! Father!"
He enters the study where they would usually be. The moment he opens the door, his eyes widen upon seeing a man aiming a gun at his father's face. He can't see his father because of the shadows obscuring his face. The only thing he can see are the brown leather gloves he's wearing. But he can see the fear in his father's eyes clear as day. Vincent is standing in front of Rachel, shielding her from the intruder. Ciel tempts into entering the study to put a stop to it but his mother quickly sees him and shakes her head. Tears fill his eyes. He watches his father trying to talk reason with the intruder, telling him to put the gun down so they can talk more civilized.
Ciel gasps when the intruder pulls the trigger. Blood and brain matter burst from Vincent's head, splattering on Rachel's face and dress. Rachel lets out a blood-curling scream at the sight of her husband's body dropping dead to the floor. Ciel tries to call out for his mother but she gets shot in the head as well and she drops dead besides Vincent. Ciel stares in complete shock. Both of his parents are dead. Once he is finally able to process to what just happened, he shrieks in terror and sorrow.
The intruder immediately spots Ciel and aimed the gun at him. That's when Ciel bolts out of there as the intruder pulls the trigger and the bullet strikes the door, sending splintering wood flying.
Ciel runs down the corridors in search for his brother and Tanaka. The murderers could still be inside the house and they need to get out as soon as possible.
"Tanaka!" Ciel yells as he runs desperately through the hallways. His nostrils quickly catch the smell of smoke and the hallways are beginning to fill with hot black fog which causes Ciel to cough profusely and his eyes to water and blur.
He stops when he turns a corner a finds the rest of the hallway engulfed in raging flames, covering the walls, eating away the drapes and reaching the ceiling above him.
He finds Tanaka on the floor near the fire, lying face down like his parents and with a bloody stab wound on his back. Ciel almost went into complete his hysteria when he sees Tanaka coughing. He's still alive. Ciel calls out for his brother but it looks like he is nowhere to be found. Did the intruders get him? Is he dead like Mother and Father?
Ciel runs to Tanaka's side and shakes. "Wake up! Tanaka, wake up!"
Ciel looks up as he hears roaring and creaking. The flames are above them, threatening to bring the second floor down to the ground.
Knowing that there's no time to waste and can't leave Tanaka here to be eaten by the fire while he looks aimlessly for his brother. With very little strength he has, he grabs Tanaka under the arms and starts dragging away from the fire, dragging the unconscious body through the carpeted floor. For an old man, Tanaka is heavier than he thought.
Ciel stumbles back and falls back with Tanaka heavy body on top of him.
He calls his brother again. To his relief, he reappears through the smoke, coughing and looking just as horrified as he is.
"We have to leave! Or the fire will kill us all!" he shouts.
"Tanaka is still alive, we can't just leave him!" Ciel shouts back.
His brother pushes Tanaka's upper half up to allow Ciel to get up from the floor. He has always been stronger than him. "I have his arms! You grabs his legs!"
Ciel does as his brother says and takes Tanaka by the legs while his brother grabs him under the arms just as he did before. Together, they lift Tanaka and carry him away from the fire and out of the mansion. Ciel feels sick and selfish for leaving their parents' bodies to be devoured by the fire that is now destroying their beloved home and everyone in it. But he and his brother don't have a choice. It's live or die.
Once outside, the two brothers watch their home become completely engulfed in flames that are now bursting through the windows.
"We need to take Tanaka to a hospital," Ciel says while holding the old man's hand in his own while checking his heart beat with the other hand.
"Where are Mother and Father!?" he brother says while looking around.
Tears stream down Ciel's cheeks and his voice cracked. "They're dead."
His brother stares at him in complete shock and disbelief. His face turns ghost-white and tears fill his eyes. "We need to go and report to Scotland Yard."
"But Tanaka is hurt. He's going to die -."
His brother quickly becomes snatched before Ciel can even finish. He screams as he watches his brother get dragged away by one of the men. "No! No, let him go!"
Ciel then gets snatched by another man, one wearing brown gloves. Ciel kicks and screams as the two are being taken away from their burning home and leaving Tanaka there to bleed out. "Tanaka!" The two boys continued screaming for help as they are taken away, taken to a fate worse than death, a fate that led Ciel to make the worse decision of his life.
He tolerated many months of torture and abuse. All of their disgusting hands and bodies touching him. But seeing his brother being stabbed to death at the altar was the final straw. He just wants them all dead. He wants them all to suffer a painful death. And he finally gets his wish in the form of a demon emerging from his brother spilled blood. The demon's shape takes many forms (a wolf, a large snake, a goat and finally a creature with sharp teeth and curved horns), all of them covered in his brother's read blood. Ciel starts at it in terror and disbelief. That thing is real. And he looks pissed. It turns into a large red snake and kills a few of the bastards nearby.
Ciel curls up in the corner of the cage when it slithers over to him and hisses, bearing its fangs at him.
"You," it hisses in a whispers, "Your anger and hatred is...delicious. I heard you...calling to me. And I came. Tell me, what is it that you want?"
"...I...I don't know what I want..."
"I see. You are still young. You do not understand." It takes the form of the creature with horns and sharp teeth. "But you will soon. I am here because you called to me and I am here to fulfill your wish. Say it and I will grant you any wish you like. All desires come with a price though. I can never change. And no sacrifice shall ever be regained." The creature reaches out its sharp bloodied hand towards Ciel. The boy simply stares at the hand with wide eyes, frozen in fear. "So choose wisely."
Ciel looks at his dead brother on the altar and then at the rest of the murderers surrounding them. His fear is soon replaced with boiling rage and he grits his teeth before firmly grabbing the demon's hand.
"Kill them!"
3 years later...
Ciel is sleeping in his chamber curled up in a fetal position and wrapped in heavy blankets. The eye patch he wears today is lying on the nightstand next to his bed. He was exhausted from all the work he had today and needed rest for tomorrow. They have a guest in the afternoon.
"...Wake up," a familiar voice whispers his name. It also sounds foreign to his ears, like a whispering echo. Ciel moans lowly buts ignores the voice calling, trying to get some sleep. Why must Sebastian wake me at such early hours? "Wake up... You need to wake. Or do you really want to die again?"
Ciel's eyes open, the pentagram marking his right eye glowing a dull purple, and they widen when he sees his brother standing next to his bed with blood staining his nightshirt and trickling down his mouth and his eyes glassy and lifeless. He tries to sit up but his body remains frozen in the bed. Trapped. He can't move. His breathing shifts heavily as he panics as he continues to struggling to move, his chest heaving and letting out muffled screams between his lips, his fingers twitching slightly. He wants to call out for Sebastian or anyone in the house that can hear him but all he can do is lie there frozen and panicking at the sight of his bloody brother.
His brother leans over him until his face is close to his and smiles a bloody grin at Ciel. "Its time for you to wake up."
He curls his toes. That seems to work because Ciel finally regains his movement and sits up from his bed gasping. The moment he does this, it seems that his brother has disappeared from sight. Ciel pants heavily and looks around, his own nightshirt drenched in perspiration. But that doesn't stop him from letting out a raspy scream.
He continues to scream until the door bursts open and Sebastian quickly enters the bedroom. "Master!" He quickly grabs hold of Ciel's wrist to keep him hurting himself and starts shaking. "Master, snap out of it. It was just a dream."
Ciel stops screaming and struggling, simply sits there shaking in shock and terror. "...It wasn't a dream...It was a nightmare...He was here."
"Master, there is nothing here."
Ciel looks around, still shaking. He realizes that Sebastian is right. There is no one here. And probably never was.
"Did you have another episode, my lord?" the butler asks, "Moments like that tend to make you hallucinate, remember?"
Ciel nods his head. Yes, it must be that. Nothing more. He takes deep breaths and manages to calm his heart and breathing. It was just my imagination.
"Do you wish for me to call your aunt and tell her to come and see you?" Sebastian asks.
Ciel immediately shakes his head. "No, I rather not. Besides, we all have a busy schedule tomorrow. I prefer not to disturb her with my problems."
"Very well, sir. Would you like for me to make warm milk and honey, to help you go back to sleep?" he asks.
Ciel is tempted to say yes as milk and honey always made him feel better but Tanaka always said that too much sweets are bad for your teeth.
"No, not tonight."
Sebastian gives him a strange look as this is the first time he has rejected sweets. "Are you sure you're all right, young master?"
Ciel doesn't answer his question. Instead, he instructs him to make sure tomorrow's evening dinner is done well. No screw ups.
"I'm going back to sleep," he says as he turns his back to the butler and wraps his body and head with the duvet. He doesn't close his eyes yet though.
"Very well, my young lord," Sebastian says.
Ciel doesn't come out from the duvet until he hears the door shut and the footsteps die out.
He sits up from the bed again and looks around his chamber once more, making sure no one is watching him, before reaching for the nightstand next to his bed and opening the drawer. He takes out a photograph in a square golden frame that has burnt areas. A picture of him, his father Vincent, his mother Rachel, his brother and their dog Sebastian.
Tears filling his eyes, he holds the picture frame in a tight embrace.