I'm sorry, this isn't a Chapter but I had to say this to an anonymous reviewer who decided that the best way to help me improve my writing was to mock me!
English is not my first language so it's quite normal to get some things like the usage of 'on' and 'in' wrong. I try my best and I'm sorry if this doesn't live up to your standards, "Sandy".
Some people have already brought that up to my attention without using the mocking tone you used on your reviews. If I'd known Hawaii 5-0 had such fans, capable of bringing a fellow writer down, I wouldn't have even posted this story to begin with.
For all of you, who are in no way guilty of that, thank you for reviewing my first chapter. I was going to write another one about the five times they almost made it to dinner but those reviews changed my mind. Maybe I just wasn't cut out to write Steve/Catherine. I'm sorry.
Love,
Sarah