Hello readers, I have fixed some of the spelling and tense errors in chapter 1
guest reviewer Wot: its 'exterminated'
a poll is up on my profile to choose the young dragon's name. i can't decide so i give the power to the readers.
All around the young dragon was lush green trees. It can hear the songbirds singing and the insects buzzing. It can feel the smooth wind brushing over its face, the soft grass scratching its feet, the warm sunlight caressing its scales. It can see the endless deep blue sky above filled massive milky cotton balls. But, nothing can compare to the majestic golden globe above.
The young dragon squealed in excitement, eye filled with wonder seeing a world other than caves and caverns for the first time. It is thrilled at seeing something alive for the first time.
A brown blur suddenly zoomed past the young dragon. The young dragon jumped at the abrupt movement. looking closely revealed a small harmless creature with brown fur and a small cute round furry tail.
The young dragon squealed in joy, before it sprinted and chased the small cute creature into the endless green forest.
"It is good to see how spirited you are, young one".
The young dragon frozen, eyes open wide with shook as it heard the voice. The young dragon looked around in confusion but saw nothing other than continues green trees. The young dragon growled in annoyance to hid its uneasy.
"I mean you no harm, young one" the voiced appeared once again.
A ball of bright light suddenly emerged from thin air right in front of the young dragon. It steep back, away from the unknown anomaly.
"Follow the light" the voiced said in its soft gentile voice.
The singing of bird and the soft caress of winds smoothened the young dragon nerves. Its curious natural quickly returning. Interest swiftly defeated worry. The curiosity to see the source of the voice was too high. Excitement returned to its golden eyes. The yearn for adventure that can't wait to be fulfilled.
The young dragon cheerfully followed the ball of light as it floated away toward the unknown.
The young dragon followed the ball of light though the forest, its tail swing around in excitement. It was only a few minutes of walking in the wood before the ball of light stopped in front of a large clearing. The young dragon gasp in surprise at what was it saw.
A gigantic dragon rest in the clearing. The dragon must be at least 15 metres (50 foot) high, its long body seems to stretch behind miles as the young dragon cannot see its tail. Its massive body covered with magnificent golden large scales. Its huge broad wings lay low on its back covered in golden scales like its body. Its long sharp claws shine in the sun light. The dragon stared gentile at the young dragon with its amber eyes.
"Come to me, young one" the gentle voice of the dragon appeared again.
The young dragon looked at the golden dragon with astonishment. Unsure what to do, the young dragon slowly stepped toward the golden dragon, each step filled with uncertainty.
The dragon seems to grin as the voice laughed. "I don't bite, young one" the voice said in kind.
Finally making up its mind, the young dragon moved swiftly toward the older dragon with confident. As the young dragon get close to its elder, it once again admired its massive body.
Stopping right in front of it, the young dragon and the golden dragon stared at each other. The golden dragon stared in gentle kindness, while the young dragon stared in curiosity and confusion.
The young dragon opened its mouth to speak, but realizing immediately that It doesn't know how. The young dragon may understand what the older dragon is saying, but still it can't speak. The young dragon opened its mouth awkwardly trying to replicate the older dragon's words, but failing. Only cute unrecognizable noise came out of the young dragon's mouth. The young dragon stomped the ground in frustration, puffing its face in annoyance.
The golden dragon seems to notice the problem too. Quickly rising its claws, a light appeared and headed straight for the young dragon. The moved in lightning speed, hitting the surprised young dragon.
"What?!" the young dragon spoke in wonder, before covering its mouth with its paw in shook. Words, knowledge the young dragon never learned appeared in its mind. It is like the knowledge has been injected into its mind though the light.
The elder dragon chuckled in amusement at the young dragon's confusion.
"Pff" the young dragon puffed its mouth in annoyance.
Finally, elder dragon's laughter died out.
"Though magic, we dragons can past on knowledge to each other" Seeing the young dragon's still confused face, the elder dragon explained.
The elder dragon's explanation filled the young dragon with astonishment. The young dragon's mind spined fast in excitement at the thought of magic.
After a dozen second of excitement, the young dragon finally got over the wonder of magic.
Finally, the young dragon asked the big question. "Where em I and whu are you" the young dragon asked, voice shaky and filled with error.
The elder dragon replaced its causal look with serious one. "I am the last dragon queen and a guardian of light, I am here to guide you young one" the royal dragon said, its gentle voice now also filled with authority and power. "and this is a phantom world created by 'the Dragon Legacy' and what remains of my soul for your mind".
The young dragon looked trouble, the opposite of its joyful self few seconds ago. "What remainnn of your soul?" the young dragon asked, filled with worry for its friend. Yes, friend. The young dragon has rapidly grown to like the golden dragon despite just meeting.
The Royal dragon sighed before answering the young dragon. "I have been dead for a very long time" The royal dragon explained grimly. "And I can't be with you for much longer".
The sudden surprising new shocked the young dragon into dismay. "But, but, who would guide me and stay with me?" The young dragon asked in misery, heartbroken at the idea of being alone again. After many hundred years of alone in the cold dark caverns, the young dragon doesn't want to give up the warmth of companionship and affection. Especially, this soon after finding this warmth. Tears dripped down the suffering young dragon's face, at the thought of returning to that darkness that not even delicious red gems could drive away.
The royal dragon quietly low down its head and gently brushed the young dragon with its head in hope of bring comfort. "'The Dragon Legacy' Is the complete collection of all the important knowledge of the dragon, the knowledge will guide you" the royal dragon revealed, wanting cheer up the young dragon's mood. "You won't be alone for long, I promise" the royal dragon said, with a soft sad smile.
"You promise?" the young dragon asked desperately, golden eyes filled with native hope at the royal dragon's promise.
The royal dragon only nodded with its sad smile.
Suddenly, the ground tumbled as the world itself shook. All around the dragons, tress rattled. The world became completely silent. The animal and insects that once could have been heard, have seemly disappeared in an instance. The sky began to darken like a brewing storm.
The young dragon gasped in shock at the sudden change, can only weakly stare at the royal dragon for answer. The royal dragon exhale before answering the young dragon's obvious question. "your knowledge transfer must be close to the end." The royal dragon answered. "'The Dragon Legacy's power is depleting as it completes its purpose. Without its power, this little phantom world we created for your mind is fading."
The second time today, the young dragon could only look dumbstruck at the royal dragon.
"'The Dragon Legacy' have been transferring its massive storage of knowledge to your brain when we talked." The royal dragon continued, turning completely serious. "Remember, beware of the witch and her pets. She and her pet are creatures of darkness. They will look for you. The will hunt you. Find the wizard, he will help you."
Many questions filled the young dragon's mind. Who is the witch? Why do she want to hunt the young dragon? Who is the wizard? Before the young dragon could ask those crucial questions, A sharp pain strike the young the dragon's head and mind. The young dragon could only hold its head in pain. The young dragon world begins to turn white.
Before the young dragon lose its consciousness, it heard the royal dragon one last time. "you are the last dragon. Live on and carry our legacy."
The young dragon awoke from its slumber with a monster headache. The young dragon can feel its mind and brain being flooded with foreign knowledge. The young dragon could think of anything, except only hold its head in pain.
It seems like hours for the young dragon, before the pounding headache begin to decrease and die out. The foreign knowledge begins to settle in the young dragon's mind and subconscious.
It was after the pain has finally faded, the young dragon stood up and scanned around. The young dragon was still in the temple before it touched. The young dragon's thought stopped there as it swiftly turned its head to the statue of the Dragon Queen. Where there once stood the shining golden dragon statue, now only lay a pile of crumbled colourless rock. 'The Dragon Legacy' seemingly cannot maintain its form after passing on the archive of knowledge.
A renewed grief of sorrow hit the young dragon at the thought of the dragon queen. However, before the young dragon could mourn her lost friend and think about anything else, it felt something.
A cold chill went down the young dragon's spine as it sense waves and waves of darkness coming….. coming toward it.
The young dragon instantly knows it need to move. It needs to leave now!
Instantly, the young dragon darted toward one of the dark eastern tunnel. The young dragon's subconscious tells it, this is the way out. This however, after the young dragon grabbed and swallowed a delicious hot red gem to satisfy its long-ignored belly.
The young dragon rushed rapidly though the dark silent tunnel as the it senses the wave of darkness getting closer.
It was only minutes in the darkness before the young dragon saw light.
The young dragon bolted toward the light, the exit to the 'real' world. The young dragon closed its eyes to adjust as its physical body made contact with sun light for the first time.
The young dragon could hear the familiar singing of birds and the buzzing of insect. It could feel the familiar feeling of wind brushing past its scale. But, those are not what attracted the young dragon's attention.
There they are, monsters in complete grim black covered with fragment of pale white bones. They stared at the young dragon with their blood thirsty crimson red eyes. The young dragon could feel the hate and anger they are emitting. The young dragon instantly knows what they are. They are the Witch's pet, they are the minions of darkness. Their frightening howls filled the air as they charged at the young dragon.
The young dragon dodged clumsily as a wolf like monster leaped toward it. However, the young dragon's clumps dodge left it self open to another wolf monster that took the opportunity to sink its razor-sharp teeth at the young dragon front right leg.
The young dragon felt pinches of pain like being stabbed by needles. The young dragon gives a powerful roar, filled with power and strength. Unlike the quite cute noise-roar the young dragon did when it just hatched. Swiftly, the young dragon smashed its front right leg hard into the ground along with the wolf monster.
A crater formed around the wolf monster as it slides down the young dragon's front right leg. Cracks formed on its only head bone as the monster whinnied in pain before going completely quiet. The wolf monster quickly begins to disintegrate into the air.
The other wolf monster attacked once again. The monster slashed with its claws only for the young dragon to block it with its own claws. The young dragon pushed the monster back before taking a swift plain strike of its own.
The strike hit hard as the monster flow back the way it came before hitting a tree hard. Sound of bones cracking could be heard as the monster dropped hard onto the dented tree. Soon it begins to disintegrate like its buddy.
Before the young dragon could celebrate its small victory, dozens if not hundreds of monsters charged toward it. The young dragon could feel its subconscious telling it to stand and fight like a prideful dragon. But, this time the young dragon chooses to ignore its subconscious. Even at a young age, the young dragon knows when a battle can't be win. Instead of fight and dying stupidly for pride, the young dragon chooses the smart way. Swiftly, the young dragon turned and run the opposite direction of the monsters, East.
What do you guys think? please tell me.
All criticism and feedback is appropriated
I had some spelling error in the young dragon's dialogue in purpose to show in don't just become proficient in a skill when you get a dragon knowledge transfer. If you spot any other spelling/tense/grammar error, please point it out in a review or message me.
I hope you guys like the dialogue and combat i wrote.
This chapter is a few hundred word shorter than chapter 1 but, i think is a good place to stop.
I also can't decide the young dragon's name between 'Silver' and 'Silfur' (which is silver in Icelandic, i google translated silver in a dozen language for a appropriate one), i know so creative (not).
if you have a name (word) that is good, feel free to tell me. I might pick it to be the young dragon's name. Though it must translation of or related to silver, or a item of silver colour.
edit: fixed some spelling error in PS + story.
edit 2: a poll is up on my profile to choose the young dragon's name. i can't decide so i give the power to the readers.