Authors Notes,
i was sent a pm from mister bland that said the following.
"That would make for a good author's note, but I'm not sure if it elicits an entire chapter. By my recommendation I only meant to suggest that you provide more literary back-story to your idea. As of now, you have a description of 'this land' (Florces, I presume) and that they have developed a technology that turns pokémon into weapons and inherited a distant culture of gyms and battling. The main reason I called this idea interesting is because of the various applicable motifs you could choose to go on about: - Is there a conflict between a pokémon remaining in their real form and turning into a weapon? The basics of the transformation may allude to a conflict between man and nature, and whether pokémon are allies or tools. Will there be some gym leaders who only see their pokémon as methods to enhance themselves, and will there be those who wish to preserve a pokémon's autonomy and contrast these utilitarian gym leaders? - Why was the weapon technology created? From your description, it is used as a method of self defense. The origins of the ability, however, may lie at the inside of the main conflict of said power. These two ideas brought me to suggest adding more back-story, especially in the first chapter. An instant way to characterize your quartet of starting adventurers is to show their reactions to the pokémon. Will they be split by their view of how and when to use this power? Are some of them too naive to have an opinion on the issue yet? Of course, your story is entirely yours, and this is just some friendly discussion to help you on your way. None of these ideas need be considered if you wish to trust yourself more than you trust an outside, unfamiliar source- which is perfectly reasonable. I am definitely not ragging on your story. Keep up the good work."
Now i will be doing these notes probably between the chapters, and i am going to answer the questions he asked.
1. Yes there is conflict, but some of the trainers can't hear the voice of their pokemon. there will be gym leaders who use the pokemon to enhance themselves, since the idea behind my story is off pictures that someone drew, there are some pokemon who turn into armor.
2. the weapon technology was created so that in case of a war between other nations, Florces would be able to protect themselves better, and have many means of fighting.
As i said some trainers can't hear the "voice", when i wrote about a "voice" inside of daxie's head i was talking about him hearing his pokemons voice.
with the group, Daxie is the most scared and doesnt know what to do with the power that he has. Ana uses weapons more, because since she was a little kid she watched her dad use his pokemon like that. D.A. the most chilled of the group likes to switch between forms. Matt he just wants to have a partner with him, and doesnt care about what will happen to himself as long as his partner is fine.