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Chapter 1- Meet Petalpaw
Petalpaw crept toward a rabbit, carelessly disturbing a leaf. The rabbit sat up, suddenly alert. Petalpaw desperately lunged, but the rabbit was too fast. "Mouse dung!" she cursed. Nightbird, her mentor, padded to Petalpaw and sat. "It's alright, Petalpaw! That was amazing! You already have two pieces of freshkill and it's only your first day as an apprentice!" she praised. "Now let's get your prey back to camp." Petalpaw beamed all the way from the hunting grounds back to WindClan camp.
When Petalpaw reached the middle of camp, she heard an excited squeal. Petalpaw turned and saw her sister, Sweetpaw, barreling toward her. "How'd you do?" Sweetpaw asked breathlessly. "Two voles," Petalpaw meowed proudly. "You?" "Sweetpaw smild shyly. "A vole and a mouse, but I almost caught a blackbird!" she exclaimed. Another voice spoke from behind Petalpaw. "Are you sure it's your first day?" Petalpaw whirled around, seeing a familiar tom. "Seedpaw! You scared me!" she exclaimed. "You two did awesome for your first day!" Seedpaw congratulated. I didn't catch anything on my first day!"
Petalpaw was about to reply when Honeybee rushed into the camp with Tulippaw and Dewfrost hot on her heels. Petalpaw shot to her paws. "What's wrong?" Sweetpaw asked. "ShadowClan," Honeybee panted. "They've invaded!"
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