Some more fixes.

Third person p.o.v

Ryan was on a date with someone he met last week, the date had just ended and they were both leaving separately, so as Ryan was driving home, the city was oddly quiet for night time. Then he felt a thud as if he ran something over, so he stopped the car and got out to see what it was, but was dumbstruck when he saw that there was nothing there. He decided that he should go back in the car, however when he went to start the car it didn't start, so after trying a couple of times he gave up and left the car to find some help. He saw no one and even stranger all the shops and clubs were closed, with this Ryan couldn't help but feel freaked out.

He started to whisper to himself "okay Ryan, calm down, it's the case it's getting to you just like that other case." But that didn't help.

He had this nagging feeling in the pit of his stomach telling him that he's in danger, but he kept walking, then he heard footsteps coming from behind him, so he turned around to see who it was but no one was there. As he was turning back around someone tackled him, it was a woman, she had him pinned to the ground. He tried to push her off but she was too strong for him. She started to lower her head to his neck. Just before she reached his neck she was face to face with him, she was taunting him as she smiled a sinister little smile and that's when Ryan saw something sharp in her mouth. She then went for his neck, with this Ryan felt a really sharp pain that made him scream out, then he soon started to feel drowsy to the point of passing out. The next day the police were setting up a perimeter around a street in the city, and the CSIs were investigating a car and the surrounding area. Lieutenant cane did not look happy as he walked up to Walter who was checking the car.

"Walter did you find anything?

"Just some prints and a cellphone is still in the car."

"Find out whose prints those are."

Walter just nodded and went back to work, meanwhile Eric was investigating a related scene a block away, and Natalia was also there.

"I found a watch" Natalia said.

They found some blood, so they swabbed it and packed up the evidence for the lab, Horatio however was concerned about the fact that blood was found. Eric and Natalia analyzed the blood at the lab, and the blood came back as a match to Ryan's DNA on file.

"Dammit, Ryan why did you leave your car" Eric said to himself.

Natalia overheard and said, "maybe he had to leave it."

He didn't even reply to her, he was just mad because a coworker, a friend went missing, and as bad as it already was it was already on the news that a CSI went missing.

Main character p.o.v

I was on the bus on my way out of town till I heard on the radio that a CSI had gone missing, and I knew that 'they' were behind it. 'They' were starting to dig their claws deeper in this town and what better way to do so than to take a cop. 'They' needed to put a few of "them" in law enforcement and politics, though "They" already have 'them' in the medical field here. I knew something had to be done so I told the bus driver to stop, thankfully we were still in Miami and not in the middle of nowhere. I need to find the CSI before it's too late, so I went to the one place I knew I could find answers. It was an old run-down building, there is someone who lives here that works for 'them', and he could tell me where they kept the victims that they were turning. I walked into the building and was disgusted with what I saw, the floor was crawling with cockroaches and rats, the building looked as if it was crumbling from the inside out, and there was an extremely foul odor in the air. The person who I'm looking for is named Tony, a former friend. I came to a room which had the numbers "67" on the door, I knocked on the door but no one answered so I knocked down the door. Tony was there but he looked both scared and angry.

"What the hell is wrong with you, you don't just knock a guy's door down. Besides this isn't like you, Jamie, usually by now you would be running away with your tail between your legs."

"Tony I'm quite surprised that you still haven't told "them" that you know me. Besides I can't run yet, there is something very important that I need to do and I'm pretty sure you know what it is." I said.

"You're here about the cop, aren't you?"

"So, so what if I am are you going to help me or are you going to be a coward and save your own skin?"

"You know that if I help you 'they' will kill me, do you want that?"

"Well I wasn't the one who decided to betray my friends and go over to 'their' side now was I? You dug your own grave Tony."

He had a pained look on his face at what I had said.

It made me feel bad but I needed to get that information, so I said, "Look Tony you can tell me what I need to know and I will make it look like you had no choice but to tell me, okay?"

He said "Fine, but you better make it look good."

He told me where they were keeping the CSI and I beat him up so that it looked like I had tortured him for the information. I now had to go to this small remote town just outside of the city, it was surrounded by swamp and it wasn't on any maps, so I had to hitchhike to get there. When I got there the town looked abandoned and the people who gave me the ride told me good luck because there's this rumor going around that if anyone goes near this town they aren't heard from again, if Tony told the truth then I know why that is. I was glad that it was daytime because trying to find a vampire's hangout is difficult enough without it being dark. I noticed this building that looked big enough to hold their victims, so I went inside, and as I went in it was dark inside and I could hear footsteps and voices down the hall so I had to be careful. I have this special ingredient that I rubbed on myself to hide my scent from the vampires, though had to hide myself as two of them were walking by, they were talking about the CSI.

"Has he woken up yet"

"Do you mean the new guy, no he hasn't, in fact I don't think he's finished changing"

"Where do you think they're keeping him"

"I think he's on the second floor somewhere".

I headed to the second floor, I could hear screaming and animalistic sounds. I started looking in rooms to find him but because I am in the enemy's nest I need to be very careful while I look through the rooms. One room I saw a couple of sleeping vampires and another there was nothing. Then I came upon a room with one person. That person was sleeping and I went to see if he had any fangs, I know that's a bad idea but I did it anyways. He didn't have any fangs but he did feel a little cold to the touch, of course just as I was taking my hand away from him he woke up. He looked at me and started to get a confused look on his face.

"Are you a CSI" I asked

He looked at me confused and replied "Yes".

He was about to ask a question when I said, "We don't have time for that right now, we need to get out of here."

He nodded and followed me, and as we were going down the hall way three vampires noticed us.

"Hey where are you going." one of them hissed.

I grabbed a knife that I hid in my jacket, and drenched it with a vial of water I had as well. One of the vampires lunged at me and I cut her with the knife, she screamed in pain, the reason why is because that water was holy water, with this the CSI looked confused at what was happening.

The woman recovered and screamed "You bitch" then she came at me again.

This time I threw the knife at her, and it hit her in the eye and she screamed while trying to get it out. I took out another knife and waited for the others to attack, but they came at me as a team this time and that caught me off guard. The CSI helped me with one of them and I managed to hit the other in the heart he did turn in to dust (not every vampire does that, if you don't believe me watch vampire movies such as the lost boys). The other vampire got out of the CSI's arms that were holding her by knocking him in the face with her elbow. I opened the bottle with the Holy water and threw it on her. She screamed while holding her face and running around in the hall just like her friend with the knife in her eye.

"Hey now's the time to get out of here, let's go." I told the CSI, he nodded yes and then we headed to the stairs.

We ran down the stairs and into the first-floor hall, though we had to be careful because there were like six vampires in the hall. I took out a smoke grenade and before I let it go in the hall I told him that we would have to run like hell to the door. I released the trigger on the grenade and threw it, then it started to spew smoke and the vampires started to cough (vampires can be disoriented by smoke but only for a little while).

I said "Now" and we covered our faces and ran to the door.

Once we were outside the CSI squinted even though the sun was on the other side of the building, that was most likely because of the fact that he was turning. I turned around to look at the building and I saw a woman, a vampire watching us and speaking to another vampire, though I was surprised that no one was coming out to chase us, but surprising of all was that the people who helped me get here were waiting.

They said, "Get in" and we drove off.

The people who were helping us said "We thought that you might of disappear like many others, thank goodness, we came back and you found your friend, that's good"

" Yeah "I replied.

While we were in the car I said, "I think I should ask the guy I'm helping for his name"

The CSI turned to me and said "Ryan, my name is Ryan Wolfe"

"Okay Ryan well I'm Jamie and when we get to my friend's house I'll tell you everything I know about this situation."

"I thank you for helping me and all but I really think that I should go to the hospital or the police."

"That would be a big mistake."

Ryan looked like he was going to argue with me but he saw that the look on my face was serious and minded his own business. We got to my friend's house and the people who helped us left, Mike's house is very secluded which is good. We walked up to the house and the moment Mike saw us he raised a crossbow at Ryan.

"Whoa wait a minute, you don't have to do this just put down the crossbow, okay." Ryan was trying to talk Mike out of shooting him.

"Mike put it down he's not one of them."

Mike replied, "Not yet but he will be even with the medicine."

Ryan started to look confused.

"Remember that I was going to tell you what's going on, well I will as soon as Mike." I nodded my head towards Mike while rolling my eyes "Puts down his weapon then we can go inside and discuss about it."

Mike, looking a little disappointed, puts down the crossbow and said, "Fine but he's your responsibility."

I said "Okay." then we headed inside.

Third person p.o.v

(A little earlier when they were back at the building)

While Ryan and Jamie ran out of the building this woman was standing at a Window watching them. A vampire came in the room and said, "mistress they're escaping, should I call the others to get them?"

"no, let them go, the CSI will come to us on his own and the hunter will not be a problem." she said.

"But Rebecca Bane the plan will be ruined."

The vampire tried to argue Rebecca laughed and said, "Foolish child everything is going as planned."

The vampire looked confused "But I thought the plan was different than what is happening."

"Shhh, everything will be fine, now leave me."

With that the vampire left the room.

Rebecca said to herself "Yes little hunter I knew you wouldn't be able to resist saving him. Soon you will be in the palms of my hands." she then laughed manically.