Okay this one's about Smokepaw! I did this chapter a different way, because if I didn't, it would just be one long paragraph in italics XD


Spoilers for: Dawn


Walking along a cliff with my Clan.

Why do I have to do this? I'd rather clean the elders' den.

I look up at my mother Nightwing, whose black pelt is shining in the sun high light. I smell rocks, debris, and ThunderClan.

Ugh, why do I have to go with ThunderClan?

I see a small piece of borage on a rock ledge. I walk towards it.

Maybe I can give it to Littlecloud.

My mom looks towards me, and her eyes fill with terror. I roll my dark amber eyes, but look down.

It is really deep…but I heard Littlecloud say he needs borage. It's a risk I'll take.

I continue walking towards the leaf, until I can grasp it in my jaws. I pick it up, and smile.

I got it. See, Mom?

Suddenly, I feel the rock ledge give away. I wail in terror as bits and pieces fall off. I attempt to scamper away, but the rock gives away, and I plunge into the depths of the gorge.

I'm falling! Mom! Help me! Blackstar! Anyone? Please!

I struggle in the air, the borage still in my jaws. I hear my clan mates' desperate screams. But on top of all of them, I hear my mother's loud wail.

Mom! Please, don't grieve too long!

I attempt to look up, but dust and rocks cloud my vision.

How far is it until I die? Please, StarClan! Just end my suffering right here.

Pointy rocks scrape against my fur, and I yowl in pain. I suddenly hit cold ground. My breath comes in short gasps.

I'm dead. I'm dead. I'm dead.

I lay on the stony ground, waiting to die, the borage still in my jaws.

StarClan, take me now. Please…I don't want to live without Mother or ShadowClan.

I think about the cats that led me to my death. Tawnypelt, Stormfur, Brambleclaw, Crowpaw, and a ginger she-cat whose name I couldn't remember.

It's their fault I'm lying on the ground, dying! It's their fault I would never see my mother again! It's their fault I'll never let ShadowClan know I'm a true warrior…


Some alternate endings to this:

1. He admits to himself that he likes Squirrelpaw XD I ditched that one because I thought it just seemed to awkward.

2. He survives, and changes his name to Smoke. I skipped it because an eight moon apprentice would not survive a fall that large.


Any ideas?