Okay this one's about Smokepaw! I did this chapter a different way, because if I didn't, it would just be one long paragraph in italics XD
Spoilers for: Dawn
Walking along a cliff with my Clan.
Why do I have to do this? I'd rather clean the elders' den.
I look up at my mother Nightwing, whose black pelt is shining in the sun high light. I smell rocks, debris, and ThunderClan.
Ugh, why do I have to go with ThunderClan?
I see a small piece of borage on a rock ledge. I walk towards it.
Maybe I can give it to Littlecloud.
My mom looks towards me, and her eyes fill with terror. I roll my dark amber eyes, but look down.
It is really deep…but I heard Littlecloud say he needs borage. It's a risk I'll take.
I continue walking towards the leaf, until I can grasp it in my jaws. I pick it up, and smile.
I got it. See, Mom?
Suddenly, I feel the rock ledge give away. I wail in terror as bits and pieces fall off. I attempt to scamper away, but the rock gives away, and I plunge into the depths of the gorge.
I'm falling! Mom! Help me! Blackstar! Anyone? Please!
I struggle in the air, the borage still in my jaws. I hear my clan mates' desperate screams. But on top of all of them, I hear my mother's loud wail.
Mom! Please, don't grieve too long!
I attempt to look up, but dust and rocks cloud my vision.
How far is it until I die? Please, StarClan! Just end my suffering right here.
Pointy rocks scrape against my fur, and I yowl in pain. I suddenly hit cold ground. My breath comes in short gasps.
I'm dead. I'm dead. I'm dead.
I lay on the stony ground, waiting to die, the borage still in my jaws.
StarClan, take me now. Please…I don't want to live without Mother or ShadowClan.
I think about the cats that led me to my death. Tawnypelt, Stormfur, Brambleclaw, Crowpaw, and a ginger she-cat whose name I couldn't remember.
It's their fault I'm lying on the ground, dying! It's their fault I would never see my mother again! It's their fault I'll never let ShadowClan know I'm a true warrior…
Some alternate endings to this:
1. He admits to himself that he likes Squirrelpaw XD I ditched that one because I thought it just seemed to awkward.
2. He survives, and changes his name to Smoke. I skipped it because an eight moon apprentice would not survive a fall that large.
Any ideas?
