I've decided to continue this commentary. There's not really anything else to say. Enjoy.


Chapter 3.

AN: STOP FLAMMING DA STORY PREPZ OK!(EVERYBODY FLAME!) odderwize fangs 2 da goffik ppl 4 da good reveiws(In case anyone was wondering about the good reviews, they were all TROLLS!)! FANGS AGEN RAVEN! oh yeah, BTW I don't own dis or da lyrics 4 Good Chralotte.(I actually like the song featured in this chapter)

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On the night of the concert I put on my black lace-up boots with high heels(don't care.). Underneath them were ripped red fishnets(still don't care). Then I put on a black leather minidress(I really don't need to know this.) with all this corset stuff on the back and front. (This isn't the Hogwarts uniform, in case you're wondering) I put on matching fishnet on my arms. I straightened my hair and made it look all spiky.(How DO you make long hair spiky) I felt a little depressed then, so I slit one of my wrists(I don't...wait a minute...where did that come from?). I read a depressing book while I waited for it to stop bleeding(You must be able to deal with tremendous amounts of pain) and I listened to some GC. I painted my nails black and put on TONS of black eyeliner. (YES, TONS!)Then I put on some black lipstick. I didn't put on foundation because I was pale anyway.(then why did you put it on in the last two chapter) I drank some human blood so I was ready to go to the concert.(YOU NEED TO SUCK BLOOD FROM A VICTIM)

I went outside.(ORLY?) Draco was waiting there in front of his flying car.(That's a muggle invention) He was wearing a Simple Plan t-shirt (they would play at the show too), baggy black skater pants(don't care), black nail polish and a little eyeliner (AN: A lot fo kewl boiz wer it ok!).

"Hi Draco!" I said in a depressed voice.(If you're depressed, then don't use exclamation points)

"Hi Ebony." he said back. We walked into his flying black Mercedes-Benz(The flying car in the series was a Ford Anglia, idiot!) (the license plate said 666(You can't do that.) and flew to the place with the concert. On the way we listened excitedly to Good Charlotte and Marilyn Manson(You're probably going to hear those songs again at the concert). We both smoked cigarettes and drugs(don't follow their examples). When we got there, we both hopped out of the car. We went to the mosh pit at the front of the stage and jumped up and down as we listened to Good Charlotte.(BOOOORRINNG)

"You come in cold, you're covered in blood
They're all so happy you've arrived
The doctor cuts your cord, hands you to your mom
She sets you free into this life.(I actually kind of like that song)" sang Joel (I don't own da lyrics 2 dat song).

"Joel is so fucking hot." I said to Draco, pointing to him as he sung, filling the club with his amazing voice.(You don't say that to your date!)

Suddenly Draco looked sad.(See!)

"What's wrong(Ebony, you should know)?" I asked as we moshed to the music. Then I caught on.(Now you realize? Wow.)

"Hey, it's ok I don't like him better than YOU!" I said.

"Really?" asked Draco sensitively and he put his arm around me all protective.(Excuse me while I go and throw up. *walks away to the garbage can*)

"Really." I said. "Besides I don't even know Joel and he's going out with Hilary fucking Duff(They've broken up since. But there's another question. If, according to Ebony, the goths and preps are engaged in Conflict Ball, then why is a prep dating a goth?). I fucking hate that little bitch." I said disgustedly, thinking of her ugly blonde face.

The night went on really well, and I had a great time. (I'm currently listening to Stevo the Human's reading of "Reimu fights the bad guys of adrkness"! I suggest you check it out. Also, if you want to read the fanfic itself, Talos Angel has it up! Random suggestion)So did Draco. After the concert, we drank some beer and asked Benji and Joel for their autographs and photos with them.(They denied your request because you're creepy!) We got GC concert tees. Draco and I crawled back(you're drunk, aren't you?) into the Mercedes-Benz, but Draco didn't go back into Hogwarts, instead he drove the car into… the Forbidden Forest!(HUH!)


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