I want to respond to every review in the story. I've already responded to St Elmo's Fire and Istwill56, so now The FieryCharmeleon. Thanks for the nice review! The 4th wall moments were kinda cringy looking back at them. The grammar isn't the best i've seen, but it is alright. And yeah, St Elmo's Fire does always look at the bad things, and never compliments the things done well. One more thing, whenever i look at, or even hear the word Charmeleon, i think of that moment in the manga were a Charmeleon cuts an Arbok in half. Also, he posted another review for chapter 2 (While i was working on chapter 3)! Ok, maybe i'm stupid, or it's some joke, but i don't see a difference between the 2 times you said "Did she say we've come far?" Also, the battle system is very similar to the games because it is literally what happened in the game while i was playing. The story is a little bland but, like i said in the description, i while start taking creative liberty with the story. Maybe i'm just cautious of people hating me (being an introvert) so sorry if this is sounding a bit rude (it does to me.). I'm never able to read long authors notes, so time to move on to the story.
Mercury and Lillie walked down town. They saw Hala and Hau trying to move a Tauros in the way. "Come on, move!" Hau said. Mercury and Lillie walked over. "Oh, hey Mercury!" Hau said "How's Rowlet going?" Mercury looked directly at him "It's Raider." he said. "I guess it's time i get old Tauros back home." Hala said "Oh but why don't you give him a little pat first, Mercury?" Mercury looked confused. "Why the Muk do i have to do that?" Mercury asked. He walked up to Tauros and patted his head. "Ha ha ha! You see that? This rascal already loves you!" Hala said. Then he says something about Pokemon Care. Hala left. "So where are you 2 love birds going?" Hau said. Lillie looked frustrated at Hau calling them "love birds," but didn't say anything. "I was thinking i should show Mercury around Hau'oli City a bit." Lillie answered. Hau, for some reason, got excited. "Nice idea! You're always on top of things, Lillie!" he said "Mercury just got here to Alola, like 3 chapters ago, huh? Then let me tag along, too! I wanna go get something good to eat!" Lillie shook her head. "All right. Let's all go together." she said.
"I hope Hau doesn't keep shipping me and Lillie." Mercury thought while walking to Hau'oli City. Hau said some unimportant stuff, Mercury got a cool feature on his Rotom Dex that he's never gonna use, moving on. Mercury went to the clothes shop, and noticed Lillie there. "Oh. Mercury..." she said "Tell me, do you pick out all your own clothes?" Mercury thought about it. "Well, my mom doesn't let me wear clothes with skulls on them." he answered. "I...I've always just worn the clothes that my mother wanted me to wear." Lillie responded "I don't really know what kind of thing would suit me... Oh! But that's not why i stopped you. I meant to give you this, Mercury." She handed him a Lens Case. "It looks like we have something in common now, don't we Mercury? Hee..." Mercury was wondering why that situation had to be so awkward, but he just tried to ignore her weird "Hee." Hau ran over to them. "Come on, Lurcury! There's still more to see!" Hau said. Mercury looked mad. "DID HE JUST CALL US LURCURY!?" He thought. So far, there are 2 running gags with Hau.
Mercury got some new clothes. He got a Red Tee, and black Caprisuns- i mean black Capri Pants. Mercury heard some people talking about some Team Skull things at the Marina... again... apparently. He went to see the Team Skull people... but got stopped by that BISHARP HAU! "Howzit, Mercury! If you're looking for good eats, you've found 'em!" he said walking out of the malasada shop. He said some more things about them being delicious, looking like a walking advertisement. Mercury got to the Marina and saw some weird thugs fighting Ilima. "So, Cap, just give up the Pokemon, yo." the thugs said. "Oh! You, from the Trainers' School!" Ilima said "Already made your way to Hau'oli City, hmm?" The Team Skull grunts got frustrated. "What, what!? Why you trying to act hard when we're already hard as a bone out here, homie?" they said.
"Yo, let's check these fools." Ilima looked over at Mercury. "Oh my... How terrifying..." he said "Only thieves steal people's Pokemon. I won't stand for it. Mercury, wasn't it? I'll ask you to take care of that one. I'll get rid of this one."
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Team Skull Grunt sent out Zubat.
Mercury sent out Thunder.
Thunder used Thunder Shock.
It's super effective!
Zubat fainted.
Well that was quick...
]
"No fair! I was playing a different game!" one of the grunts said. "Let's get up out this port, B! Nobody has to know about this!" the other said. They left. "My thanks to you and your Pokemon." Ilima said "Why don't i heal your team express my gratitude?" He healed Mercury's team. "I must admit, I've been wondering about you since i saw you at the Trainer School... Professor Kukui brought you along, and you and your Pokemon seemed to defeat our teacher so effortlessly! Very well then! Allow me to see if you're ready for my trial!" Mercury realized Ilima wanted to battle, so they did.
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Ilima sent out Yungoo's.
Mercury sent out Thunder.
Thunder used Thunder Shock.
Yungoo's was Paralyzed.
Yungoo's used Pursuit.
Yungoo's sucked, barely doing anything. But... Thunder was the same.
Ilima used Full Restore.
Thunder used Magnet Bomb.
GOOD ARCEUS! Why do you need a full restore for that!? It's just a Yungoo's, and only because of the paralysis! I can't buy those until WAY later on!
Anyways, Thunder used Magnet Bomb.
Yungoo's used Leer.
Okay, the AI is kinda stupid. If the Pokemon is going to faint the very next turn, why don't you damage the opponent rather than lower the opponents defense.
Ilima used... another, MUKING FULL RESTORE!
Thunder used Magnet Bomb.
I'm going to skip to after i stopped spamming Magnet Bomb.
{
Thunder grew to level 10
Defense + 2
Sp. ATK + 2
Sp. DEF + 2
everything else + 1
}
Ilima sent out Smeargle.
Mercury switched to Raider.
Smeargle used Ember.
It's super effective!
Raider used Leafage.
Oh boy... both my Pokemon are weak to fire-type...
Smeargle used Ember.
It's super effective!
Raider used Leafage.
I'm gonna have to switch to Thunder after 2 more turns, because Ilima is obviously gonna heal.
Well, he didn't, but i didn't get to attack to get rid of the, like, 4 HP Smeargle had left.
FAIL!
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While Mercury was waiting for his Pokemon to be healed, he tried thinking of a way to defeat Ilima. "GRIND!" Mercury thought. Now it's GRIND TIME... please do not say anything about that... Mercury noticed a Wingull. "Let's catch that!" he thought. He caught it "I'll name you Vortex!" he said.
{
Thunder grew to level 12
Thunder forgot Tackle and learned Thunder Wave.
I'm too lazy to grind more.
}
So, what if i were to end this chapter a bit early. CLIFFHANGER! YOU DON'T KNOW IF I'LL WIN! I will, it's obvious.
So far, i have 2 running gags with Hau. Hau shipping Mercury and Lillie, and Hau calling Raider Rowlet. I think I might do something like Phineas and Ferb where they make fun of there own cliches. While writing this i thought of something else i was gonna say here... but i forgot... OH YEAH! While i was looking at the unnecessarily long Authors Note i was thinking about a problem i have with reading. I suck at reading, and when i'm reading a paragraph, i'll finish one line and start reading the next... but i'm actually reading the same line i just finished. I'm probably not the only one that has that problem.