Shadow queen daughter of hades: please explain your character
NightmareTheFoxWitch:FoxClan is all done with taking in characters maybe WolfClan? Also no sufixes like dream cats do not use that for suffixes (not saying you have to change it all I'll just have a different suffix in the story because of some trolls)
Also guys I noticed some of the characters kind of had a mary/suish kind of appearance (not trying to be mean!) So I'm going to write down the things that I don't allow in my story and some cat genetics.
Cat Genetics:
Cats MUST MUST have white fur to have blue eyes
Cats that are all white and have blue eyes have an 80% chance of being deaf
Tortoiseshell toms are impossible in the wild
(I just put the basics of things that most writers tend to get wrong)
Prefixes and Suffixes:
* Moon - Moons are sacred to the cats example: Moonstone and The Moonpool I don't think the cats would name their kit that. (Moonflower was a mistake the Erins made)
* Unacceptable suffixes/prefixes - Lunar,Oblivion,Plasma,Knife,Candy etc cats do not know what these things are therefore how can they name their kit that?
* Death/Skull/Blood this is just stupid I don't think a queen after delivering her wonderful bundle of joy wants to name them Death or Skull -_-
* Dream an unacceptable suffix aswell none of the Erins have used it and dreams are interpretations for the medicine cats to interpret from.
Pelt Description:
Ok this is a very easy thing to do just first of I'll list the existing kinds of Pelts and eye colors
* Golden eyes are possible!
* yellow eyes. * Tortoiseshell she-cat (only no tortie toms!)
* green eyes. * Golden tabby/ginger/cream furred
* blue eyes. * Silver/gray/blue-gray/white
* amber eyes. * brown/dark ginger/brown reddish
And yeah I think I might of missed something but I just listed the basic. So to make a non mary sueish description
Example:
Blazeheart: I ginger cream furred she-cat with amber eyes
Simple right?! A bad description is like this:
Blazeheart: A shiny ginger cream furred she-cat cat with vividly shining amber eyes
No.
How hard is it just to say: has amber eyes?
How hard is it to say: a ginger cream furred?
Ok? This is easy stuff! I hope this helped you guys and yes I may have changed some of your guys descriptions because I didn't like them and it sounded Mary-sueish! So again hope this helps I am just trying to help I don't want to fight.
Silversky~