Ijust wanna reply to a review made by

Oquelly, mainlyto clear somethings up.

1. I don't know why but some words didn't have a space in between even though I Putthem.

2. I'll try to make chapters more longer, it was just that I didn't feel like continuing that chapter for some odd reason

3. This is my first timewriting a story like this so I don't have alot of experience in writing :3

Stormpaw walked up to Jessy, Bramblestar followed behind. "Hello Frankie" Jessy meowed happily

"Stormpaw" Stormpaw replied, looking a bit hurt because his own friend forgot his name

Jessy looked at him strangly "What do you mean?"

"My new name is Stormpaw, remember? I decided to join Thunderclan, that's why I'm here"

"Oh, right" Jessy said, looking a bit embarrassed. "Well..." She noticed Bramblestar behind Stormpaw, he was just sitting down and licking his paw "Bramblestar!"

"Jessy, what brings you here? I thought you decided to leave because..." He glanced at Squirrelflight, who was right beside him. "Because you thought that your housefolk were looking for you and decided to see if they were" Bramblestar meowed nervously.
He

didn't want Squirrelflight to get any ideas about him liking Jessy.

"Well, my housefolk weren't there...so I came back, and it took me a moon to get here because I didn't remember where the camp was...and that's because I live far away...so I stayed in a tiny hole at the bottom of a tree...and I found my way here!"
/Jessy meowed, playing along. Squirrelflight looked at Jessy questionably.

Jessy hoped that Squirrelflight didn't think that she was making things up.

To end the awkward silence Jessy stood up a bit higher "I'm gonna join Thunderclan. I actually regret leaving to find my housefolk"

"Really? Great! I was hoping you'd change your mind"

After the ceremony

Jessy was named Moonpaw, because she came in one moon. Her mentor was Millie, because she was once a kitty pet as well.

"Show me what you know, Moonpaw, it'll help me know what to teach you, and it'll be easier for both of us" Millie meowed. "Now, try finding a mouse, or any prey really."

Moonpaw sniffed the air. "Bird" she meowed. She looksforthe nearest tree and jumps from one tree to the next. When she was close to the bird she jumped in the air. The bird was in her paws and she bit it as she landed. "How did I do?" Moonpaw asked.
/Millie's jaw dropped.

"You did great for your first time!" She replied. Now, I wanna see you pouncing on the ground. Try to find a mouse or any ground prey this time"

After Moonpaw's Lesson

Bramblestar sat outside. Watching eveyone. He talked to a few cats and a few cats talked to him. Squirrelflight went out on a hunting patrol. He noticed Moonpaw passing by. "Moonpaw!" He called out.

Moonpaw came up to him. "Yah? What is it?" She asked.

"Follow me"

Bramblestar led Moonpaw to his den. "Now, what's the real reason why you left?" He asked

"Because...I missed this place...and you..." She meowed, looking at him. Her eyes sparkled as the sunlight bounced on them. It was silent. No one spoke.

"Well, how was your training?" Bramblestar asked, breaking the silence and changing the topic.

"It was great! Millie said I did great! I went from tree to tree and caught a bird!" Moonpaw meowed, sounding excited. She sat on her hind legs and put a paw in the air and swiping it as if she were trying to catch a bird.

"That's amazing! I hope you leave the apprentice stage a bit early, I'm excited to give you your warrior name!" Bramblestar exclaimed.

"I'm excited too" she purred.

About 30 minutes later, Squirrelflight and the hunting patrol came back with a lot of food. Four mice, two squirrels and one bird, and an extra bird from Moonpaw, with an extra mouse. "Moonpaw!" Graystripe called out. Moonpaw looked around, trying to
find the voice, when she finally found him. Graystripe continued "Nice catch!" He meowed, smiling. Moonpaw smiled.

Sorry about it being short again, I'll try my best to make longer chapters :)