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Long Winded
Left eye
Naki yawned from her position beside the unconscious Kakashi.
"Explain to me what happened again please Naruto-san." asked Naki.
"Kakashi-sensei collapsed because he ran out of Chakra." Said Sakura.
"Oh…thanks. I'm going to the bathroom…" said Naki standing up, frowning for once. She walked up and left the house and looked over the huge amount of water. Naki sighed and sat down. Her hand wandered to her left eye. "I wonder…how long I can keep this secret…" she muttered.
"What secret?" asked a voice from behind. Naki, who had dropped her guard so low, didn't realize this and jumped, hand wandering to the Scythe on her back. She sighed as she saw Sasuke. Her eyes turned to happy arcs.
"Nothing. I was just thinking of something out loud." said Naki. Sasuke eyed her suspiciously.
"Zabuza's not dead so Kakashi is taking us out for training." said Sasuke simply, turning around and walking behind toward the back of the house. Naki sighed and got up.
"Right behind you Sasuke-san." said Naki getting up and following Sasuke around the house.
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Naki blinked, staring up at Kakashi who was hanging from a branch upside down. She sighed.
"So…we're doing that…right?" she asked. Kakashi nodded and hurled 4 kunai, one in front of each.
"Get a running start, use those Kunai to mark your spot." said Kakashi. Naki and Naruto nodded. They all got in a ready position after applying Chakra, then charged. Sasuke made it a quite a bit high, Naki noticed Naruto didn't even get up the trunk…and Sakura was at a really high branch! Naki sighed and got in front of her tree and put her foot on it…then the tree suddenly sparked and a large part of the bark shot off, throwing Naki with it. She whined.
"owww…" she whimpered. Kakashi sighed.
"Sakura has the best Chakra control…but the smallest amount. Naruto is the most amount…Sasuke has better control and a great amount…and Naki with her Hekimetsuki Chakra…she will have much trouble with this exercise." thought the Jounin. Sasuke noticed the tree and inspected it. huge tiger slashes were on the inside of the tree where the bark was. "Looks like Sakura has the best control…I thought someone wanted to be Hokage…but right now Sakura is the closest to becoming a Hokage…and what about the Uchiha? Maybe they aren't so great. As for the Hekimetsuki clan…I was told they had great Chakra control." Said Kakashi. Naki laughed sheepishly.
"What is she not telling us…" thought Sasuke, glaring at Naki who poked the tree.
"I have to avoid using vast amounts of Chakra…if I do…then my Hekimetsuki chakra abilities will get in the way…of course I can always cheat…" she thought herself. Kakashi noticed her left eye open slightly, only a tiny bit.
"Is she going to use it…" thought Kakashi, inspecting her eye. Naki closed it back and waited…then charged again, only getting up about 2 feet before marking and falling down, another large chunk of bark went flying.
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It was almost dark, and Naki was breathing heavily, her tree was almost completely destroyed on the outside. Her eye started to twitch and she slammed her fist into a random tree, the tree blew down sideways, a large amount of electricity climbing around it. Sasuke and Naruto looked over at her and then to the demolished tree. Naki sighed and turned around.
"Sorry about that." said Naki. Sasuke and Naruto glared at each other then charged up the tree, getting up there much farther then last time. Once Naruto dropped down and looked at Sasuke a look of determination crossed his face. Naki sighed. Her left eye opened slightly so slightly you couldn't see its color, as she inspected Sasuke, as soon as he stopped she closed her eye fully again. She grinned and started easily climbing up the tree. Sasuke and Naruto looked at her oddly as she climbed to a high branch and sat down. She grinned and jumped down. When she got down, she noticed Sasuke's eye was twitching madly, he looked to be blushing from embarrassment. Naki looked to Naruto. "Naruto…that's not nice you know. You should tell someone…" said Naki. She sighed when Naruto refused. Naki sighed and started to mutter something, turning around and walking past Sasuke, who accidentally overheard what she said. "By studying Sasuke-san's way of doing it I learned he had to lighten up on how hard he pushed Chakra into his feet and how he was preoccupied by Naruto's performance…" he didn't get the hear the rest as she sat against a tree. She yawned loudly. "Let's go back to the house guys…its dark." said Naki. They agreed and they all walked back to the house. When Sasuke and Naruto entered, then noticed Naki was no longer with them.
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Naki sighed, rubbing her left eye.
"…I can't do anything…" she thought to herself. "Without this cursed thing…I can't do anything…" muttered Naki. She jumped down onto the ground and turned around, walking back to the woods.
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Naki yawned loudly, hearing loud yelling from below. She rolled to try and block out the noise then she realized something…didn't she fall asleep on a tree branch? She opened her eyes…and screamed. She was really….really high up. Little dots moved and she fell off. Kakashi squinted his eyes. His eyes widen. Sakura looked to him.
"It's okay Kakashi-sensei. Naruto's safe." Said Sakura. Kakashi pointed higher up. Sasuke put Naruto down and looked up to notice the rapidly falling girl. He climbed the tree again, grabbing her arm. She blinked and sighed.
"Thanks Sasuke-san." said Naki waving happily. Once they both got down safely Naki sighed. "Sorry about that." said Naki. They looked at her curiously.
"What were you doing?" asked Sakura.
"…well…I guess you could say training." said Naki. She yawned and stretched. "Let's get going." said Naki smiling.
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Naki sighed, clinging to the tip of her tree. "I went back so I could rest then Naruto drags me back here and we train until dark…" thought Naki with a sigh, looking over to Naruto, who hugged the tree and Sasuke who leaned against it coolly. ... "May I say something?" asked Naki. Naruto looked to her and she felt Sasuke's eyes on her. "…I'm cold." She muttered.
"Let's head back." said Sasuke. Naruto grinned.
"Alright!" shouted Naruto. Naki slowly started to climb down and Naruto jumped down, screaming the whole way while Sasuke just jumped normally. Naki gulped.
"….um…is it safe to jump down?" she asked, looking down frightening with only one eye. Naruto yelled but she couldn't hear. She sighed again. "My life is over." She muttered, dropping down.
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Naki opened the door for Sasuke and Naruto to entered, Naruto leaning on Sasuke. Naki grinned and entered after. Tazuna looked at them oddly.
"What did you do?" asked Tazuna.
"We climbed to the top." Said Naki.
"Good. Tomorrow you will all serve as Tazuna's body guards." Said Kakashi. Naruto burst out in a joyous laugh then knocked him and Sasuke over. Naki laughed as Sasuke glared at Naruto.
"You're such an idiot!" growled Sasuke. Naki laughed again and stuck her hands out. Naruto grabbed it and lifted himself up. Sasuke ignored her other hand and got up. She shrugged and yawned.
"I'm headed to bed." said Naki.
"…What about food?" asked Naruto.
"Well…I'm not hungry, thanks." said Naki, walking up the stairs. She opened the door and sat in her room. Kakashi blinked then looked to Naruto and Sasuke.
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Naki opened one eye staring at her door, which she heard stomping toward. She opened her door and walked in front of Naruto.
"Hey. Got a minute?" asked Naki to the depressed looking boy. He blinked then nodded. She led him to her room and they sat on the bed next to each other. "I…overheard what happened. I'm not going to criticize you at all. I'm just telling you, you are who you are; don't take what other people say to judge you. I know you've had it rough, Inari barley understands what it feels to be alone. You felt the whole pain of it…I have no right to say this, since I had a family, who died normally. I don't understand, but I'd like to. Naruto, I like you, unlike most people, I do. Just because they think they know they judge you…Don't take it. Remember, this team is your family, and even if we die then we will stay with you still. Until the end I'd think." Said Naki, slapping Naruto's heart softly. "Alright? Understand. We are your family, and you don't need to become Hokage for that. But…you know what? If I ever got the chance to pick a Hokage…your first on my list." said Naki, making her eyes into Arcs. Naruto grinned, smiling at the girl.
"Thanks. Naki-chan." Said Naruto.
"No problem. I gotta watch out for my brother right. From now on, you're my brother, and anyone messes with you, they mess with me!" said Naki, wrapping a arm around his shoulder. He laughed in reply.
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Naki slowly got up, looking outside of the window, she noticed how …bright it was.
"Man, talk about a bad sleep." She muttered, rubbing her head. She got up and went downstairs and noticed Tsunami, Tazuna's daughter and Inari's mother. "Hey Tsunami-san. Did Kakashi-Sensei, Sasuke-san, Sakura-san, and Naruto-san leave already?" asked Naki.
"Naruto-kun is still here but the rest had left." Said Tsunami.
"…I overslept…I will take my leave. Goodbye Tsunami-san. Tell Naruto I said hi." Said Naki, walking outside. Tsunami nodded and Naki quickly jumped into the trees, her eye set on the bridge. Her left eye starting to open. "Kakashi-sensei, I am prepared for the consequences." Whispered Naki.
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