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Befor she could answer she was thrown down by May-Lin and the both of them started to punch, scratch, and pull each others hair while calling each other names. After a few moments of this Mimi kicked MayLin off and they started to talk to each other with looks of pure hatred and their voices with disgust as they glared at each other and said:
"you are supposed to be six feet under filthy wolf girl"
"in your dreams slut" Mimi shot at her " shouldn't you be entertaining some Punk? Then again maybe you should be getting back to job at gentlemens club." she said this with mishief in her eyes.
"Well maybe you should go back to your body building or go kill a innocent suitor. Or have you gone soft and now simply let them go?"
"whore"
"bitch"
''tramp ''
Maylin eyed her "You are late the son of Inutaisho should not be left alone especially with bad men lurking around"and with this statement she left.
Mimi then turned her attention to Inuyasha, and hugged him once again, "we got rid of her did'nt we?"
"mimi why are you so damn late? And who was that girl? And what did she mean bad men lurking around?"
"quit asking so many questions, i'd think you'd be happy to see me after all this time" she answered giving him a pout look.
Kouga's wolves began to smell her and started to jump at her in greeting
"What friendly wolves and they seem to be in good shape too," she had began to examine them, "who do they belong to?"
"They are part of my pack... girl"answered Kouga
"Excuse me young maiden but who are you?" Miroku asked her.
"im sorry let me introduce myself. My name is Mimi Kazetsubaki ( from Maburaho) and I am the Gaurdian of both Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru and their loved ones." she then bowed to them." And this is Ishto and Toshi my spirit companions" she added refering to the wolves beside her." And you are?"
Miroku then introduced her to everyone. When he mentioned Sango her eyes stood observing her which made Sango look down in embarrasement with a blush. She did the same when Kouga was introduced except he did not look away from her but continued to stare at her. They lost eye contact when Kagome began to yell and jump of joy saying " oh my god she is MIMI"
Everyone stared at her and she squealed " you're MMMIIIIMMMIIII can i please have your autograph please im your biggest fan!" She bowed down and handed her a little notebook and pen "PPPPPPPllleaaase Make it out to Hiragashi Kagome"
'uuummm sure how do you know who i am?''
" I'm not from the fuedal era and i absolutely love you
AFTER SOME EXPLAINATION AND TIME
"so you are from Lady Kagome's time and you are the gaurdian of inuyasha and sesshoumaru?"
"you got it" she answered Miroku's inquiry with a dazzling smile.
"then there is something i must ask of you"
''really what?"
"will u bear my child"
SMACK
THUMP
(Both inuyasha and sango hit him)
"not that this isn't interesting buy im out of here" kouga said "Kagome remember that if you ever get sick of that mutt i'll be right here" and with that he ran off
with ginta hakaku and his wolves following
"so who is he" mimi asked
"his name is Kouga" shippo answered
"kouga?"
"keh don't worry about that flea bag hes not important" inuyasha intervined
They began to set up camp and soon she and Inuyasha were chatting like old friends but her mind was still on the wolf prince
yup thats my latest chapter
i know the story sucks but i gotta start somewhere.
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