Kaiki: hoho, IdiditididitLuka! My 1st review! And also a story alert!
Luka: Yeah yeah, but that doesn't mean your lessons ends here. It is just a start and still barely meet my target of reviews.
Kaiki: eh… may I humbly know what is your target Luka-neesama?
Luka: 1000reviews. So to rule over the whole fanfiction world. Mwahahaha.
Kaiki: (O_O)||| She is joking right? Anyway thank you pinkalicious101 for the ultra short review which really brightens my whole day. I will survive the whole lesson even she had 2000 lesson planning just for me(joking) \(^w^)/ Enjoy~
DISCLAMIER: I do not own any vocaloids and they belong to their respective companies.
Lesson Two: What is the difference?
It is the same lazy afternoon with one difference: the music room for songs practice had become a mini classroom, with Kaiki, Miku, Rin, Len and Gumi be the students of the day and Leon as the English teacher. Leon is reading some papers with a help of a language translator.
"Hmmm…. You did write good stories for your Chinese language that your teacher graded it quite high. Even I'm also impressed the way of composing it. So I think the likely reason from failing English composition would be the level of writing that your teacher cannot accept. You see, once you enter to collage but your way of expression is like a primary kid, or kindergarten as the worst case scenario, its no wonder that your teacher fails you."
"Oh…. Good analyzing Leon-san!" Gumi said.
"So what should we do? I think the last lesson is not improving his mood of studying." Len said.
"Even reading his favorite 'Harry Potter' books still did done any good significant improvement too…. Was he retard or something?" Rin pouted.
"…guys… since when you have decided to become the X-rays of my life?"
"Come on Kaiki, we are trying to help you too… don't you want your lesson getting some results? I'm sure Luka also hope you can get more confidence as time goes by…"
"Grrr, fine you win. So what should I do now?"
"Well, since you like reading and had read quite a number of works, regardless of languages, I suggest you compare some of your favorite works with a few fanfiction authors works and see their style of writing. Sometimes it will help once you recognize the common points of writing."
"Like what? Please give me more examples please? I need more help 'cos like Rin said .RETARD." Having saying it, he give a dead glare at Rin.
"Well, it not as hard as you think. Like your favorite book series 'Harry Potter' for startup example, which POV (point of view) you think this author used?"
"Main character pov?" Miku suggested.
"Yes, and also in the third party accounting, meaning instead she uses 'I' in a more define way to tell you it's Harry's pov, she uses 'he'. But from here you can see the whole world, his thinking, reaction are all related his pov. At the very least, you need to understand the different usage of POVs before we move on to your grammars and spellings. Otherwise your story will become very messy and hard to understand."
"Ok…. So was it like this:
Miku POV
Oh today Leon-san is reading Kaiki's old works while me, Kaiki, Rin, Len & Gumi are waiting for him to start."Miku said.
"Well, you got it somehow now…."
"Ne ne, how about this:
Rin POV
Today, before lessons starts, I have to drag retard & shorta to help me a new trick I'm going to do without getting caught by the 'dinosaur'. Who always goes 'raarara' & 'rrrooaras' & 'owowow'. Everytime Rin-chan will always prepare new game ideas to play with dinosaur, which she always ending up yelling 'RRIIIIINNNN' and chases us around…"
"…..I seriously have no idea what you are trying to say now"
Who is the dinosaur Rin's talking about? Make a guess!
