A/N: Madz the Penguin was the first to offer a topic for the third chapter. So we're doing what she suggested. Today's Do and Don't is Legendary Pokemon and the abundance of ten year old trainers that have them.


Example A: Minor

Lily took a deep breath as she looked at the Gratitude Pokemon. She felt wrong for doing this, but she needed to. It would only be for a little while, anyway. "Calm down Lily, your mother needs this. You gotta make her happy." Her hand tightened around the beat up PokeBall in her hand.

The single Shaymin in the field still didn't notice the seventeen year old ex-trainer who was trying to capture it.

Lily focused her grass green eyes on the Pokemon and threw the red and white ball with as much accuracy and power. he crossed her fingers as the Shaymin was sucked inside. It rocked once, twice, thrice and...click!

She stared in shock. She had just captured a legendary. She really did it. Lily shook as she walked over and picked up the PokeBall. What was inside was still registering in her mind.

"Maybe this will keep dad's garden alive." She sniffled, wiping away a tear as she remembered her late father.


Alright, let's discuss this first example. Lily went after a Legendary Pokemon that has more than one of it. Shaymin is shown to be closer to humans than, say, Dialga, or Palkia.

Catching this Legendary was a big deal for Lily, it's not a typical Pokemon capture, it's a Legendary. You'll also notice that she feels bad about it. This makes sense considering Shaymin's role in the world.

Lily shows some selfishness as she's still willing to catch Shaymin even though she knows it's bad.

Lily also has a reason for catching Shaymin. She wants to make her mother happy by keeping her late father's garden alive. This means that Lily is using her emotions to think instead of logic and isn't thinking about the repercussions of catching a Legendary.

She's seventeen, making it more likely that she'd be able to accomplish this as she's had much more experience than your typical ten-thirteen year old beginner who always gets a Legendary.

As so, this is a Do, but I don't recommend it unless your story has a strong backbone to hold it up. I'd say this is for more experienced writers.


Example B: Destined

Destiny was a normal girl. She had long blue hair and pink eyes that oozed mystery. It was a normal day for Destiny. She woke up, got dressed in a cute shirt, skirt and sneakers, ate breakfast and went outside to play. She loved playing in the Ruins of Alph. Especially as it was near her hometown of Violet City.

Destiny was only eight but she already knew everything about Pokemon, even more than all the Professors. Destiny skipped around the ruins, heading into a certain area.

"La la~ la~ la la la~" She was suddenly stopped by a loud roar.

A large white and gold Pokemon appeared in front of her.

'Destiny Marie Diamond Sue. You are the chosen one. You must capture me and defeat team evil and save the world!' Destiny did not seem at all surprised when the Legendary Pokemon Arceus spoke to her through telepathy.

"Okay!" Was all she said as she pulled out a random PokeBall from nowhere and caught Arceus.

She then proceeded to go on an adventure through Johto with the Pokemon God. Sadly, that adventure was never finished as the author never updated it.


I got bored by this. The whole 'destined for greatness by Legendary' is complete crap. It doesn't make sense for a powerful Legendary to choose a random child who has never raised a Pokemon to be their trainer. Why wouldn't they choose someone they know they can depend on, such as a world renowned champion.

I suppose there are ways to subvert this, just don't do Example B. It makes no sense. Why would you do that?! An eight year old would not be able to handle the burden of saving the world.

Destiny is just given the Pokemon God for free, she just skips through the Ruins of Alph and suddenly it's SURPRISE! You gotta go save the world little eight year old who is somehow smarter than people who have studied their whole lives! It's ridiculous.

This is a definite Don't.


Example C: Gullible

"Guys! Guys!" Abigail ran through the grass to her friends, Mark and Matt.

"What happened? Did you finally get a brain cell?" Mark asked. Abigail poked her tongue out at him.

"No! I had a really cool dream! Arceus told me I was the savior of the world! Cool huh?!" The overexcited nine year old jumped up and down.

Mark and Matt looked at each other and got an idea.

"What if it's really Arceus telling you your destiny?" Matt suggested, holding back a laugh at his gullible friend.

Abigail paused. Seeming to think.

"Why would Arceus choose me? I'm just a kid." Mark cut in.

"Maybe you really are special, but you look normal so people like those Team Rocket goons don't get suspicious." Abigail nodded. believing every word.

"You really think so?" Both boys smiled.

"Sure we do, now, go spread the word that the savior has come." Abigail nodded enthusiastically, her hair getting in her eyes as she did so.

The redheaded girl ran off to tell everyone in Lavender Town the good news. As soon as Abigail was out of sight the two brunette boys were on the ground laughing at how stupid Abigail was to think that Arceus would want such a gullible kid to save everyone.


This is an alternative to Example B. I don't think I've ever seen a destiny/savior Pokefic that was about a gullible kid who got tricked by their mean spirited friends who like to embarrass them. If you play your cards right you could probably have them meeting a Legendary, just don't have your OC catch them if they're a major Legendary.

This is an interesting and realistic premise. It's a Do


Third Chapter is complete. Time for our Do's and Don't's

Do:

*Make sure that a captured Legendary is a minor one

*Make sure your OC is experienced

*Have a reason

*Put a new spin on it

Don't:

*Make it nonsensical

*Have a young OC

*Make them inexperienced

Good luck and good day.

Next time: Giving Your OC a Pokemon