'Characters thinking'
"Characters speaking"
CHAPTER 3: START
Bardock was only in the healing tank for 36 hours, and after putting on fresh armor he went to go have his power checked. " 12,000?! This can't be right! Only the King's that strong! This damn thing has to be on the fritz!" Said the technician who scanned Bardock. "So I'm equal to the King huh, good. That'll make this easier." And he turned and left the room, ignoring the shouted questions demanding he explain what he meant by that. He looked around for a moment to get his bearings, and took off for the palace, flying at a calm but swift pace to preserve his energy.
'Vegeta's a crafty son of a bitch, he may not be the close combat fighter I am, but his mastery over ki attacks is unrivaled among all Saiyans. And he's had years to train in peace, never going out on any missions. That's my advantage. It's been ages since he fought for his life, and I've been doing that for years.' A savage grin stretched across Bardock's face.
'This has been a long time coming Vegeta. For all your failures to your people, the way you sneer at us lower-class Saiyans, like we're not even worth noticing, and giving away your own son to Freeza. I'll enjoy beating you across the planet and making you beg for mercy.' As he landed at the entrance to the palace and walked up the stairs, the guards barred his path. "Halt! What business does a low-class like you have to come to His Majesty's palace without warning?"
Bardock thought about just pushing through, his blood racing in anticipation for the fight ahead, but decided against it. Waste of energy he needed for his battle with Vegeta. "I'm here to challenge Vegeta for the throne. And unless you want Freeza to kill us all, you'll let me pass." Taking advantage of their shock, he pushed through and began walking to the throne room. Spotting a royal aide, he made his way over and asked for directions to the throne room.
The aide opened her mouth to question Bardock, but froze upon seeing his face. There was something about his face, that made her think twice about stopping him, and she just pointed. Thanking her, he ran off. 'I bet you don't even interact with your servants do you Vegeta? Why should you? You're their King, why waste your time on anybody lower than the top-class Elites? You weren't always like that, hell back when we fought the Tuffles, you showed concern for your men, you even took the time to get to know some of them, you were a man I could follow, even call King. You changed though. As victory neared, you began throwing Saiyan lives away, as long as it would ensure victory. What did it matter, they're low-class. That's all they're good for.' As memories of the man Vegeta was filled his mind and made him feel some form of regret, the rage at who he became swiftly replaced it, and he started speeding through the palace, not even bothering with doors.
Not even a minute after he entered the palace, he arrived at the doors to the throne. 'Should I just open them and walk in? Maybe. But then again, when am I gonna get another chance to do something like this?' Grinning, he pulled his leg back, gathered his strength and kicked the doors through the back wall behind the throne and clear to the mountains behind the palace. 'So glad I didn't just walk in, Gine would kill me if I didn't do something like that.' Taking a moment to look around, observing the shocked faces of the ocupants of the room, he saw Vegeta looking at him, then glancing at the massive hole the doors made. And repeating the act. He sighed, as if apologizing to the doors.
"You know, those were perfectly good doors. They didn't creak, they opened smoothly, hell they even looked nice. But you had to kick them through the wall. You haven't changed at all, have you Bardock." As he ignored the King mourning for his doors, his eyes turned to the two Saiyans on the floor, recognizing Paragus, and seeing his son Broly, held protectively in his arms.
"Paragus? What are you doing here? Why's Broly with you?" He began walking forward, his saiyan hearing detecting the guards finally starting to catch up to him. Lazy bastards. "Bardock! What am I doing here you ask? The King," he spat onto the floor, " has decided my son was a threat to the Prince. After all my years of loyal service, the thanks I get is Vegeta trying to kill the both of us." Bardock was shocked somewhat, knowing that Vegeta didn't take kindly to anybody coming close to his level of strength. But killing a baby, no. He wasn't a saint, far from it, but he had lines he didn't cross.
'Broly does have a 10,000 power level, which already makes him one of the 5 strongest Saiyans, but it's just outrageous for a baby.' Bardock breathed in, and stared at the King "Vegeta! Freeza has betrayed us, he sent Dodoria to kill my team on Meat, and he almost killed me. We have a week, 10 days at best, before he destroys this planet, and the Saiyns with it!"
"Do you have any proof? We've been nothing but loyal to him for years, why would he betray his best fighters?" Vegeta reached for the clasp for his cape, and removed it, handing it to a servant, who vanished quickly. As he walked down the stairs to the throne, Bardock felt Vegeta gathering his energy. He began to respond in kind.
"I've seen it! You know the details of my mission to Kanassa! They granted me their powers of foresight, so I'd see our doom coming like they did theirs! But me proving it doesn't matter! I challenge you for the throne Vegeta! We will die if I sit back and do nothing!" The occupants of the room stared at him in shock, the guards ordering him to surrender at once, stopping at a glare from their King.
"This didn't work out the first time you tried Bardock, what makes you think it will work now? Guards, remove Paragus and his son from my sight, I'll deal with them after I crush this upstart." The guards began moving towards Paragus, and Bardock acted to save his fellow Saiyan. Whirling around, he focused his ki and pushed, the group sent flying through several walls. This took his eyes off Vegeta though, who blasted him through the roof of the palace, and the fight for the future of the Saiyan race began.
CHAPTER 3: END.
And we have our first big break from Canon! Bardock vs Vegeta! I've always thought Bardock was stronger, but as far as I know, it's unknown which of them was more powerful. I don't know how well I'll do with the fight scene coming up, so bear with me please. And I tried spacing out my paragraphs more, hopefully it looks better now. Read and review, and constructive criticism is welcomed!