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The bell that signified the end of break rang and we all filed back into class. Miss birdie announced that the next lesson was PE and that we would be playing dodge ball. I was excited and anxious at the same time excited because I was really good at dodge ball and anxious because I would either be playing with Dan or against him. I glanced at Dan and saw he was chewing on his bottom lip he had obviously realised what was going to happen if we were on the same team we would easily win but if we were on opposite teams well we would be in for one big round. "everyone get changed we'll be heading down to the assembly hall in 10 minutes, if anyone doesn't feel comfortable getting changed in front of the class come with me." miss birdie told the class before she walked out with a line of 6 boys and girls behind her. I reached beneath my desk and pulled up my bag taking out my PE kit and started to get changed, I had to be careful when I took of my jacket in case Skyress fell out she was only small and all the people walking around to talk to their friends while getting changed could easily crush her.
We all stood in a single line against the wall in the assembly hall miss birdie looked down the line and asked "has anyone seen Runo or Julie?" I raised my hand and told her "I saw them by the old tree in the corner of the ground it looked as if they were fighting." Miss birdie nodded and continued "ok then, you will be split into 4 groups and playing for 5 minutes the girls will be playing first so will you all mind stepping forward so I can split you into 2 groups." The girls stepped forwards and miss birdie chose the two captains Alice and Chan lee.
Alice's team won which was very surprising since she was awful at sports she was more brain than brawn if you know what I mean she was the girl you'd find studying not cheerleading. "Ok everyone be quiet, it's time for the boys will you all step forwards please." The hall was instantly silent no one wanted to get on miss birdies bad side if she liked you she was the nicest person in the world if she didn't well you were basically in hell for 6 hours every day. "Let's choose our captains shall we, I think it will be very interesting if we have Shun and Dan as our captains. Anybody disagree say so now?" nobody spoke "ok then, Shun, Dan step forwards please and choose your teammates."
We were half way through the game we had both got most of the other teams players out the only people who were left were Klaus, Ace and Ren on Dan's side and Barron, Komba and Billie on mine. Klaus had one of the balls and threw it at Komba as fast as he could "master Shun help" Komba cried bringing his arms up to shield his face "Komba focus and catch it" I yelled back at him, Komba complied and caught the ball, I was amazed since he had his eyes closed. "Klaus you're out" miss birdie called out and Klaus marched off the court in a strop. I nodded my head at Komba and he beamed with pride. Komba threw the ball at Ace and he dogged it easily Ren went to get it and passed it to Dan. Dan glanced at us and I could see he was eliminating us 1 by 1 to see who he was going to get out, his eyes fixed on Billie and he ran forwards and released the ball Billie didn't even have time to blink before he was hit in the stomach and knocked off balance he was almost knocked on his back but Barron managed to catch him. He just walked straight off he didn't even have to be told by miss birdie he knew he was out. Barron passed me the ball that was bouncing across the floor "hear Shun you have a go" I held the ball securely in my hands I knew who I wanted to get out but if he was out it wouldn't be any fun, I decided to get Ren out he was so arrogant I would love to see that smug smirk constantly plastered on his face wiped clean off "heads up Ren" I threw the ball so hard and fast that Ren didn't even have the time to look shocked "show off" Barron mumbled smiling. The ball rolled around the floor and stopped in front of Ace "time to even the playing field" he said throwing the ball up and down in his hands like a bakugan "say goodnight Barron" "help" was all Barron could say before he was hit in the middle of his chest, winding him. "Master Shun where are the other balls, if we had them we could easily win." Komba stared at me looking slightly worried "we don't need them Komba just get me the ball ok" honestly we probably did need them but I had no idea where they were, I just had to try and sound confident. Komba skipped over to the ball which lay by Barron who was gasping on the floor "you ok Barron?" Barron shuck his head signalling that he wasn't "ok" Komba smiled at him and ran back to me handing me the ball "skipping seriously?" I stared at him in disbelief, a 10 year old boy skipping really. "What? It's fun" I held out my hand "just give me the ball" Komba passed me the ball and hung his head pretending to be sad. I locked my eyes on Ace he had been playing too long it was time for him to take a break. I aimed very carefully Ace was known for being quick not as quick as me but still quick. Once I was certain he wouldn't be able to dodge I threw the ball Ace tried very hard to dodge but I still managed to clip him. "Ace off, he got you." Miss birdie pointed to the side of the hall, Ace gave a loud groan as he made his way to the side and slumped down next to Klaus. "Yay master Shun you're amazing" Komba cheered he was so busy celebrating that he didn't notice Dan pick up the ball and chuck it at him. Dan wasn't so horrid that he would knock Komba over when he wasn't looking so he only threw it hard enough to hit Komba not hurt him. All Komba did was stare at his arm where the ball hit it, he looked confused almost shocked that he was out. He turned and walked off sitting on the floor. "It's just you and me left Shun" Dan yelled over to me "I guess it is" I picked up the ball and threw it at Dan, he jumped out of the way "oh so close" Dan taunted getting the ball to throw at me, I just stared intently at my him trying to figure out how to get him out whether or not I should catch the ball or hit him, it was a very hard decision but I think I should hit him it would be a lot more fun and this way he wouldn't be able to say that it was just luck, he probably would but say that but what Komba did was luck hitting him would be skill. I was so engrossed in my thoughts that I nearly got hit; luckily I managed to dodge it by turning so I was facing the wall. "Oh come on I was so close" Dan cried stamping his feet in frustration "you're awful quick to lose your temper." I noted while going to grab the ball; I knew that if I got him mad enough he would get careless and it would be that much easier to get him out. It worked as well, I could see that he was very agitated because he was yelling at his shoulder, I can only guess that he had his partner bakugan with him and that he was having a go at him for saying something he didn't like, he may not look like it but he was a very sensitive person always taking things to heart. Once I had the ball I aimed very carefully because I knew that even though he would be easier to hit it would still be difficult "win this my Shun" Skyress jumped on my shoulder to support me "that's what I intend to do" I told her before throwing the ball as fast as humanly possible hitting him square in the face. Miss birdie played dodge ball differently to other teachers, meaning that no matter where you were hit you were out. All of my team cheered triumphantly "looks like I win" I stated staring at Dan who had a big pink mark on his face "wasn't that a bit harsh" Skyress asked giggling slightly "you tell me you're the one whose laughing" I retorted "that's not the point" Skyress answered trying to compose herself.
The rest of the day was mediocre Dan was trying to convince everyone that he let me win saying he did it to try and make amends, but everyone knew he was lying you don't have that look on your face if you did it on purpose and by look I mean the look of pure fear. "Why don't you look on the bright side" Shuji whispered across the table to Dan who was in a mood he had just realised that everyone knew he was lying about losing on purpose "what bright side" he asked "at least the marks faded." Shuji answered trying to sound positive. Dan stared coldly at Shuji making him back off and sit up straight in his chair. "Whoevers talking shut up and pay attention." Miss birdie practically shouted to the class. We were in the middle of English and needless to say it was boring. The hour seemed to drag on and I was counting down the minutes it felt like an eternity before the bell rang. When it finally did ring I was one of the first to pile out.
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