Keldeo The Critic- Kevin and Buizel by SukkottoDeragon
(Keldeo's Point of View, of course)
Okay, so after the Pokeball is fixed, Ash lets Buizel out.
-I'm sorry Buizel, ummm, Kevin isn't here right now… - Ash said as he kneeled towards him, Buizel's eyes opened wide as he heard Ash.
-Bui?! … bui! Buii bui buu bui…. Bui! – Buizel said as he waved his arms at Ash, it seemed like he was arguing. –Bu… bui? - Bizel said.
-Calm down Buizel, we will find Kevin, I promise… - Ash said to Buizel.
-Bui… bu? - Buizel asked.
Suddenly Pikachu jumped from Ash's back to surprise Buizel in a friendly way, and apparently that wasn't a good idea because Buizel got scared letting go a really strong "Bui" and fainted really fast, Buizel fell in the floor completely passed out…
-Aww, Pikachu… you scared him! – Dawn said.
What the-? How does a Pokemon just faint like that?
So, Ash decides to take care of Kevin's Pokemon until they find them. While Ash sends his Buizel to have a little heart to heart with Kevin's Buizel, Ash decides to. . .
-Hmm, okay let's go! – Ash said while he threw the two Pokéballs containing Kevin's Riolu and Pikachu. When they were both released the two Pokémon realized that it wasn't Kevin who brought them out, but that trainer from the other day, Ash explained to them about what happened to Kevin, they seem a bit worried but Ash assured them both that they were going to find him, no matter what. The two were happy of course, they even hugged Ash. Then Ash explained that he wanted to train them while Kevin wasn't there, even if Kevin's Pikachu didn't want to, Riolu was quite excited about the training.
Riolu jumped with happiness lifting his arms to the air.
-Well done Riolu! – Ash said.
Suddenly, Riolu started to glow and his shape begun to change, he got was getting taller, his "ears" started to grow bigger, until he was tall enough of the size of a fourteen year old kid the glowing stopped, Riolu evolved into a Lucario!
You're telling me, a Pokemon, devoted to it's trainer, who is currently missing, possibly in mortal peril, is willing to train happily with another trainer, and is soooo happy, that he evolves?
Suddenly Ash's Buizel came towards Ash and hid behind him as Kevin's Buizel came running as well, apparently he was chasing him, but something was out of place, Ash's buizel seemed to be really scared at him for some reason.
-Buizel maybe you are tired, get a rest. – Ash said to his Buizel while he returned him to his Pokéball. – Hey Buizel, umm, do you want me to train ya' a bit? - Ash asked Buizel.
-Bui! Bui… bu bui! buu bui!- Buizel said with a bit of desesperation in his tone.
-I… will take that as a yes! – Ash said.
Buizel and Pikachu were on the far sides of the fighting area, Ash was going to make him train his speed a bit more, so he begun giving his first command… but…
-Go Buizel! – Ash said, but Buizel didn't even move… - Umm, Buizel? Go, Run, charge? – Ash said ridiculously but Buizel still did not move.
-Bui bu? - Buizel said while looking at Ash.
–Umm, Okay, maybe we can train your dodging skills up a bit! Ok Pikachu! Use Thunderbolt! – Ash said, Pikachu jumped and attacked with his thunderbolt, it was going directly to Buizel, and Buizel could actually see the thunder bolt as it was going to hit him. – Buizel, dodge! – Ash said to Buizel, but, Buizel didn't even move. –Buizel! Dodge! – Ash said once again, but he wouldn't move at all.
Pikachu's Thunderbolt impacted on Buizel hurting him, Buizel couldn't help but to yell a very loud sounding "Bui!" when the attack finished, Buizel sat on the floor.
-Buizel… - Ash said while approaching him. – What's the matter with you? – Ash asked him but when he saw his face, he couldn't stop looking on how he began to cry. – Buizel… - Ash said almost in a guilty way. Ash certainly didn't understand, "Kevin's Buizel was pretty good at fighting, but why didn't he even dodge the attack?" he thought as he saw Buizel crying louder than ever as he covered his face with his arm.
(Keldeo suddenly becomes shocked and completely caught off guard by this)
Wait. A. Minute.
. . .
(Keldeo looks really pissed off)
They were both knocked out by some villain, their Buizel friend is still passed out and unconscious, their trainer is missing, they're actually happy enough to give some other trainer a hug, and on top that, you make the conclusion that such a Pokemon would be willing to train with a strange trainer, to the point that he evolves? And then, Ash, the kindest Pokemon Trainer in the show, the Trainer who saved Chimchar from Paul and gave him compassion, forces a Buizel who clearly misses his trainer to battle, while interpreting a cry of desperation for a "yes," and then fires an Electrical Attack, which is super effective to a Water type like them, and then says "what's the matter with you" after he gets hit by that super effective move?
I'm sorry, but, I don't mess around with this stuff. Trainers have dedicated themselves to their Pokemon, trainers have sacrificed, trainers who have formed bonds with their Pokemon, trainers who do everything to make their Pokemon strong; and you wrote this FanFic in an attempt to show that, and yet you only seem to do it for that Buizel, but just go "the heck with Riolu and Pikachu!" And then you have Ash being mean just to show how heart broken Buizel is about the missing Kevin.
Look, depression over the loss of a loved one is a real problem that some people have! And Pokemon and animal cruelty is a serious problem in both the Anime world and Real World that affects and hurts a lot of people. That's why when you're writing a FanFic about such an important controversial concept of the Pokemon Fan Base and Cannon and Fannon universes, and you have a Pokemon who's evolution depends on happiness and friendship, you have to do two things!
One: You have to take a solid stand throughout the entire story on what a good Pokemon Trainer would bring about in his Pokemon while maintaining good trainer as good trainers.
Two: You have to represent the good Trainers and their Pokemon as best as humanly possible!
Okay, luckily there are things that help this.
(Do you want to put a nickname to your recently evolved Lucario?)
-Uhhh, this is bad… - Ash said while he was shocked and a bit happy for Riol…Lucario's evolution. – Lucario return! – Ash pointed the Pokéball at Lucario emitting it's red beam, when it made contact with Lucario he turned the same color of the reddish beam that "sucked" him towards the Pokéball. –Oh, Kevin is going to be mad… maybe he didn't want him to evolve. – Ash said to himself.
It's funny how he puts in the nickname after evolve thing, although it makes no sense whatsoever in the Anime universe. Also, I'm glad Ash feels bad about evolving Riolu.
-Ash. – Brock said to get his attention. – You have to think that most Pokémon feel differently depending on the trainer they are with, Buizel lost a very good friend of his, I don't think he is really up to fighting, in fact, I wouldn't be surprised if he got depressed later on… - Brock explained as he patted the Buizel, Buizel looked at Brock for a moment but then he pushed his hand away and kept on crying. – Well, maybe it's time to eat something! – Brock concluded. – Maybe my food will make this little Buizel happy! - Brock said.
Thank you Brock!
What's weird is that all the Pokemon get riled up by Kevin's Buizel for some reason. Why? We don't know.
Yet.
And so, guess what Ash does next? He decides to read Kevin's journal!
WOW! Ash is on a roll! A roll of being a jerk!
I hope Ash doesn't come across Iris' journal. . .
Cilan: I wonder why Ash is over-there throwing up?
Iris: I don't know. .
Ash: Uggh! you have a sick mind, Iris!
Iris: (Gasp!) You read the dreams I wrote in my journal!
Ash: I think you're in love with me too much! Urrrrk!
-Ash, I don't think it's okay do go through someone else's journal… but considering what's happening, it might be the right thing, I'm sure Kevin will understand.- Brock said…
NO! NO! You blew it Brock! You. Blew. It.
(Keldeo sighs and holds his head for a moment. Then, he holds his head up and smiles.)
Do you know why I'm smiling despite all of this? Because these next three chapters, which are made up of Kevin's journal entries, are the best parts of the story. It is really clever to show the development of characters as well as the growth of a friendship. Sure, some entries are a little mundane and annoying but this is someones journal. They'll be all kinds of entries in it.
First of all, I love how honest Kevin is in his journal and how sarcastic he is. That's hilarious.
Well, we get how he met Buizel, how he found him wounded on the shore.
Day 1: The meeting
I got up early to go to the sea shore! Ah! The amasing sea shore! There are just so many good sounds that I like to listen out here! Good to feel away from my family again I like to sleep a lot in this place to finnally rest from all that training…
But, this particular day, I heard a sound of pain… it was coming from below, when I saw right below the peak of the sea shore (it was really deep) I saw an orange Pokémon lying in the rocks… I simply couldn't leave a Pokémon in that condition… I went down to rescue him I took him to my tent and I tried cleaning up those bruises I tied them up ripping my red shirt off…
I didn't know the Pokémon's name tho
I kinda played the guitar a bit, and it was there where he woke up
The Pokémon got up and left from the tent it was really weird but whatever
I'm happy I saved someones life after all
Day 3: Back to home
I packed my stuff and left from the wood early to get at home at 11:00
I was getting my stuff out when I found that strange Pokémon inside the guitar bag!
I didn't know what it was doing there. The only thing he said there was… "bui" or something like that
I took him outside and I told him that I couldn't have him in my house and that maybe if he wanted I could see him again in the woods. After that it gave me a hug and left. I wonder what's with him
But we also get a whole bunch of other jokes. Though not all of them are funny. Like this one:
Day 5
Things to buy at the market:
-Salt
-Sugar
-Milk
-and more sugar for me!
-and most importantly a…"
Ash was kind of dumbfounded by reading that.
-I think we should skip this part…- Ash said while turning the page to day 8.
(Keldeo looks around nervously)
Okay, what are we to assume that last item was? Should we be worried? Should we be disgusted? Should I know what it is? I don't know, that joke fell flat!
Another thing is that Kevin writes music in his journal, and the music looks like this:
e(-)
B(-)
G(-4-2-) NOT DONE!
D(-2-4-2s4-2-2-0—0h2p0-)
A(-2-4-0-2-4-5-4-2-2-)
E(-)
That's actually pretty cool. Is that how you really type music into a computer, or is it just improvise because you kind type lines of staff and musical notes into a computer? Either way, this is nice.
So, apparently Kevin has no friends, likes it when his parents go on concert trips so he can camp by himself, and is forced to play the sad sounding songs his dad makes him play. Wow, all the ingredients of a rebellious Gary Stu who wants to break free. Also, he was apparently told by his mom that Pokemon are emotionless. . .
Okay, is the woman out of her mind? Is Kevin out of his mind! This is the World of Pokemon! They're all over the place! It's pretty obvious that Pokemon have emotions. Watch a Pokemon battle on TV!
So, Kevin and Buizel hang out for a few days, and it ends with Buizel giving his rescuer an cool birthday present.
Day 11: Incredible gift.
It was my birthday, but my parents will never be on time after all, and in fact no one really knows about my existence luckily the man in the store only recognizes me sometimes.
I have no friends after all
Buizel came by yelling "Bui" as he came from afar.
He stood beside the tent waiting for me to come out and as I came out Buizel left again, maybe he wanted me to follow him!
He took me to this, incredible place... it was a high stone beside the ocean in where you could see the whole sea and hear the most fantastic waves you could ever hear in history, it's was so amazing that I can't think of how to describe it. I can't even believe I have been all night figuring out how to describe it!
This is the best gift I have ever received for my birthday! It's such a cool place!
So, after 8 months of living a boring life with his parents. . .that's right, he hates this time. Man, how old is this kid? Look, listen up Deragon!
(Keldeo scraped the ground with his hooves angrily)
I lost my parents in the Moor of Icirus! I don't like how you vilify parents and make them look like annoyances that hold kids back from adventure! NO! A parent's love is awesome! It's something I lost and can never get back, so watch it, you jerk! Cause I don't have a family!
(Terrakion walks in and shakes his head)
"No, Keldeo, you have us. And we do care for you. Remember that."
(Keldeo looks up at Terrakion as he places a hoof over the Colt Pokemon's shoulder. Keldeo smiles as he leans against Terrakion.)
Thanks Terrakion.
"You're welcome, Keldeo. See you later." (Terrakion leaves)
Okay, so I guess when your only friend is a Buizel and you can't see him, you start feeling depressed when stuck at home. So after 8 months, Kevin and Buizel reunite. They even make beautiful music together!
(Terrakion rushes back in) "WHAT?!"
AHHH! Not that kind! I mean literally! They're playing the guitar! Honest!
"Oops. . .sorry. . .I'll just. . .go back to training now. . ." (Terrakion leaves again)
Whew! So, back to the story,
Day 264: Finally together…
I went tot the woods with all my stuff and food of course, I couldn't find Buizel but I played the special song I was making for him, it was the 32003x (which I found out a few days earlier that it was a chord only that I removed a note to make it similar to the waves.
Buizel approached, and he sat beside me, he actually touched the guitar neck, maybe because he wondered how the guitar was played, but it made a totally new sound, and a really marvelous one!
And when I played the special part, he touched the guitar again making a way better sound.
Here is what resulted:
D(-2-2-2-2-2-2-3-3-3-3-3h5p3-2-2-2-2-2h3p2-0-2-2-0 -)
A(-3-3-3-3-3h5p3-0-0-0-0-0-3-3-3-3-3-3-3—2h3-3-)
It was so amazing…
After talking with Buizel a bit, I figured out that he didn't have anyone but me as well, I asked him "I know that you don't have friends around and uhhh, do you have ANYONE to talk to or play with?" And…
He pointed at me, I asked him if he had anyone else, and he said "Bu" no… I was the only one that he has spoke with and played with…
If I remember well this is what I said later:
"Well, this song that WE made is awesome don't you think?" He said "Bui" "I have a question to ask you Buizel…"
As he looked at me I said:
"Do you want to be my friend too?"
I'm really not sure why the chapter ends with To Be Continued at this point. Is this really that suspenseful?
(Cue Odd Couple Theme)
Sitcom Announcer: Uh-oh! What's Buizel gonna do now? Will he agree to be friends with the human he's been following around, hugging, showing cool natural places too, and plays music with? Or will he say no for some. . .obscure reason I can't think of right now. Tune in next time when "The Jak and Daxter Spoof Show" continues.
At first his eyes got wider, his mouth opened and he placed his little paws on his mouth to cover it.
Why is he so dramatic about it? What's so jaw dropping about someone wanting to be your friend. My jaw didn't drop when Ash, Iris, and Cilan agreed to help me, and I was being hunted by Kyurem at the time!
"Well, what do you say?"
"Bui!" He said as he jumped towards me, I obviously had to catch him and when I did he hugged me, at first I thought about all that time that I was with my family, there were few hugs, and they lasted only seconds.
But, this hug lasted more than any of those.
He started to speak in his language, of course I didn't understand a thing but he really seemed happy. His hugs were tighter as he kept speaking, that was something I've never felt in my life, feeling that someone actually cared for you, actually, I think that nobody ever did care for me, but him.
Isn't that strange?
A Pokémon had way more humanity than any of the humans I have met myself…
I think the meaning of the word humanity has changed for me, forever
So after the two play for a couple of days, Kevin has to go home. However, Buizel doesn't want to let his new friend go, and decides to hide in Kevin's bag and go home with him.
Day 268: oh no…
Today something was poking my nose… It was buiz…
What is Buizel doing here!? I thought…
Apparently he hid in my back pack and apparently he was the one who ate dad's cereal, oh he is going to be so pissed.
I told him to leave otherwise my parents where going to get him for sure, so he jumped from the window and then in a little lake that was just beside our house.
Day 374:
It was going to be my birthday, and my parents had to go to a concert and leave me alone again, but my dad gave me a little box with something inside.
He said that I should not open it until it was my birthday and they even said that they loved me.
Even if my parents weren't there for me all the time I liked them to only say that they loved me.
Uh, is there something wrong with his parents? Are they. . .bad parents? Inattentive? Standoffish? Uggh, can we just get to the evil abusive trainer?
Day 375: The horror
The other day when I decided to go to the wood I couldn't find Buizel easily…
Then I found him on the floor hurt, and in front of him, was a trainer, he was using a strange Pokémon that I couldn't recognize it was a medium sized red lizard and it had it's tail on fire. That isn't really a pokémon I have seen in this region. I told him to let my friend alone…
He said that if the pokémon was mine than he would dare to battle me, but I was dumb enough to actually tell him I was not a trainer… then he ordered his pokemon to use "flamethrower" at Buizel.
I ran towards the attack so that it could hit me. I tried to block it, but Buizel threw water at that attack and it was stopped. I looked at Buizel at how hurt he was, but, he still smiled at me.
"Leave my friend alone!" I yelled, but the trainer insisted that he wanted to capture Buizel because he was collecting Pokémon. As he threw the "Pokeball" thing I threw it away by hitting it with my arm, the pokéball fell into the lake.
"Whatever, that Buizel is too weak, I'll buy another one and capture that weakling in a minute." He said.
So, he only had one Pokeball? O-kay. . .
So, Kevin takes Buizel to the Pokemon Center, but he can't afford- POKEMON CENTERS ARE FREE!
WATCH THE SHOW! PLAY THE GAMES! READ THE MANGA!
(Keldeo pressed his hooves against the sides of his head, and then sprays water on his face with his Aqua Jet hooves. He shakes the water off and then sighs)
Okay, so Kevin pays the bill by collecting money by playing his guitar. And, awww, the song he plays was the one that he and Buizel made together, and it's called "True Friends of Mine."
*Sniff* okay, that was sweet.
So, Kevin's birthday arrives, and he gets a Pokeball! After explaining how this will keep the EVIL abusive trainer from catching him, Buizel jumps right into it and is now Kevin's Pokemon. Also, Kevin's parents found out about the song he played at the Pokemon Center and his dad apparently now lets Kevin play whatever he wants. So Kevin and Buizel do some training so that they can face Gym Leader Roark.
And then we get the weirdest scene you will ever see.
Day 92: Best Christmas ever
Today was maybe the best Christmas I have ever had in my whole life. Even if my parents had to leave early though, they let me stay with Buizel in home and they left us gifts.
Dad got me a badge case… Awesome! And dad bought Buizel some berries… berries that he ate in a flash.
Mom however gave me something incredibly peculiar… a Buizel plushie… it is actually really cute. Mom gave Buizel something yet more peculiar, a me plushie…
Even if that was just plain weird, I think it's a really neat gift.
Day 134:
Just a note: Buizel can't sleep without his plushie, that is just so cute.
That is not cute. That's freakin freaky! And creepy! I mean, it's a human plushie! And it looks like Kevin? Where did that woman get that? Who even makes those? Uggh! Where's that evil abusive trainer?!
Day 234: An old enemy and an unexpected attack.
I saw that lousy trainer from the "incident" in the woods. He threw the Pokéball at Buizel but it didn't really capture him because I already had him Ha!
He dared me to a Pokémon battle and of course, I accepted. He chose a Pikachu, but he had his ear and tail cut! I couldn't believe that. I asked him what happened to that Pikachu, he said that he grabbed a scissor and "Gave him some style" That made me so mad.
In the fight his Pikachu was winning but when I told him to use Sonic Boom it actually worked and gave that Pikachu a direct hit!
He was about to win though, and something really unexpected happened, Pikachu jumped over Buizel to use thunder bolt, I told him to use Water gun but that it had to be really powerful.
"Buizel c'mon use all your strength!"
And an orange ball started to charge in his mouth and it fired some sort of laser!
It was such a powerful attack that it knocked Pikachu immediately! I simply couldn't believe it!
The jerk threw a Pokéball beside Pikachu and he just abandoned him there while he left he said that "He was useless" I couldn't believe him…
I took the Pikachu with me and to the Pokémon centre.
And thus we have the origin of Buizel's Hyper Beam and the Pikachu. And apparently Pokemon Centers are free now!
So, after listening to Kevin's music.
Kevin nodded "Strum Strum-strum-strum-strum Struuuuuuum." His friends Buizel kept time "Strum Strum-strum-strum-strum Struuuuuuuum."
And getting talked to by Buizel, the Pikachu gives Kevin a hug, which is Buizel Code for, "I wanna be your friend." And so, Kevin now has two Pokemon on his team.
(Keldeo sighs)
This next chapter. . ."Final Pages: Bonding." This is what kinda catches readers of guard. But if you lay your suspicions aside. . .it's completely innocent, cute, and adorable There is nothing wrong with what happens next.
Okay.
Here we go.
So the mother who used to say Pokemon had no feelings is now urging, or should I say, forcing Kevin to take a bath with Buizel. . .which isn't worng per say. It's weird, yeah, but not wrong.
So, Buizel ends up snuggling with Kevin in the tub, and, get this, they actually shampoo each other.
Smart Buizel.
good thing I got out quickly, I was going to smell like a Buizel if I didn't… but for some reason, the idea of smelling like my friend here, was quite an interesting thought.
Wow. .. this kid has got to get out more, and meet people. Human people. Look, I like Pokemon! I am a Pokemon! But this kid. . .if he doesn't turn into a Pokemon by the end of this. .
So, it turns out the mom has a book about bonding with Pokemon that she used to bond with a Totodile she had, and is now passing it on to Kevin. But she said Pokemon didn't have feelings two chapters ago! What is wrong with this picture?
Day 306: Spent all day reading the book.
Chapter 1: Knowing your Pokémon (check)
Chapter 2: Be his friend (check)
Chapter 3: play together (check)
Wow, most of these are actually stuff I have been doing ever since I met Buizel…
Chapter 4: Training for the first time (check)
Chapter 5: Finding new ways of training (check again)
Chapter 6: Getting closer to your Pokémon (check)
Chapter 7: speaking to your Pokémon (check, who writes this? Oh yeah, old book)
Chapter 8: Getting a little more closer to your Pokémon (check, last thing that it said was at least bath with your pokémon)
Chapter 9: Figuring out what your Pokémon likes. (Start by tomorrow)
And the last chapter was called "Bonding" it was a strange title, but, mom told me most trainers don't get to that point… but I'm pretty sure I won't get that far.
I suppose I will have to find what he likes now, it's gonna be easy! (I hope)
So, after some more playing between Kevin and Buizel, and a successful gym battle against Roark, we get to the infamous Day 204.
Oh boy.
(Keldeo rubs his eyes, sighs, and smiles.)
So, like Ash's Pikachu, Buizel hates being in Pokeballs. It's cold outside, so Kevin decides to share his sleeping bag with Buizel.
That's. . .not too bad.
But then. . .well, just watch.
It felt kind of, comfortable actually, I always sleep without a shirt so… his fur felt strange but it got this stunning and soft texture that I really liked. We slept like that for a couple of hours but Buizel moved a bit and woke me up… it was still raining, he probably wanted to be alone so I took my arm away.
Buizel then turned towards me almost on top of my chest hugging me with his both arms, he simply Buiied, obviously I couldn't understand but, the tone he gave away was very soft. He was obviously awake.
His fur felt warmer and warmer over time and his hugging felt ever more tighter, I realized it then, he really liked me as a friend, ever since I saved him near the ocean, he has always tried to be near me no matter what, since the day I told him if he wanted to be my friend, that is the real reason he won't enter his Pokéball, not because it's not confortable, he wants to be with me all time. That made me feel kind of important to him. In that moment I was damn sure that he… loved… me.
I couldn't help to follow my heart and hug him with my both arms as well, a very tight hug to make him know that I actually love him too.
(Keldeo stomps his hooves angrily)
I know the word love is used a lot here, but you know what? There are different kinds of love! This is brotherly love! Nothing romantic here! In fact, read this:
Personally, I have never thought that I would go as far as loving a Pokémon as a really good friend, but then again, Buizel is the only friend I have, the only family I got at the moment, the first one who cherished my melodies, the first one who saved my life, he has been there for me all this time.
See! It's just the love of friendship!
But, I guess people kinda go crazy when the licking scene happens.
Yeah, Buizel licks Kevin on the forehead, and Kevin licks him back.
Look, a lick is not the same as kiss. End of story. It's just a Pokemon behavior of bonding. Nothing wrong here. Sure, it's kinda creepy that a human would lick a Pokemon like this, but, hey! They're best buddies! I think this is beautiful!
And I must say, there is a lot of passion in this part of the story. I couldn't do it justice by explaining it, so why don't you check it out for yourself.
Well, this seems like a good spot to take a break. I'll be back soon, but first I'll leave you with a quote from the story:
Wouldn't have you imagined that your best friend could be your own Pokémon? Why not? There is nothing wrong to it! You shouldn't care for what others could say about what you share, I hope to tell future friends what I experimented when the time is right to not be considered a freak to the "normal" population.
We'll be right back!
The comments expressed in this review are exaggerated and more focused on the negative aspects rather than the good aspects in an attempt to create humorous reactions. Therefore, there may be a chance that there may be an appearance of bashing when in reality there is none and the FanFiction itself is in fact a very good one and deserves the highest praise. Also, particularly bad FanFictions will receive a total thrashing.
