I got this review once:
Hey this is the weridest story u ever wrote come on Ryao already gets enough toment from other writers. U could make Ryao have a girlfriend come on please i'm begging u. Well write more storys k. Cya.
KLA aka Kai's Lil Angel (AKA Alexa)
It was to one of the Candy Coated stories. First I figure after reading Ryou's name a few times you'd remember how to spell it, but whatever.
This is my response to that review.
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My Mary Sue
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Chapter Four
"Wow Blaze! I don't believe it! You beat me!" To say Yugi was surprised was a little of an understatement. But to say that Yami wasn't pissed would have been a complete lie.
/ How the hell did she win? I am the King of Games! / He growled from within his soul room.
// She's a mary sue Yami, she's perfect, of course she's going to beat you! // Yugi rolled his eyes.
The pharaoh pouted, / Well, I don't like these mary sue things. /
// Don't worry Yami, you aren't the only one. // Yugi giggled, and Yami would have found it cute if not for the fact that he was stuck in a 'straight' story.
Suddenly Yami realized something. / Yugi, there is a strange power around here. / He said, sensing a Millennium Item.
// Malik and Ryou are sitting beside me Yami, of course you're going to sense an item! // Yugi explained.
/ No, a new item.more powerful than the Rod and Ring combined. . . / Yami focused his power. (Wouldn't mind seeing Malik and Ryou 'combined'. . .)
// Wait a minute! // Yugi realized, // Blaze has this funny pendent around her neck! // He said and Yami glanced through his eyes, sure enough it was the Millennium Roller Blade!
/ Yugi, you must be careful! / The protective spirit warned, / When we were sealed within the items my wife was sealed as well! And the Millennium Roller Blade (along with all the other dumb-ass items that have been 'created') is the only one not accounted for! Her soul must be there! / He realized.
// You were married? // Yugi wondered.
/ Gah, don't remind me. Stupid nagging hag. She was all nice at first, but then she started to sleep around. I could handle it until I caught her in MY bed with none other than *gag* Bakura and Marik. /
// At the same time? // Yugi wondered.
/ *shudders* Yes. Though they were just kind of ignoring her. . . /
(Marik: Hey, I wasn't even around back then!)
"So Malik," Blaze was speaking again, so of course everyone stopped what they were doing to listen. "Are you going to show your big sister around or am I going to have to force you?" She winked. (Yes, I'm making Malik the youngest. I like Makky younger than everyone else. With the exception of Ryou and Yugi.)
Makky - er, Malik shuddered, "I suppose, but only it Ryou comes along!" (This is of course where he would normally lean over and kiss the boy beside him and Ryou would blush, but of course, this isn't yaoi!)
"Oh, that's fine!" Blaze shrugged. "Well, there's the bell!"
*BUZZZZ*
"I'd better get to class! See you after school Mickey Mouse!" She used the really (stupid) nickname as Malik growled, crunching a pop can within his hand.
"Mickey Mouse?" Joey raised an eyebrow as he watched blood drip to the table from Malik's hand.
"Don't ask." Malik growled as he got up, dragging Ryou with him, "Stupid long lost sister couldn't stay lost." He mumbled as they left the room.
\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/
A NOT SO RANDOM YAOI MOMENT
(For those of us who can't stand the het any longer. . .)
"So Malik," Blaze was speaking again, so of course everyone stopped what they were doing to listen. "Are you going to show your big sister around or am I going to have to force you?" She winked.
Malik whimpered, "Do I have to? Ryou and I were going to go make out under the bleachers of a football game on tonight!" He explained as he wrapped his arms around the white-haired boy beside him and gently kissed the boy's lips. Ryou blushed cutely as he remained silent.
"Malik, I don't care what you do when we aren't acting! But I'm supposed to fall in love with Ryou!" Blaze complained.
"I'm already in love with him, who cares? I didn't like that script." Malik shrugged as he rested his head on Ryou's shoulder.
"Come to think of it." Ryou began, "I didn't like it either." He leaned his head against Malik's.
"Damn it! We've done this take at least 47 times! First Yugi couldn't remember his lines, next Yami was locked in his soul room and then Ryou had to go to the bathroom! Damn it, what's next!" Blaze growled.
Suddenly a ball flew through the room and bounced off a wall only to hit Blaze in the head, knocking her out. A very sexily hot blonde strolled in and picked up the ball.
"Tidus you idiot! The net's the other way!" A voice shouted as 'Tidus' picked up the blitzball.
"Sorry Vincent!" Tidus yelled back and then left the scene, everyone watching him leave.
"He was hot." Joey was the first to reply.
"So was his friend." Malik wiped the drool from his mouth.
Ryou blinked and looked at the other guys, then at the same time they all jumped up and ran after the two players.
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Um.yep, that could be classified as stupid. And totally out of character for Vinnie.
Tidus and blitzball is property of whoever owns Final Fantasy 10 (He is soooo totally hot, Tidus I mean.)
Vincent is property of Cid Highwind.and I suppose Sqaresoft.
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Hey this is the weridest story u ever wrote come on Ryao already gets enough toment from other writers. U could make Ryao have a girlfriend come on please i'm begging u. Well write more storys k. Cya.
KLA aka Kai's Lil Angel (AKA Alexa)
It was to one of the Candy Coated stories. First I figure after reading Ryou's name a few times you'd remember how to spell it, but whatever.
This is my response to that review.
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My Mary Sue
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Chapter Four
"Wow Blaze! I don't believe it! You beat me!" To say Yugi was surprised was a little of an understatement. But to say that Yami wasn't pissed would have been a complete lie.
/ How the hell did she win? I am the King of Games! / He growled from within his soul room.
// She's a mary sue Yami, she's perfect, of course she's going to beat you! // Yugi rolled his eyes.
The pharaoh pouted, / Well, I don't like these mary sue things. /
// Don't worry Yami, you aren't the only one. // Yugi giggled, and Yami would have found it cute if not for the fact that he was stuck in a 'straight' story.
Suddenly Yami realized something. / Yugi, there is a strange power around here. / He said, sensing a Millennium Item.
// Malik and Ryou are sitting beside me Yami, of course you're going to sense an item! // Yugi explained.
/ No, a new item.more powerful than the Rod and Ring combined. . . / Yami focused his power. (Wouldn't mind seeing Malik and Ryou 'combined'. . .)
// Wait a minute! // Yugi realized, // Blaze has this funny pendent around her neck! // He said and Yami glanced through his eyes, sure enough it was the Millennium Roller Blade!
/ Yugi, you must be careful! / The protective spirit warned, / When we were sealed within the items my wife was sealed as well! And the Millennium Roller Blade (along with all the other dumb-ass items that have been 'created') is the only one not accounted for! Her soul must be there! / He realized.
// You were married? // Yugi wondered.
/ Gah, don't remind me. Stupid nagging hag. She was all nice at first, but then she started to sleep around. I could handle it until I caught her in MY bed with none other than *gag* Bakura and Marik. /
// At the same time? // Yugi wondered.
/ *shudders* Yes. Though they were just kind of ignoring her. . . /
(Marik: Hey, I wasn't even around back then!)
"So Malik," Blaze was speaking again, so of course everyone stopped what they were doing to listen. "Are you going to show your big sister around or am I going to have to force you?" She winked. (Yes, I'm making Malik the youngest. I like Makky younger than everyone else. With the exception of Ryou and Yugi.)
Makky - er, Malik shuddered, "I suppose, but only it Ryou comes along!" (This is of course where he would normally lean over and kiss the boy beside him and Ryou would blush, but of course, this isn't yaoi!)
"Oh, that's fine!" Blaze shrugged. "Well, there's the bell!"
*BUZZZZ*
"I'd better get to class! See you after school Mickey Mouse!" She used the really (stupid) nickname as Malik growled, crunching a pop can within his hand.
"Mickey Mouse?" Joey raised an eyebrow as he watched blood drip to the table from Malik's hand.
"Don't ask." Malik growled as he got up, dragging Ryou with him, "Stupid long lost sister couldn't stay lost." He mumbled as they left the room.
\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/
A NOT SO RANDOM YAOI MOMENT
(For those of us who can't stand the het any longer. . .)
"So Malik," Blaze was speaking again, so of course everyone stopped what they were doing to listen. "Are you going to show your big sister around or am I going to have to force you?" She winked.
Malik whimpered, "Do I have to? Ryou and I were going to go make out under the bleachers of a football game on tonight!" He explained as he wrapped his arms around the white-haired boy beside him and gently kissed the boy's lips. Ryou blushed cutely as he remained silent.
"Malik, I don't care what you do when we aren't acting! But I'm supposed to fall in love with Ryou!" Blaze complained.
"I'm already in love with him, who cares? I didn't like that script." Malik shrugged as he rested his head on Ryou's shoulder.
"Come to think of it." Ryou began, "I didn't like it either." He leaned his head against Malik's.
"Damn it! We've done this take at least 47 times! First Yugi couldn't remember his lines, next Yami was locked in his soul room and then Ryou had to go to the bathroom! Damn it, what's next!" Blaze growled.
Suddenly a ball flew through the room and bounced off a wall only to hit Blaze in the head, knocking her out. A very sexily hot blonde strolled in and picked up the ball.
"Tidus you idiot! The net's the other way!" A voice shouted as 'Tidus' picked up the blitzball.
"Sorry Vincent!" Tidus yelled back and then left the scene, everyone watching him leave.
"He was hot." Joey was the first to reply.
"So was his friend." Malik wiped the drool from his mouth.
Ryou blinked and looked at the other guys, then at the same time they all jumped up and ran after the two players.
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Um.yep, that could be classified as stupid. And totally out of character for Vinnie.
Tidus and blitzball is property of whoever owns Final Fantasy 10 (He is soooo totally hot, Tidus I mean.)
Vincent is property of Cid Highwind.and I suppose Sqaresoft.
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