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Slowly Hinata ran out of power. She remembered a similar situation, the fight against Neji during the Chuunin Exam, but that time she had known he would never really hurt her. But she hadn't given up, although she had known she had no chance against her cousin. And this time she wouldn't either. That was her way of the Ninja! Naruto had taught her that, never giving up. With a sad smile on her face and tears in her eyes she thought she maybe would have been able to talk normally to Naruto if she would have come back sometime. Now, that she didn't love him anymore… She fought as well as she could while letting her thoughts go their own way. But then an Shuriken hit her on her side. It was too late. She had fought with everything she had. But she had lost too much blood. There were plenty of more or less deep wounds everywhere on her body. And the last thing she thought before she fell down was wondering where Gaara was.
Gaara saw her falling down. Was she dead? He closed his eyes before she touched earth. He just heard that sound of her body bumping down. Something warm and liquid ran down his face. 'Why am I bleeding?', he wondered. But after touching his face and looking at his wet fingers, he recognized he was crying. Shukaku was furious. 'See how weak she made you?' But Gaara couldn't hear him. He was broken down. He lay on the sandy ground and sobbed quietly. Now he understood! He loved her! He had loved her all the time. He was sure, if there was a feeling in the world that deserved to be called love, then that was it. It had to be! Why hadn't he recognized earlier? Now it was too late. He didn't dare to look up. She was dead. He could have helped her. He hadn't. 'Doushite?', he cried out. He didn't mind any more if they heard him. So they should kill him as well. If Hinata didn't deserve to live he didn't, too. But they didn't recognize him.
When Gaara dared to look up again, he got faced with a picture he would never forget. His eyes widened with horror. One of the Ninja sat upon Hinata's inanimate body an kissed horny her neck while the other one stand beneath them and watched it grinning and voluptuous. Gaara was frozen and shocked. How could destiny be so cruel? Then, the feeling of his body came slowly back. His face distorted and he let out an enormous roar. His sand hideout dropped and he ran towards the locale of his horror. He beat that dumb grinning guy in the face and meanwhile the sand threw the other one away from Hinata's body. Normally, Gaara didn't use Taijutsu, but he was so furious, he did a tough fistfight with one of them, while the sand took care of the other one. They were beaten quickly. They hung in the air, covered with sand. Gaara pressed the sand a bit tighter, so that they screamed with pain. 'Hinata wouldn't want this', this thought suddenly appeared in his mind and his tense face unbent a little. Then it became tough again. 'I don't care.' What they had done was unforgivable. He loved Hinata, he really, really loved her, but that wouldn't make him weak! In order to protect her he didn't want to show weakness any more. Because he had one time, just this one time, and it had cost her life. He clenched his hand into a fist and the two men screamed with pain and bloody sand showered over Gaara and Hinata. Then Gaara fell down and cried.
When Hinata woke up, her head ached. She couldn't see anything. Everything was gray until it began to get contours. She felt she lay in a bed, and she could see the ceiling of a room, but when she moved her head she got dizzy again. Had she been dreaming? Did she lay at home, with her whole family still living and waiting for her to stand up? But it had seemed so real…
She rubbed her head and thought about it. When she thought she could without fainting again, she raised her head and took up her environment. The room was relatively empty, there was a shelf without anything in it and a desk, which looked like it hadn't been used for a long time. No pictures or ornaments, only bare walls. When her look fell on the window she recognized Gaara was sitting there on a chair watching the area behind the window. "Gaara-kun", she said without thinking. Gaara seemed to twitch a bit, but maybe she had just imagined that. He slowly turned around to her and said with this emotionless face: "So you finally woke up". Hinata realized his eyes which had quickly been examining her body that was only covered with a thin nightdress she wore. She blushed and pulled her blanket over her body. Gaara looked down and turned even more pale instead of red. While thinking of who arguably had dressed her into that dress, she blushed anymore and almost disappeared under her blanket. Like he knew what she was thinking, Gaara said: "Temari washed and dressed you". Hinata relaxed a little. "What happened?", she asked after a while. "Gomen nasai", he said and quickly left the room without looking at her. Confused she stared at the closed door.
Gaara cursed himself after leaving the room. Ever after he had brought her here and it was sure she would wake up again, he had thought of how to explain it to her. Why he had killed her family. What had happened. That he loved her. Now that he had seen her awake again, it was even more difficult than in his mind. He hadn't been able to explain. His throat had been so dry. No explanation could justify what he had done. While thinking, he bumped into Temari, who was going to look for Hinata. "What happened? Shouldn't you supervise her?" When she recognized he was shaking all over and even paler then usually, she quickly put the medicine away she had carried, and took Gaara with her to softly push him onto a sofa in the living room. "What is it?", she asked softly and lay a hand on his shoulder. She could be very sensitive when needed. And Gaara was thankful for that at the moment. "I can't tell her", he said. "I can't forgive myself, so why should she?" Tears came out of his dark hemmed eyes. Temari, obviously shocked of seeing her brother cry, what made him stop immediately, said: "You have to tell her. Even if she doesn't forgive you, you know she has the right to hear what happened. And after all that it wasn't you who…" "But it was me!", Gaara interfered. "Why can't I even control my body?" "You just have to explain that feeling to her. Nobody else can do that for you. I'm sure she'll understand. Doesn't she love that blonde fox-boy? Isn't he similar to you in that way?" Temari didn't know how much she hurt Gaara with her words. He stood up and only said "arigato" before leaving.
Hinata awoke when a soft and gentle hand touched her forehead and put something pleasant cool on it. She opened her eyes and looked into Gaara's face. Suddenly, and without being asked, he opened his mouth and began to explain.
Flashback
After Gaara had recovered himself a little, he stood up and went to Hinata. He sat down beneath her body and began to take the blood and sand off her body and clothing. After that, he picked her up and carried her with him. He didn't know where, but it wasn't really important. The main thing was, that she was with him. After walking a long time in the desert, under the hot burning sun, Gaara heard a quiet sigh. He immediately looked down on Hinata's body, but couldn't see any movement. It had just been his imagination. He stroked a wisp of hair out of her face and pressed her body on his chest in order to move on. And then he felt it! Her heartbeat. He sunk down on his knees and felt her pulse. He hadn't even thought about that before! Her pulse was weak, but she actually lived. He pulled her up again and ran as fast as he could. Home. To his home, where Temari helped him to rescue her. Two days later she had awoken the first time. Gaara had been watching her the whole time. He hadn't eaten and he hadn't slept.
End Flashback
After Gaara had shortly narrated what had happened, Hinata was confused. She shyly looked into his face. Then she stammered: "But… W..Why?" "We aren't enemies after all, are we?", Gaara only answered and raised an eyebrow. "S.. so desu", she said, but she still thought it was weird to hear that from the one who killed her whole family. As if he had heard what she had thought, Gaara sighed and sat down. He looked at her openly and then told her all about that feeling to have a monster inside. He seemed not only Hinata, but himself trying to convince of his innocence. Or even that it hadn't been only his fault.
