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Shadow Army.
Eragon woke from his waking dreams, and took bearing on where he and Saphira were. Saphira was flying over the strangest thing Eragon had ever seen. There was great 100 foot trees, covered in bluish flowers, the most bazaar part of the trip was that Eragon spotted large lizards, similar to dragons but with no wings crawling on the floor in the clearings. He decided that he would return to investigate.
Where are we? He asked Saphira.
About 530 leagues North of Ellesméra but still over Du Weldenvarden.
WHAT? Eragon shouted with his thoughts, we are still out of sight of the Northern boundary of Du Weldenvarden, even at this altitude.
Maybe Du Weldenvarden really is the endless forest.
Possible, do you know how close we are to Murtagh's home?
Without wind, a day away but there is a strong backwind pushing us along so we should be there tonight.
Good, I want to get back to Dras-Shur'tugal for the Presentation of Weapons. With his final words, Eragon and Saphira sunk into silence as Saphira continued to fly in a North Westerly direction. Wait, what's that? Eragon had spotted a large grey haze jutting up from above the forest.
Saphira, having much better eyesight understood what it was instantly, that is the castle that Murtagh supposedly lives in.
Ok, we don't want them to know we're coming, have you definitely got that ring that Orik gave you?
Yes, we will be as silent as the wind.
All of a sudden, Saphira flipped and a great, royal purple bulk whizzed over her belly, missing by an inch. It was another dragon, smaller than Saphira, obviously younger, about 30 years if Eragon was correct, and with all his knowledge, that was likely. It was hard to guess at ages compared to Saphira as the constant presence of at least one Eldunarí increased her growth rate at a significant amount, she was at least double the size she should be. The purple dragon was a female, more elegant than males, but not as elegant as Saphira, Queen of the sky.
Saphira roared and loosed a flame at their enemy, flipped over into an upright position, and attempted to gain altitude on the purple dragon. Eragon quickly donned his armour, and examined his opponent, he caught a glimpse of long black hair flowing behind the rider, who was wearing similar armour to Eragon. What fascinated him most was that the rider had a deep purple blade. How could they have a sword, all the Rider's swords in existence were either in Ellesméra or Dras-Shur'tugal? Eragon asked Saphira.
I wouldn't bother worrying, we will never find out because I will kill both of these whelps. Saphira was more viscous than even when they had faced Shruikan. Through their connection Eragon sensed that this was because Saphira thought them safe from most harm and that the High Dragon was attacked by another Dragon. Eragon launched his mind at the opposing Rider using his mind like a spear. He slammed into the Rider's consciousness which was surrounded by a solid iron wall. Unsurprised, Eragon combined his mind with Glaedr, Umaroth, Valdr and Saphira and resumed the attack, the opposing Rider had no chance against four dragons and a Rider.
When they entered the opponents mind Eragon was stunned with shock. Nasauda! I knew you went to Murtagh and everything but I thought you would have kids with him then die a normal death? Why didn't you come to Dras-Shur'tugal? Why didn't you at least tell me you had a dragon? AND WHY THE HELL ARE YOU ATTACKING US? Eragon roared the last statement out loud as well as into Nasauda's mind. The strength of his mental shout caused Nasauda to cover her ears.
Teretian asked me not to, he wished to live like a wild dragon, even though bonded to me, he didn't want to join the Order. Anyway, we were out hunting when I noticed another mind enter our territory and we attacked it, only when you entered my mind did I realise it was you, Saphira looks far too big for any Dragon born in the last 5 centuries. We thought you were a long lost pair from before Galbotorix.
It's good to know you are alive, will you escort us to your home, Murtagh has urgent news for us.
Ok, I warn you, he can get slightly bad stressed for he still has nightmares of the people he harmed when he was forced to work for Galbotorix. With that, Nasauda and Teretian led the way to the castle. When they arrived, they flew in through a great hole in the wall. The found themselves in a great chamber, there was a depression in the middle of the floor lined with soft furs, in the centre of it was a blood red dragon.
"Greetings Thorn, it is a pleasure to meet you." Eragon said. Thorn looked at him and Saphira, got up and greeted Saphira. Murtagh walked into the room followed by 3 young children, each with a dragon walking next to them. "Murtagh! Good to see you, I see you and Nasauda have children, and I am guessing the dragons are Thorn and Teretian's?" Eragon marched over and embraced the grinning Murtagh.
"It's good to see you as well, and how in all of Alagaesia did Saphira get so big?" Murtagh just stood staring at how large Saphira was.
"I think it is the side effect of being in the presence of powerful Eldunarí all the time, it has doubled her growth. Anyway," he said, crouching down so he was level with the children, "who are these young people?"
"This is Krisani," pointing at a young dark skinned boy with an orange dragon," this is Galdro," a ten year old boy with a longed hooked nose and a silver dragon, "and last but not least, Fricai," a small girl with flowing black hair and a pink dragon.
"Nice to meet you all, and do your dragons have names yet?" Eragon said kindly. Fricai and Galdro both shook their heads but Krisani replied.
"His names Alsot and he's really funny and I really enjoy talking to him and I really like the mind connection and stuff and he says "Hi" and he is learning to hunt and it's really fun!"
"Ok, if you like him so much then why don't you go and play, Mummy and Daddy have got some work to do. Shoo." Nasauda said making the children scurry out the room excitedly.
"So this urgent news, what is it?" Eragon asked when they door was locked and Murtagh had cast a spell so that the children couldn't hear them.
I think it best that I start from the beginning, 428 years ago. As I flew over head on Thorn, the villagers saw us. They thought we had come to invade their land and kill them and so on. When we had settled down here, they realised that we just wanted to live in peace. They came and greeted us, they speak this language as well, and a few know the ancient language. I helped them, healed them when they were sick, fought off pillaging Urgals, a few generations passed and they came to see me as a deity. I was god of fire, war and air. Then Nasauda arrived and they began to worship her as the goddess of love, shadows, death and magic. The magic users began their own mini-cult. They worshipped us both but they preferred Nasauda, recently, sorcerers have begun to formulate the ultimate plan to earn her gratitude. They heard us tell of the Alagaesia, that we left, they thought we meant kicked out. So they are making an army for Nasauda, an unstoppable army of shadow."
"But what, how could it be unstoppable?" Eragon was confused.
"Eragon, think, goddess of shadows and magic. An army for her created by sorcerers. What do you think it is?" Murtagh was clearly annoyed that Eragon didn't see what was wrong.
"You mean...an army of Shades?" Eragon was horrified, "but that can't happen, they would be killed before they could make two!"
"No, they use magic to tie the volunteers up in solid metal attacked by magic to rock, and then they begin drugging the soon-to-be-shades with the same drug that Durza gave you in Gil'ead. Then they summon the spirits into the volunteer and keep administrating the drug. They already have over a hundred Shades in this manner."
"SHIT!" Eragon swore violently, "Do you have a mirror I can use to contact Ilirea?"
"Yeah, sure," Nasauda ran out the room and returned quickly with a full length mirror.
Eragon took it and cast a spell and Queen Nasauda IV appeared on the screen.
"Eragon, what's wrong? Why are you so worried?" she asked.
"We have a problem and it's going to be heading through Palancar Valley sometime this year. An army of Shades has been made by the natives to the area North of Alagaesia, and it's heading here to wage war on you, garrison your entire army on Palancar valley, they will head straight for it. I have to go now, there is a lot to do in a short amount of time. Goodbye for now." Eragon ended the spell and quickly redid the spell and Jeod materialised on the mirror, "Jeod, you have to listen to me, get all the women and children out of Palancar Valley, prepare all the defences you have there, make sure you have enough provisions to support the Urgal army, the Surdan army, the Elven army, the Dwarven army, and the Royal army, stock up on arrows, armour, get as many healers as you can find and prepare for a war that will come from the North. Also, get as many mages as you can find, for this war, you will need all the magic possible. I am about to go and lead the Rider's to war. Go, do as I say, If needs must, get catapults, ballistae, and a naval fleet to dock in the North Sea." Before Jeod could even say a word, Eragon ended the spell and contacted Blödhgarm, "Blödhgarm, you must tell Rhünon to hurry in her forging of Kaldi's axe, he will need it the moment I return. Prepare for departure and war, when I return we will head for Palancar Valley. Everyone must practice archery as much as possible, we need that skill, it is invaluable for the coming war, I will explain more when I return." Eragon ended the spell and closed his eyes. I am going to war once more when I had hoped not to. I am also returning to Alagaesia, maybe Angela was wrong in her prophecy. He thought.
Do not fret little one, you are a hundred times more powerful than you were when you faced Durza or Varaug.
"Murtagh, Nasauda, we must leave now, but before we do, I must ask one thing, kill as many of the shades as possible before they leave for Alagaesia." Eragon said this as he climbed into the saddle on Saphira's back, "Farewell, I hope to see you again."
Saphira roared and leaped out the castle and flew with all possible speed to Dras-Shur'tugal.
A/N: DUN DUN DUNNNNNNNNN! Well, that was a surprise, I hope it isn't too crap please review, love it or flame it I don't care, It just helps improve my story line so PLEASE REVIEW! Anon reviews allowed, CLICK THAT BUTTON AND REVIEW MY STORY PLEASE!
