Totemo Yurusenai-I can't forgive
Chapter 3
Disclaimer: I don't own Ranma ½. Rumiko Takahashi does.
A/N: Hello everyone!!
Thanks for reviewing! I really appreciate it!
Okay so a lot of people commented on my dialog umm-bad habits. Okay so I'd like to thank you for bringing this to my attention and I was already aware of it. This might seem odd for a Fanfic writer in English but I take ESL (English Second Language) and all of my courses (Except for English and Spanish) are in French so the grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc.etc. Is different. I tried using the French dialog but it didn't work well so then I tried a couple that I saw in books and other fanfics so that's the reason I keep switching. I honestly didn't think anyone was reading this fanficcie so it was more of an experiment for me than anything (also something to occupy me while I'm on strike since nobody is reading my other fanfic).
With all the said Ranma said Akané said Yuu etc…well I have no other choice really.
I'm glad you like the plot.
And I'll try to improve my writing skills. Thanks to Taxzombie, to Quiet-Sides, to lija, to Shishigami13 and to O. you guys were a great help. Thanks Laith for writing to me I hope I cleared some stuff up for you.
I will re-read it from now on it's just that it really bugs me when an author rights a chapter per month so I try to get mine posted as quickly as possible…I'll try to make it clearer so that you know who's talking and if it gets redundant with all the said Ranma said Akané said Yuu etc…well I have no other choice really.
Bare with me here. Thank you and please review.
Yuki
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"Ranma hasn't called?" Akané's voice was anxious as she ask the same question that she had been asking for the past four days.
"No, he hasn't Akané," answered Nabiki, "Don't worry, he'll be alright." At least I hope she added in her own mind.
He was indeed fine. Yuu had mummified him well after their last fight. Yuu was very fast as a guy but even faster as a girl. So almost every time Ranma attacked his fist or kick connected with nothingness and Yuu had her lightning attack mastered. But what Ranma lacked in speed was made up by his superior strength. They were both hurt when the finished that little exercise.
Ranma considered Yuu a wonderful sparring and training partner because, one he got along with her very well, two they could correct each others mistakes without any hard feelings and three they were both of equal ability.
Yuu splashed some cold water on himself and he returned to his original form...The little red-headed girl.
"Hey Yu-chan?" Ranma asked "Did you look like that before you were cursed? I mean as a girl."
"Yeah I did Ran-chan." She answered. "I think the Spring turns you into what you would have looked like if you had been born in your cursed form."
"Good theory", Ranma said, "It's probably true. That would mean that we naturally look alike."
"Probably each girl has a guy that would look exactly like her if he were a girl", she said stroking her chin with a finger thoughtfully, "We were all born in pairs!", she laughed. "I didn't really say anything because whether you look like me or not could just be a coincidence of me falling in the same Spring as you. But you do look like me and that's pretty cool. I don't usually pay attention to those kind of details."
"I noticed almost right away" Ranma answered, "I pay more attention to that now since I fell into the Spring, it must be a side effect."
"Hey Ran-chan!", Yuri pointed to a small cave, "There's a good place to sleep and there's water right near it! Let's camp there for the night. Is that okay with you?"
"Well it's a little early to set up camp just yet", he commented, "But maybe if we made traveling food like rice balls and stuff it would be worth it"
"Right-oh then! It's cooking time! I got a big bag of rice somewhere in my pack, I bought it in the last village. We can also look for wild plants and fish to put in the rice balls." Yuri looked at the little river hopefully, "Why don't you set up camp while I look around for eatable plants?".
"I got a better idea", he said, "Why don't you set up camp and I'll go looking around."
"That won't work", Yuri answered smiling, "First, I set up camp last time, second it would take to long to re-heat water so if I get wet it's no big deal but for you it is and I can't lift all the equipment as a girl."
And she ran off leaving Ranma stranded. What was wrong with his equipment? Okay it wasn't very handy for traveling because it was a bit heavy and bulky but Yuri could lift it. She had done so yesterday. But her water explanation was good. He looked up at the sky and figured that there wouldn't be any rain tonight but he would put the tent in the cave just in case.
Akané's friends were taking her out to diner so that she would cheer up. They'd already planned it out. They would go over to the Tendo Dojo around five and get Akané dressed for the occasion. Then they would take her to that fancy new restaurant that had just come into Nerima. There they would convince her that Ranma still loved her and he would come back or if all failed they would try and tell to move on with her life but they didn't want to see Furinkan's hottest couple break apart like that.
At five, Nabiki called Akané down claiming she had visitors. Akané didn't want to see anybody so her friends just walked up to her room and let themselves in. One headed one to the closet, the other explained to Akané what was happening and an other was looking through Akané's few beauty products and came back armed with a hair brush and said: "I'm glad I brought my make-up with me." They made Akané go wash her face and brush her teeth. By then they had chosen a dress for her. They curled the tips of her hair so that it framed her face, put a very curly mascara so that her eyes seemed bigger than they already were and some red lipstick with a sheer coating on top. Her dress was a long black one that thinned her out and made her look taller and older. Complete with some black heeled shoes, a light summer jacket and a black handbag. Her friends ushered her out the door and into a cab. It was, as they said, a girls night out.
Hello, please R/R and I bought a book on punctuation and grammar.
Bye-bye and bare with me 'til the end.
Yu
Chapter 3
Disclaimer: I don't own Ranma ½. Rumiko Takahashi does.
A/N: Hello everyone!!
Thanks for reviewing! I really appreciate it!
Okay so a lot of people commented on my dialog umm-bad habits. Okay so I'd like to thank you for bringing this to my attention and I was already aware of it. This might seem odd for a Fanfic writer in English but I take ESL (English Second Language) and all of my courses (Except for English and Spanish) are in French so the grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc.etc. Is different. I tried using the French dialog but it didn't work well so then I tried a couple that I saw in books and other fanfics so that's the reason I keep switching. I honestly didn't think anyone was reading this fanficcie so it was more of an experiment for me than anything (also something to occupy me while I'm on strike since nobody is reading my other fanfic).
With all the said Ranma said Akané said Yuu etc…well I have no other choice really.
I'm glad you like the plot.
And I'll try to improve my writing skills. Thanks to Taxzombie, to Quiet-Sides, to lija, to Shishigami13 and to O. you guys were a great help. Thanks Laith for writing to me I hope I cleared some stuff up for you.
I will re-read it from now on it's just that it really bugs me when an author rights a chapter per month so I try to get mine posted as quickly as possible…I'll try to make it clearer so that you know who's talking and if it gets redundant with all the said Ranma said Akané said Yuu etc…well I have no other choice really.
Bare with me here. Thank you and please review.
Yuki
:::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: :::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: :::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::
"Ranma hasn't called?" Akané's voice was anxious as she ask the same question that she had been asking for the past four days.
"No, he hasn't Akané," answered Nabiki, "Don't worry, he'll be alright." At least I hope she added in her own mind.
He was indeed fine. Yuu had mummified him well after their last fight. Yuu was very fast as a guy but even faster as a girl. So almost every time Ranma attacked his fist or kick connected with nothingness and Yuu had her lightning attack mastered. But what Ranma lacked in speed was made up by his superior strength. They were both hurt when the finished that little exercise.
Ranma considered Yuu a wonderful sparring and training partner because, one he got along with her very well, two they could correct each others mistakes without any hard feelings and three they were both of equal ability.
Yuu splashed some cold water on himself and he returned to his original form...The little red-headed girl.
"Hey Yu-chan?" Ranma asked "Did you look like that before you were cursed? I mean as a girl."
"Yeah I did Ran-chan." She answered. "I think the Spring turns you into what you would have looked like if you had been born in your cursed form."
"Good theory", Ranma said, "It's probably true. That would mean that we naturally look alike."
"Probably each girl has a guy that would look exactly like her if he were a girl", she said stroking her chin with a finger thoughtfully, "We were all born in pairs!", she laughed. "I didn't really say anything because whether you look like me or not could just be a coincidence of me falling in the same Spring as you. But you do look like me and that's pretty cool. I don't usually pay attention to those kind of details."
"I noticed almost right away" Ranma answered, "I pay more attention to that now since I fell into the Spring, it must be a side effect."
"Hey Ran-chan!", Yuri pointed to a small cave, "There's a good place to sleep and there's water right near it! Let's camp there for the night. Is that okay with you?"
"Well it's a little early to set up camp just yet", he commented, "But maybe if we made traveling food like rice balls and stuff it would be worth it"
"Right-oh then! It's cooking time! I got a big bag of rice somewhere in my pack, I bought it in the last village. We can also look for wild plants and fish to put in the rice balls." Yuri looked at the little river hopefully, "Why don't you set up camp while I look around for eatable plants?".
"I got a better idea", he said, "Why don't you set up camp and I'll go looking around."
"That won't work", Yuri answered smiling, "First, I set up camp last time, second it would take to long to re-heat water so if I get wet it's no big deal but for you it is and I can't lift all the equipment as a girl."
And she ran off leaving Ranma stranded. What was wrong with his equipment? Okay it wasn't very handy for traveling because it was a bit heavy and bulky but Yuri could lift it. She had done so yesterday. But her water explanation was good. He looked up at the sky and figured that there wouldn't be any rain tonight but he would put the tent in the cave just in case.
Akané's friends were taking her out to diner so that she would cheer up. They'd already planned it out. They would go over to the Tendo Dojo around five and get Akané dressed for the occasion. Then they would take her to that fancy new restaurant that had just come into Nerima. There they would convince her that Ranma still loved her and he would come back or if all failed they would try and tell to move on with her life but they didn't want to see Furinkan's hottest couple break apart like that.
At five, Nabiki called Akané down claiming she had visitors. Akané didn't want to see anybody so her friends just walked up to her room and let themselves in. One headed one to the closet, the other explained to Akané what was happening and an other was looking through Akané's few beauty products and came back armed with a hair brush and said: "I'm glad I brought my make-up with me." They made Akané go wash her face and brush her teeth. By then they had chosen a dress for her. They curled the tips of her hair so that it framed her face, put a very curly mascara so that her eyes seemed bigger than they already were and some red lipstick with a sheer coating on top. Her dress was a long black one that thinned her out and made her look taller and older. Complete with some black heeled shoes, a light summer jacket and a black handbag. Her friends ushered her out the door and into a cab. It was, as they said, a girls night out.
Hello, please R/R and I bought a book on punctuation and grammar.
Bye-bye and bare with me 'til the end.
Yu
