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I was running away, from who or what, I wasn't sure...however the snarling was a big clue. My lungs were on fire, arms pumping at my sides. I was racing for my life. I could hear the snapping of teeth close at my heels, and the sound of a helicopter. My mind raced, looking for a way out. That's when I saw it, The Cliff. I braced my self and jumped...Pain burst into my mind as I fell...

I woke up with a start, my head was throbbing painfully. An evil laugh echoed around me. "Envy..." I spat as if is left a bad taste in my mouth.

"What's da madder 'hero'? aww da poor pipsqueak's godda headache?" he sneered.

"SHUT UP I AM NOT SMALL!" I stood up and turned to face the creature that Bastard created. It always hurt to think of him. I always shoved the good and the bad memories of him out of my mind. My migrane had already taken care of that. Envy just stood there smirking. I wanted to slam his face in the dirt and watch him bleed; I restrainted myself. Envy moved aside to reveal...

"AL!" I cried. I sprang forward to see if Al was ok, only to be punched in the gut by Envy. I fell to my knees and held in a cry of pain. I coughed harshly and an iron taste burst into my mouth...blood. I could feel the weight of Envy's stare and smirk. "a-al..." I coughed.

"Come to the old abandoned torture warehouse, if you want to save your dear brother." Envy picked up Al, my brother...my only family left and disappeared. I cursed to myself. I stood up and sprinted, hard, trying my best to ignore the excruciating pain. I had to find the warehouse and save Al. I wandered around and started asking people if they knew where the warehouse was. I was tired...cold and wet, I couldn't care less. Al was out there and in trouble, and it was all my stupid fault.

"That warehouse is on the other side of the river, but there's a storm blowing though I wouldn't go there now!" said and old woman. I didn't care...I didn't give a damn. Lightning streaked the sky and the thunder roared. For what seemed like hours, I walked out of town and I found the warehouse. The door let out a loud creak as I pulled them open. Envy's sinister laughs echoed throughout the building.

"Brother...run i-it's a trap..." I heard Al's voice whimper.

"Al!" I started to run over to him to double check if Envy hadn't hurt him. Envy jumped down from the rafters between myself and my brother.

"SURPRISE, HERO!" He shouted and he pushed me back. I stumbled backwards and lost my balance. As I fell, I heard the sound of a clap and a blinding light came up from under me. I was over a transmutation circle. The pain lasted for eternity. My cries echoed...I couldn't gather my thoughts, c-couldn't concentrate...too much pain. A long mournful howl rose over my cries of pain. I was slipping into darkness once again.

"Did the it work?" asked Envy.

"Yes...now he is a Chimera..." said a voice.

"Dante, what if this fails?" Envy asked.

"Peace my child...This will work, I'll make sure of it..."

END CHAPTER 3: THE TRANSMUTATION AND THE TRANSFORMATION


WELL THERE YOU GO!