Ok, so this is more of a rant, like a rant- rant, on a fanfiction I just read. Everything here is my opinion so if you know the story, or recognize it this is just my personal opinion so please keep that in mind.


OK, so the other day I read this fanfiction, one that I used to think was really cool, with a strong female character. Now, I hate her, find her super annoying and down right stupid.

The story starts out with her going to the Sakamaki mansion after finding out it was haunted, out of curiosity. This is understandable, I would probably investigate as well- but the thing was is that upon arriving she does indeed come across the Sakamakis.

At first she doesn't believe that they are vampires, before Reiji act OOC and teleports behind her whispering into her ear and licking her throat. In front of his brothers.

Reiji, would never, ever, do that of all things in front of his brothers. It should have been a red flag from the begining but I overlooked it. Instead she immediately excepts that they are vampires, and that she will probably die soon.

Oh my god. Is this girl suicidal? The only conclusion that makes sense is that she is suffering from some kind of severe depression that would make her perfectly fine with being murdered. Then she acts like this is smart, not fighting vampires is a good move, since you will loose anyways and you'll never win. Girl, have some dignity!

This would be fine, if not two chapters later she back talks Ruki, insults Carla to his face, and then goes and kills Shin.

Kills the First Blood.

When she meets the Mukami's she acts as though the Sakamaki's are so much better, and says it to their face to, and overall her behavior is that of an entitled fangirl. She acts like a bitch to them- without cause. They act the same as the Sakamakis who she just submitted to without question and little complaints.

Did I mention that for some reason, she had to stay in Shu and Reiji's rooms, despite them living in a fucking mansion, with hundreds of spar rooms and servants- with magic- that could easily fix her up a place?

That and the very next day Reiji tortures her, and she's completely fine with it. The girl get's Stockholm syndrome in like the first five minutes of being there.

The characters act OOC around her, acting like actual human beings around her in a few chapters, and treating her as family. Laito even stops being a man-slut. Now you know she's at Mary-Sue levels.

You might be wondering- oh, where is Yui?

Yui is apparently Kathrine Pierce levels of slut (vampire diaries) just think Cordelia, but better at acting. She's the manipulative slut that all the brothers fall for, but then she runs so Yuma kills her.

Like, you guys know how I feel about Yui, so making her into some bitchy Cordelia slut pissed me off. I overlooked this when I was younger, but now that I've matured a bit I can't help but get irritated.

This girl was insane.


Sorry I just had to get this off my chest- tell me about stories that you once thought were cool but now you realize the character wasn't actually as 'strong' as you thought she was.