Tell me if your brains have died yet
Chapter three the Battle 4 the caln I'll fight for the caln too
thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1 I'm sure I can't right one, but I think I can write one!1!1!1 (did I do the exclamations right?)
StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos. Ugh, run-on sentence…((I'm thinking about revising this so it's actually readable; what do you guys think?))
"JazzPaw get up." She cried. Why is she crying? Is Jazzpaw dead? JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr.
"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked. Starkit, you're not the deputy. You can't just take another apprentice out on patrol
"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp. Can there please be a sentence with correct spelling? Please, just one?
But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11 Stop with these exclamation points already
"Shadowclan are attaking!" She yelled. What? It's one cat. Starkit probably destroyed a treaty with ShadowClan. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of. An apprentice for one day clawed a cat and beats him. *Mary-Sue alert*
"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. 'Was'? Is she dead? Your a good fihter!"
StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant. Even though the prophecy said nothing about fighting
thnkx and ples no more flams I would never flam, maybe flame, but never flam