WARNING: I am writing on the bus so my grammar might be weird.
thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1 (*sighs* so nieve and stupid, A NOOB CAN WRITE BETTER THAN YOU!)
StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos. (yup, like the clans TOTALLY know what JAZZ is!)
"JazzPaw get up." She cried. JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr.
"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked. (no)
"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp.
But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11 (OMG! ever think maybe he just wanted to talk to firestar?)
"Shadowclan are attaking!(one shadowclan cat does NOT mean that the whole clan is watching)" She yelled. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat (so that means it might not have been blackstar, but some other cat?)and clawd him and he ran of.
"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. Your a good fihter!" (MARY SUE!)
StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant.
thnkx and ples no more flams (nah, I would still flame you)