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What has the world done to You
Chapter 4 I ate the Cookie Monster
Lightning flashed illuminating the entire city for a few seconds. Thunder rolled and the rain pounded on the roof. Darkness shrouded everything.
A young red headed man sat in a wheelchair. He was in a giant living room scowling out the window. He watched the rain pound angrily against the glass. The teal eyed young man sighed and closed his tired eyes.
"Gaara." A deep voice called from behind the wheelchair. "So…I took the rest of the week off; to be home with you 'kay buddy?"
"Kankurou, I am not your buddy and do as you please." The red head growled before shifting uncomfortably in the wheelchair.
Kankurou sighed and scratched the back of his head uncomfortably. "…You ok? Do you want me to turn the TV on or something?" Gaara cast a bored glance over his shoulder to his older brother and shrugged. "…Sweeney Todd."
The brown haired male stared stupidly at his younger brother. "Uhh….you do want to watch TV? Is that a show or something? Is it on now? What channel?" He asked as he wheeled Gaara next to the couch.
Gaara closed his eyes as Kankurou moved him and shook his head. "It's a movie. Sweeney Todd: The Demon Barber of Fleet Street. Put it on."
Kankurou nodded and looked though the shelves for the movie. "So, ah, do you want popcorn? Milk? How about a sandwich?" He offered as he put the movie in to play and handed Gaara the remote. "Coffee." Gaara murmured; watching the previews. "Ok, be right back."
'…He's being extremely kind…because the doctors put me on suicide watch. Do they honestly believe I'm an idiot? They warned Temari, who in turn ordered Kankurou to keep a close eye on me. I'm being baby sat.'
"Here you go bro." Kankurou handed Gaara the coffee as well as a plate of freshly baked chocolate chip cookies.
Gaara stared at the plate of cookies in his lap then looked at his older brother funny. "Oh don't get me wrong dude; I didn't bake them, Temari did before she left for work." "Oh…" Then he grabbed the largest cookie and shoved it into his mouth whole.
"So are you obsessed with cookies or something?" Kankurou asked, sipping some of his coffee and watched his younger brother out of the corner of his eyes.
"I ate the cookie monster so shut up before I eat you too."
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