Disclaimer: I don't own Naruto and company, their world, the organizations in that world, or anything else you read in the manga. I do own the characters I bothered to give personalities to and the organizations I put them in and I shall flame you to hell if you use them.
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The crowd roared in anticipation. Today was the first day of the second round/public round of the Chunin exam. Naruto was revved up and ready to go. Good too because his was the first match. He was going up against the Naturu kid. After his impressive show last year, the crowd was much more appreciative of him. After soaking up his praise, Naruto returned to tunnel vision and became focused on taking that punk down.
"He uses those yo-yos of his to tie up his opponents, but can use some more unusual weapons." he thought, "So maybe if I…" he trailed off as he made two Shadow Clones. Seemingly unsurprised by the increased number of opponents, Naturu's yo-yos flashed into view and swung around to the left and right. Naruto, all three of them, easily dodged them. Naruto, seeing his opponent's main weapons didn't appear to be much use, went in for the kill. Directing his clones to from a triangle of attack, Naruto thought that he would be done in…less than 2 minutes, but he was quite wrong. A sharp pain hit him on the forehead and he was thrown back. He felt his two clones disintegrate as they were given a direct attack. When he snapped back, he looked for what hit him. The only thing that could have counted, as weapons were three white cubes dotted with black paint, dice.
"What the hell?" Naruto thought, and then they blew up, violently.
"GAH!" he then landed with an undignified thump.
"WHAT THE BLOODY HELL?" Naruto yelled, jumping away from another dice that landed in front of his feet, not a moment too soon, as it exploded milliseconds after he landed. Looking over at his opponent, Naruto recognized the demonic grin his opponent wore as the same one he wore while pranking. He looked just in time to see another yo-yo spin out at him. Jumping out of range again, he had to miss the handful of dice thrown from the other hand. As the dust settled, Naruto jumped at his opponent, cutting the yo-yo string as it flew towards him. His feet connected with Naturu's chest and knocked him to the arena floor. But then a pair of legs crossed his neck and pulled him towards the ground. But just before he landed, Naruto pushed hard with his arms before he landed and flipped out of the leg-hold. Before he lost his advantage, Naruto jumped on his back and put a kunai to his opponent's neck.
"Yield." Naturu said, just loud enough for the judges to hear.
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Da Ten's and Hinata's fight resembled a dance more than a fight to the death. The Gentle Fist technique was slower than most styles, but Da Ten moved even slower. Through some mystical or magical force, not a single blow seemed to land. Disbelief raced across most of the audience's faces and Hinata's too as seemingly no blows landed on Da Ten.
"What the hell is going on?" Naruto asked from the competitor's box. But the area around the fighters shimmered like a mirage and the seemingly one sided battled quickly faded into reality. A large dibble of blood dripped out of Da Ten's face and large bruises formed over the largest chakra openings where they had been hit numerous times. However, a long white rope had snaked around Hinata and a quick pull would have been immobilized. But Da Ten was too worn out to give the last pull but Hinata had already been too entangled in her opponent's hair to deliver a final blow. The match was determined a tie.
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Third up was Neji and Kaito. Neji assumed the now familiar Gentle Fist position and Kaito pulled out one of his not quite affectionately nicknamed fire-tubes. He took a shot at Neji but the longhaired teen dodged it easily. Kaito grabbed another fire-tube from his vest and shot a rapid wave of shots at Neji. A Heavenly Spin quickly took care of the fruitless attack. Neji then pounced aiming for the mess of chakra openings around the torso, he hit, but then felt a dull pain in his stomach, pulling away, Neji saw a deep graze oozing blood and staining his shirt. Just then, his opponent swung a leg at him. Neji blocked it easily with a forearm but another cut opened on his arm. Then realization hit him; the blade was attached to Kaito's shoe. Using his blood limit, Neji found strategically placed spikes roped on to Kaito's body. The next time he hit, he aimed for an area unprotected by an array of knives; his first hit had just missed being impaled in a painful number of places. But his effort was in vain as Kaito shifted at the last moment, causing Neji to hit a knife in the tissue between his first finger and thumb. Jerking back, Kaito almost landed another kick but thankfully missed. Neji took Kaito's relatively long recovery time to grab at his throat, cutting off his air. Semi-blocking the chakra holes in his spinal cord caused Kaito to go limp, leaving Neji the winner.
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Finally, Horo and Mitsu were up. Most people didn't see what happened, not even the Huygas, the cameras barely caught it. Horo tried to get her the same way he got his last unfortunate opponent. Then there was a lot of blood and the cloaked fighter was gagging and choking on the ground, his face turning rapidly worse colours. Within seconds, he was dead. But before anyone could react, Mitsu chopped off the corpse's head and vanished.
"Whahh?" Naruto asked, leaning forward. Suddenly, a commotion broke out in the box,
"What are you doing?" Neji yelled behind him. Naruto turned just in time to see Neji fall forward before a cloth was forced over his mouth and nose and he lost consciousness too.
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Neither kidnapped boy...
So, what do you think? Can i write fight scenes, or is it as bad as my scriptwriting? sorry it's so sort. Any comment are aprriciated, i'm in a bit of a writing fever, so i'm constantly in a bit of a worry about the quality, which, i'm sure aegis phoenicis (my beta once upon a time) will tell you, can vary dramatically, particularly in the spelling and grammer. ALTHOUGH (this is for those lovely admin of ours and those spineless suckers who report abuse for fun) i do proof-read and correct all my work, several times. But as i've finally started turning the creative crank in my head for the first time in a year, i haven't reread every word twenty times in as many weeks. so yeah, drop a line, particularly if you're one of those people who've read it all the way through (thanks by the way). toodles said the pugs to the poodles in the puddles.
By the way, did i mention that the first chunk is over and you get to actually see where the story takes place (or at least, get a feel for my version of the ninja world and the people in it)? okay, maybe that isn't as exciting to most people as it is to me (does hinata finger poke) well, see you later!