Wow, thanks, Crazyllamapersonlol. I didn't even expect anyone to review my story.
As for the "annoying paragraphs" you say I'm doing, I tried to change that.
It took a moment to get over the shock that engulfed me when I met the freezing sea. Almost all the breath was knocked out of me as I fell. I needed to get out of the water, and fast. As I started to swim upwards, I noticed my pack was missing. I figured that it must have fallen when my head went under. I started to swim faster. Hopefully my pack was on ice and not in water. Many important things were in it. I was completely unprepared for the moment when my head hit solid ice.
I reeled from the impact. My head spinning, I didn't notice that I sank a few feet deeper. Once I recovered, I swam back to the surface, slowly this time, and again I felt ice over my head. Carefully feeling with one flipper, I realized there was ice over me. It would be nearly impossible for me to resurface. If I didn't find a way to break through the ice, I would be in serious trouble. I felt panic start to rise inside me but I pushed it down. There was bound to be some way to get to the surface. Perhaps I simply needed to swim to shallower water and try to break through the thinner ice there.
The solution seemed so simple, I calmed down immediately. Starting to swim in one direction, a question popped up in my head. Was the way I was swimming the way to shallow water? I stopped and thought for a moment. Since I could feel my chest starting to tighten from lack of air, I decided that I was too desperate to get to the surface and that I was probably going the right way.
After swimming for a while, I began to have the sensation that I was being followed. I stopped and cautiously began swimming to the surface. I noticed something like a shadow near the ice, but it was gone in an instant. Suddenly feeling wary, I ascended faster. All of a sudden something brushed against my back. It was as rough as sandpaper. I spun around to find myself face-to-face with a huge shark.
The shark bared its teeth and the first thought that popped into my mind was "Get away!" I figured out quickly that I must have accidently swam the wrong way, so instead I was in deeper water instead of shallow. Immediately I swam the other way as fast as I could, opposite of where I was going. Soon I could see no ice above me.
When my head broke through the surface of the water, I gasped in air. I realized that I had reached the cliff of Shark Bay. The water was still deep and frozen, and there was already a fair amount of water in my lungs, so I had trouble catching my breath. I noticed that more storm clouds have moved across the sky while I was underwater. The winds had picked up, and I could see nothing but waves and water.
I was wondering what to do next when I felt something latch on to the edge of the jacket I was wearing.
The shark had found me.
I would've made this chapter longer if I didn't get writer's blockā¦
