Old plot
Swcurtis00 first review - where do you come from? I want to know how a 16 year old is in grade 7.
Answer - Well I'm sure some of you know I'm not American from my spelling, like "favor" being spelt "favour" "color" being "colour" and I use kilometers and liters instead of miles and gallons.
I seriously can't believe you missed the part I said he's remembering stuff from his past, but I won't lie, I laughed super hard when I rad that.
Swcurtis00 second review - I'm guessing you have some short term memory loss
Answer - kind of. But my story has nothing to do with it.
draco122 - this is odd i will not lie but i like it and looking forward to more
Answer - I'm sorry I changed the whole story if you were fascinated by the original plot.
Rogue-H-Dragoon - I don't know who died,maybe penny,but I can tell that they most likely died by a sexually transmitted diseases
Answer - you must really hate Penny, but I haven't displayed any information of myself hating her. I never said anything about someone dead, so where were you getting your Intel of a dead person?
Current plot
B-Day - Hey, I like the anime reference, aside from that, the story seems kind of rushed. I suggest that you you read your story over and make corrections. Other than that, it's good. Keep up the good work.
Answer - You like it, I like you. I will not lie I rushed it, 'cause I wanted to get to the good parts, but I remembered that I needed to fill the missing bits. Also since I wrote it, when I reread the stuff, I can't recognize most of the mistakes.
Guest1998 - Not bad. A bit fast though, don't you think? Also, can't wait for more.
And check grammar.
Answer - Yeah, it is fast, and like I wrote, I mostly miss mistakes.
Anonanon-E-Mouse - Horribly confused after reading... it seems to be out of oder, and missing bits
Answer - That was the idea for chapter 1.
Lexboss - Cool
Answer - You're the cool one.
Orimura Guest first paragraph - (Go ahead and delete my review if you can't handle constructive criticism because it won't make what I've said not true :P)
Answer - No, but I would not see unrighteous statements.
Paragraph 2 - This story seems to be heavily inspired by "Infinite Stratos". Basically that premise but with Gumball as the lead character.
Answer - I was inspired by "Tenchi Muyo! War on Geminar", english translation "Sage Machine Master Story in the Different World".
It about a boy who makes friends and 'steals hearts' of most, then all of the girls in the school, being aware of this he let the student counsel use him to be the public face of the student counsel, since all the counsel members are unknown to the public. He abilities, strength, speed and skills are maxed out to the level that he seems like a superhuman. When the threat comes he shows his true abilities as the "Sage Machine Master.".
The robots "Sacred Mechanoid" are skeleton giant partly organic robots, piloted from the chest, it uses their stamina to power it. The main character has lots of stamina as the strongest pilot can only keep it active for an hour, and the MC can keep his active for a half a year, at least. Also the pilots are 89.7% female and 2.96% male.
I made the decision to make changes as needed and come up with my own threat. So did you think my story was copying Infinite Stratos because it's a harem story that has robots and the name of the robots starts with "Infinite"?
Is infinite stratos the only mecha/harem anime you've watched?
From what you said, you are saying I'm copying I.S, do you have proof of this claim? 'Cause from your statement I'm copying a plot. Are the threats non-piloted robots? NO! Is it Gumball's long lost older sister threat? Fuckin NO! So please enlighten me to how you came to think I'm copying infinite stratos?
Paragraph 3 - I mean, there's potential for an idea like that as an alternate universe or a "what if" scenario but my major criticism towards this story is that it doesn't feel like TAWOG at all.
Answer - Is it because it's in anime style?
Too serious?
Not as funny? I'm trying.
I haven't used the non OCs characters? I have a plan for that.
Paragraph 4 - Other than Gumball, there's barely any of the familiar TAWOG cast playing a major role. They've all been swapped out in favor of generic OCs.
Paragraph 5 - Given that this is an Anime style universe why not just use the existing cast the audience is already somewhat familiar with?
Answer - I guess I have one right. Like I said there's a plan, it's not like you have any idea of what will be in the next chapter.
Paragraph 6 - And I could even let that slide if Gumball was interesting enough to carry the plot by himself. The story reduces Gumball to just another clueless harem Anime protagonist.
Answer - When did I write Gumball as an clueless, harem, main lead, or did you just think I will stuff my story with some of the most annoying anime clichés? Fuck you asshole, fuck you.
Gumball is a scared, self-centered, ego maniac, pervert, who has trust issues, but is aware that he is loved by people, also being cold, arrogant, overconfident and ruthless.
Paragraph 7 - There's hardly any of his usual snarky remarks and sarcasm. He's Gumball in name only.
Answer - I'm trying.
Paragraph 8 - Then there's the story telling. Most of it is just constant exposition. In other words events are constantly explained to us and nothing else. And it feels way too rushed.
Paragraph 9 - E.g. Gumball meeting his parents again lasts for less than a couple of paragraphs. We're never told why they sold him or if they felt any regret.
Answer - My writing is highly common in fanfiction so I'm not changing. As shown in the previous chapter, Nicole didn't sell Gumball, and if I had explained farther I would have had to explain she didn't do it, and I don't want that do I?
Paragraph 10 - And finally, the spelling and grammar could use some work. Certain words like misspelled like "arena" being written "arina".
Answer - Like I said I miss mistakes.
Paragraph 11 - All in all, it's half decent attempt at a story (even if the plot is borrowed from an existing anime) but fails as a TAWOG fic because to be ashamed of its source material, and rejects it rather than embracing it.
Answer - Okay, my plot is about Gumball, Darwin and the real TAWOG cast, betting creatures, then gods for the good of the free world, well for Gumball it's more of finding a good enough opponent to fight. The harem is just one of my kinks.
So what I'm saying is most of the statements are fucked up wrong.
To be continued
Preview: We will see another reason Gumball's Gear is called the Infinity Broken Gear, and he'll be back in school.
