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Me and Christina continue to walk down to the where the final scores will be announced. I am extremely nervous so much has happened today! In just one day your life can change forever.
I've been so confident today though for all I know I could be kicked out. I was not in a good spot for the 1 part of initiation and for what we were all told at the beginning of all of this that is a pretty important stage. Now I just made myself nervous. I hope I get in, by this point getting the last possible spot will be good for me; though thinking about how Tobias got #1 I would like to get at least #6 because I don't want him to be ashamed of me.
Tobias. I love him. I really do I'm so happy he loves me though I don't know how or why he chose me and why he loves me…I mean like I said when he first said he liked me I'm not pretty I am younger and…. I just don't get it.
"Tris…hellllooo, earth to Tris." I snap out of my moment when she says that.
"Sorry, what?" I ask apologetically.
"I've asked you if you're nervous like four times now."
"Oh! Yeah sorry I was thinking, and yes I'm completely and utterly nervous." And it is the truth I am I'm more scared then nervous though.
"Yes me to I hope I get at least 6, but I shouldn't hope for that high, you're so lucky Tris." She gazes at me in a longing sort of way. Not like a guy would but in like I want what you have way and it makes me curious.
"Why am I lucky?" I don't know why she thinks I am, I mean I know she will get a higher score then me. Why wouldn't she?
"Because Tris we all know you're going to get first or second place, you did foniminal on all the mental parts of initiation and you only had six fears in your fear landscape that's insane! It is one of the best scores." She says this in a happy way though I sense a bit of envy in her voice which is so un-natural coming from her.
"But you did better them me in the fighting stage and I didn't get the best score ever there has been better." I point this out in a matter of fact like, but in truth I just want her to bring up Tobias so I can smile, I love thinking about him and I want to talk about him with her which seems super girly but I just want too.
"yes I did better in stage one but the other stages count to, and there has been one person better then you and that's four who may be scarier than a swarm of moths and who is a guy and even though I don't like him a strong and handsome guy to say the least, and if your close to a guy especially one like that Tris…that says a lot."
"To…I mean Four is not scary…and thanks Chris but I know I won't get second let alone first place." I smile at her as if to say thank you again. She brought up Tobias and as much as I like that what she said made me feel jealousy because I don't want other girls looking at him that way.
"Uhhh huh sure Tris whatever you say just wait and see what happens, plus we have been talking for five minutes and its starting any second now so unless you want to be faction less get in there and sit your former abnegation now dauntless member butt down!" She says this in a funny way so I laugh and she smiles we sit down at a table and I can see Tobias.
He looks at me and smiles; I smile back and think about how I can't wait until we get to tell everyone! I'm so happy and nervous because for all I know I may get kicked out. Wait if I get kicked out there is no 'us'. Now I have to stay in.
"Hello, hello we aren't much for speeches around here much unlike the erudite so these are the results for the new dauntless members and now the faction less pansycakes they will appear behind me from the worst up to #1 so congratulations you will all choose your jobs tomorrow so be ready!"
A bunch of names I don't know some up until I seven #7
#7 Christina congratulation
"Chris that's awesome! Congratulations'!"
Will kisses her lightly, I can see he is still nervous about whether he is in and what place he is going to get.
#6 Will congratulations
"wow both of you did great really guys congratulations!" I smile at them knowing I'm faction less and trying to hold it together. Maybe I could be five.
#5, is a dauntless born so is #4, I'm going to miss this place a lot and of course I will always miss Tobias. I love him so much
#3 peter congratulations on top three
Oh great peter gets three I sure hope top two choose government jobs so he cant.
#2 Uriah congratulations on top three
I turn towards Uriah and see him hugging Marlene and Lynn and decide to congratulate him in a minute before he turns and hugs me I hug him back then congratulate him turning back to the screen.
#1 Tris prior congratulations on 1st place!
What! I got first place, I did it, Chris was right! I got first place! Me a girl from abnegation! I can't believe this, me a scrawny girl this is amazing I am speechless Christina turns and hugs me and I hug will.
"Tris that's awesome! Seeeeee I told you!" Christina smiles and will and her kiss very aggressively…guess they will be in his apartment tonight. I laugh at my own joke. Will looks at me and congratulates me.
"Yeah Tris really congratulations!" will says with a smile, I smile back.
"Yes you guys too I'm so happy we could all be here together." I say.
"Guys here comes four…watch out he may bite you!" will exclaims in a whisper
"Oh come on babe! He is scary but he is probably just congratulating Tris and us." Chris says then kisses will again; every time they kiss I want to laugh but this time I hold it in.
"Hello Christina, will and of course Tris. All of you congratulations on making it into dauntless you should all be proud, but don't think you are safe now." Tobias says this in a scary way then starts laughing though will still has a scared look on his face. "Calm down Will I was kidding." He looks at me.
"Do you think a hug would be a little too much?" he asks but you know what I really don't care.
"Kiss me."
"What?!" he ask and sort of scream whispers.
"Kiss me; it is quite simple really…."
He leans closer to me and I stand up on my toes smiling he kisses me. It is wonderful it is not like will and Christina who kiss hard and way too intense for me but this... our kiss is so much better and I feel like falling apart as if I'm made of glass and he is shattering me.
He starts to lean away but I pull him back in and kiss him again. I have no more words to express how I feel besides the true feeling of love and happiness, I feel like a rainbow just went into me. I feel young but old at the same time I feel in pure love. I finally lean away and look towards Christina and will and well about every other member of dauntless. They all look stunned.
"TRIS!" Chris yells this into my ear, or it feels like it at least.
"Um Christina this four is my boyfriend." I blush and look at will who's jaw is basically wide open.
"WHY DIDN'T YOU TELL ME!?"
"Because I didn't well we didn't want anyone to think I got whatever place I was going to get because we were dating….you know favoritism."
"We are talking about this later Tris." I see a look of sadness in her eyes and I feel bad. "Speaking of later there is a party so why don't me and you go get ready together Tris then we can talk about this..." she points to me and Tobias. "…there."
"Ok let's go…." I look at Tobias and kiss him before we go.
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