Tuesday, January 12, 2016
Disclaimer: I like to thank bitex75 for following and adding my story to their favorites. Now to answer the guest reviewer. Sorry about the Q & A Section. It was much longer than I had expected. Also this chapter is like a chapter from my story El error de mi corazon (My Heart's Mistake), but it is changed a little. I hope you enjoy and please don't forget to R&R (write reviews).
Q: How is his father always right when a couple of chapters ago you were focused on his many disastrous mistakes? I think that the chapter would come across better without so many quotes, if he didn't lay it on so thickly and if there were some other interaction to balance the chapter? It's so angst heavy...
A: For guest, please do not take offense or think I am being a know it all or smart or even sarcastic when you read my answer to your question.
A preface is an introduction to a book, typically stating its subject, scope, or aims.
A prologue is a separate introductory section of a literary or musical work. Or an event or action that leads to another event or situation. Or (in professional cycling) a short preliminary time trial held before a race to establish a leader.
Those were used to set the story and chapter one was used to kind of move the story away from Touga in the direction of Sesshomaru who is one of the main characters.
Also there is supposed to be a feeling of deep anxiety or dread, typically an unfocused one about the human condition or the state of the world in general (angst). That is why I used so many quotes and if you read the disclaimer, it said that ''I'm also not explaining certain things for a reason, it will be in later chapters.''
I also choose not to balance the chapter that is why it typed the way it is. Chapter one is supposed to have a dark tone because it express Sesshomaru's regret and also show why he kind of hate Christmas. Chapter 1 main focus is Sesshomaru whereas the prologue and preface main subject of focus is Touga.
Sesshomaru just like almost every other child has probably believed their parents/parent can do no wrong or has heard what seems to be parents/parent most famous saying ''I am always right!'' or ''You should listen to what I'm telling, it may help you later on in life!'' and or ''I've already been through what your going through now so heed by advice.'' from their parents at least some point in their lifetime, despite if their parents or parent have had a trouble mistake written past. I know I've heard it a few times from my parents mainly my mother thus the reason why I put it is in the Scrooge chapter.
The preface and prologue are only used to explain Touga's past, not his future and or how he is in the present and chapter one shows that even though Sesshomaru has made similar mistakes like his father, his father's choices/ guidance can, but at the say time can't influence his own. Just as your parents past cannot dictate, but can dictate your future.
Some parents/ parent try to mode their children to be like them, live their lives through them. Whereas others allow their children to free range which allows their children do as they please or make decisions on their own or think for themselves There are also the parents/parent who try to keep their children from making the same mistakes as them by doing exactly what Touga's doing to Sesshomaru. Touga is trying to guide Sesshomaru away from the same path of disastrous mistakes that he faced when he was around Sesshomaru's age.
That is why I used sentences like ''how could he have been so blind?'' (ch 1 towards the end) and ''How could he have been so blind to it all?'' (preface also toward the end) to mirror/parallel each other, to show that even though Touga believes Sesshomaru to not be live him and Sesshomaru believes himself to not be like his father (which was indirectly stated throughout chapter one and mentioned in the prologue), but through some of their actions and a few of the quotes, you see that they are indeed alike.
I also used many quotes for they set the story up and many of the quotes will play key roles later on. It's parallelism and I know I may not be the greatest writer due to the fact I just recently started back writing after a few years off due to a homicide in my family and other devastating events that has happened which discouraged me from writing for a while.
There is still things about writing I do not quite understand and that I do need help in certain areas. But when I ask for help or ideas in author's notes or R&R in disclaimers no one does. I will take any advised ( as long as it is not spiteful and hate written) and use it. I do hope many people will not be or get offended if I do not use it for this particular story. I do have one other story and I am also working on another story that I may posted today or even next week.
I hoped I answered your question and I hoped to get more, for I do not mind answering them. In fact, I love to answer question to help viewers better understand my story/stories.
Chapter 2: Jacob Marley
Naraku sighed as he sat at his desk staring out the window at the cheerful smiling faces down below his father's and Inu No ''Touga Taisho's company building. There is nothing Naraku hated more then those Taishos. If it hadn't been for great Inu General and his proposal to unify yokai, hanyos and mortals under one company, their company, Tsukino Inc. would still be the number one company globally. But now it wasn't, the truce that his father agreed to do shocked his very being. It wasn't fair to favor the Taisho's company over their very own. How could his father be so foolishly blind?
The Taisho's were using them and his father just couldn't see it just yet. Naraku couldn't believe that is father agreed to make a joint company with the Taisho to begin with. Maybe his mighty father hasn't had enough of falling. Oh, how thee mighty do indeed fall.
He had pleaded and constistently begged his father to reconsider, but the old goat was set on this union. His, father Jotaru proclaimed that this merger could be beneficial for all parties involved and that it would help eliminated prejudice against each other's company. Naraku had pointed out that Taisho Enterprise's heir had a deep hatred of both hanyos and mortals alike which is what their company's employees mainly were. Jotaru had only laughed it off and declared that the young prince, Sesshomaru just needed a little persuading. Forming a merger with Inu No Taisho will help brand them to the yokai and in return their company would help Inu NoTaisho's company brand to the mortals and hanyos, in hopes to balance each other out.
Oh, how he hated his father, his father who was always right. Even if Naraku pointed out every flaw with this merger or with his father in general, his father would still be right. A growl thunderously rang throughout the silent office room as Naraku angrily glared into the distance. The distance where the construction of Taisho and Tsukino Inc, is being built.
Naraku frowned, for he still didn't agree with his father's tactics, but what choice did he really have in the matter now? He wasn't CEO yet and Jotaru made it painfully clear that if he wanted to be then he better follow all of his father's orders. Naraku pinched the bridge of his nose as father's words filled his ears.
''We know what we are, but know not what we may be.''
His old man thought he was so clever with all his quotes and lectures, but if the merger turned sour Naraku could brag about how it was all is fault and how is father's many disastrous mistakes were for once not a lined with the stars. Naraku heaved a long heavy overdue sighed as another one of his father's saying came to mind.
''It is not in the stars to hold our destiny but in ourselves.''
There was something else about the stars his father would also say something like the fault is not within our stars, but...Naraku viciously hissed as he thought of another one of his lectures and how he had told his father that the fault laid within the stars. What had that old goat told him about the fault in ours stars? Ah yes,
''The fault, dear Naraku, is not in our stars. But in ourselves, that we are underlings.''
Oh, how he hated his father more than ever now. His father who is slowly but surely becoming more and more like that untrustworthy dog, Touga. Yes, Naraku was disgusted with his father yet again. How could have allowed this to have happened? Naraku bitterly stared out at the construction workers who were hastily building their new company building. Naraku didn't like this, no he didn't like this merger at all. It gave him a bad feeling, really bad feeling, but what was he to do? The company building shall be ready within a month and then they would all have to adjust to each. Naraku couldn't bare to work with those spoiled Taisho children and he knew they wouldn't be all to please to work with the lower classes either.
When Naraku had voiced his deep hatred for the Taishos and this merger and how his father was a foolish mortal for allowing himself to be used as a clean up man for the Taisho reputation to his father just yesterday he was greatly reprimanded and scorned by his father. To make matter's worse Naraku tried to purposely hurt his father by voicing how he detest his father's silly dreams and childish fantasies of a hopeful future where demons, mortals and hanyos would someday be one and not blinded by their race or station. His father's words of disapproval rung deep within the depths of his closed off mind.
''When a father gives to his son, both laugh; when a son gives to his father, both cry.''
Naraku still didn't know what his father had meant when he told him that which was pretty often nor did he care to find out. He detest all his father's quotes just as he detest his father and himself ever since that bright, glorious and sunny day. The day when all hope flourished just as all cheerful smiles had shone brightly on his siblings faces. He vowed to never love anything again only hate would ever fill his harden heart.
''I shall forever hate those Taishos and everyone associated with them .'' Naraku scoffed and turned away from the window and returned back to his desk and sadly, endearingly stared back down at the only memory of his once happy life before it was ruin by those Inu yokai.
Author's Note: I hope some of you are starting to see what I am doing, even though I'm pretty sure its not that hard to see. Sesshomaru has deep hatred just as Naraku has deep hatred. Also Jacob Marley is a fictional character who appears in Charles Dickens' 1843 novella A Christmas Carol. He is Scrooge's deceased business partner, now a chained and tormented ghost, damned to wander the earth forevermore as punishment for his greedy, selfish and uncaring attitude towards mankind. Just in case some of you didn't know. ;-)
