any advice would be helpful to help better my writing
(Razor ) i woke up at the crack of dawn if i'm going to help Kate i'm gonna need to leave early need to get to Winston's den hope he doesn't get to pissed that i'm waking him up at dawn. I walk for ten minutes and reach his den to find him and Kate awake and talking i decide to walk in and get Kate "hey Kate follow me" "why Razor""if you want a chance to get Humphrey back you will follow me. I took off in a sprint to the train tracks
(Kate)
as soon as he said that he was taking me to Humphrey i was gone i caught up to him really quickly "your serious right" "yes i'm gonna get you to Humphrey as i was talking to Razor we neared the train tracks. "So Kate if you loved Humphrey why did you try to marry Garth ?""it wasn't my choice my dad set it up to unite the east and west packs to grow are numbers and avoid war. I let my responsibility get in the way of my heart till it was to late i backed out at the last minute and Garth admitted to being in love with Lilly. And i admitted to being in love with an omega after some persuasion from mom tony Garth's father and my dad Winston abolished the law of no alpha and omega couples. Mom and dad wouldn't let me go looking for him saying there were rouge packs. "well maybe when and if you get Humphrey back il take care of some of those rouge packs.""You would your gonna need at least 2 other wolves to come with you"" well how bout we deal with that after we get you and blaze i mean Humphrey back together. " The train neared we sprinted and jumped in "so razor what do we do now "we got 12 hours to kill so i'm gonna nap" Ok me to"
(time skip they left 6 am 11 hours puts it at five midsummer means suns still up
(Razor)
i woke up suns still up we are near sawtooth got to get Kate up to leave "Kate we are at sawtooth get up i see her eyes flutter and she yawns were here razor "yes were at sawtooth park we still got some walking to do" ok i cant wait to see him again" "me to Kate it will be good to see me best friend again he did a lot to help me in my time of need" we walked for 3 hours while making idle chat with Kate but i was getting worried where is he the sun will be down soon "so how far till we find his den" don't know i'm still looking for his scent wait got it this way as i run towards the setting sun. "we have are gonna find him tonight more time for you to awaken the spark again" "ok how much farther i'm getting pumped up" we are almost there wait there's his den il go see if he's here you wait outside the entrance and come in when i say so got it" "got it "
the man you have been waiting for Humphrey everybody
(Humphrey)
should i be mates with molly shes a great wolf but i don't fully love her im still in love with Kate but shes with Garth "so still can't decide Humphrey " only one person knows my real name here i turn around to see my old friend Razor. "Razor you came back what for man "" just came by to see how your doing and bring some news that might brighten your day" and what news might that be. " For one the western packs have allowed me to stay in there pack second the law of no alpha and omega couples is gone and i brought some one who wants to see you."let me guess shaky salty and mooch." Well let me bring her in come in and the last person i expected walked in KATE i was speechless.
(Kate)
when i walked in i saw Humphrey's jaw hit the floor he was surprised and i took advantage of it i tackled him and started crying "Humphrey i missed you sooooooooo much i never got married to Garth i love you please come home Humphrey i saw him think for a half second.
(Humphrey )
she's not married and in love with me you got to be kidding me. But what about molly she's going to be pissed if i broke up with her now. Aaahhhh she will have to deal with it i'm in love with Kate " i will Kate i just need to break up with molly il be back Razor would you mind coming with cause hell have no fury like a pissed off woman" no problem dude we took off to find molly.
(time skip 30 minuites sun down now)
(Razor)
where is this wolf i swear to god she can be a ghost if she wants to "we need to find her" out of no where something tackled him immediately i growl and i see molly "oh sorry molly il be on my way" i walk away back to Kate and start idle chat 5 minutes later i see Humphrey running for his life i tackle molly who's in full out kill mode and keep her down "RUNNNN YOU TWO IL CATCH UP" and i try to calm molly "molly theirs more wolves out there just let this go " OHHH HELL NO HES NOT DUMPING ME THE DAY BEFORE ARE WEDDING AND GETTING AWAY WITH IT " seeing no peace full way i charge molly and send her flying she hits a tree and is out i check her to see she's alive howl for help and run to the train. I run as fast as i can and hop on to see Kate making out "can't keep your paws off each other til we get back to Jasper " they jump back and blushed like mad we got time to kill you 2 sleep il take first watch i look at the moon and just watch the beauty of the forest.
well hope you enjoyed i intend to make all chapters from here on out to be 1000 words or more so please r and r it gives me a sense of how to improve note the fight was a dire wolf with alpha training and a pissed off omega so it was a cake walk