Okay upon consideration and a couple of flamed criticism from xAaliyahsDarkAngelx and HexaFarynBanes I have decided to actually follow advice given and rewrite this story. HexaFarynBanes you are right I am very inexperienced with writing especially where others can critique me. I was also getting lazy with this story that and I have never wrote a smut story before. xAaliyahsDarkAngelx I am going to make this into a full length story. I will not promise a update on anything because I am taking advanced classes in school and the homework is the devil. I hope to appease all of y'all with the rewrite but I will not delete the original just so I have something to remind myself of my first fanfic and the mistakes I made. I reread this and noticed the switch in narrator and I am horrified that I did that. I am very sorry if I had disappointed any of you. Thank you xAaliyahsDarkAngelx and HexaFarynBanes for your honest criticism. Another thing I will be keeping a 'journal' to make sure that I don't make any mistakes but I am only human so please hang in there for me.