Thanks guys! 8 reviews!

I do agree with all of you: Shine (or any variety of it), Rainbow and other fancy-shiny things like that are way overused :)

DESTINY/GIVING EVERYTHING AWAY (it's a real thing!)

"Opaleye!" Yarrowfang called hoarsely into the elder's den. "Come out for the apprentice ceremony! Dawnfur, and Peatpelt's kits are being apprenticed!"

"Oh, fine, Yarrowfang, I will. One of these days these creaky old bones won't be able to get out of my nest." Opaleye yawned, and slithered out of the Shadowclan elder's den. The two elders joined Half-pelt, a brown tabby with clumped brown fur, and Blurred-sight, a blind black tom in the back of a crowd. Turning towards the nursery, Opaleye was able to make out four anxiously-waiting kit-shapes.

At the opposite end of the clearing, Opaleye watched as Longstar leaped up onto the Highpile, a large grouping of branches, and yowled the clan to order.

"Today we gather to crown four new apprentices!" Longstar announced warmly as the four kits stepped up. "First off, Moonkit, step forward."

PAUSE THE STORY.

Take a wild guess at Moonpaw's future. Hints: Moonpaw is synonymous with Starkit, Firekit (in some cases), Dovekit, (copy-of-other-protagonist-in-canon)kit, Shinekit, Prettykit, Lovekit, Happykit, etc. etc).

UN-PAUSE

"-Do you promise to blahblahblah?" Longstar continued, staring down warmly at the prettiest kit he had ever seen in his life. Her fur glowed, for Starclan's sake!"

"I do!" Moonkit squeaked, her voice so powerful Thunderclan could hear it. Opaleye stared warmly at the fluffy white she-cat with a gray face and the brightest blue eyes she had ever seen, and decided she liked her.

"I crown you by your new name, Moonpaw!" Longstar mewed. "May your apprenticeship be short, because we totally need you to be a warrior."

"Next! Whitepaw, sister of Moonpaw, step forward... I crown you Whitepaw!"

PAUSE THE STORY.

This happens in so many fanfictions. We get a long-description of one character (take a wild guess, remember) and then we have their sibling practically get skipped over. They are literally only there for interest, or perhaps to show how wondrous their sibling is.

UN-PAUSE

"Hawkkit and brother Darknesskit, step forward!" A strong black-and-white tom-kit stepped up with his small scrawny black kit-brother.

PAUSE THE STORY.

Just from that (that sentence was practically copied from many a fic), I can already tell what's going to happen. Hint: Darknesskit is synonymous with Darkstripe, Tigerstar, Deathkit (yeah I've seen it), Shadowkit, Clawkit, Thistleclaw etc. etc.

ALSO - I can guess that Hawkpaw and/or is going to be the love interest of MOONPAW, just from this.

UN-PAUSE

I've seen a ton of fics start with the apprenticeship - and based off of them, this is how I predict the tale of Moonpaw, Whitepaw, Darknesspaw and Hawkpaw will go.

Moonpaw will become the best apprentice the clan has ever seen! She excels in hunting, fighting and herb-spotting, while her sister Whitepaw struggles to keep up. As they get older, Hawkpaw makes it blatantly obvious that he double-dog-hearts Moonpaw, but the pretty apprentice has no idea! About a week later, Whitepaw comes up to Moonpaw and tells her that Hawkpaw likes her sullenly. Moonpaw is SHOCKED, and thinks about how she just CAN'T choose a mate yet, she's only an apprentice! Meanwhile, Darknesspaw is also crushing on her, and Whitepaw is mad at Moonpaw because Hawkpaw likes her. You see, Whitepaw has always loved Hawkpaw and is TOTALLY JEALOUS. Also meanwhile, Darknesspaw is becoming evil and kills the leader secretly, and Moonpaw receives a sign from starclan... blah blah blah.

(In the case of Starkit's Prophecy, Longstar is also in love with Moonpaw, along with half of the clan)

If I can tell all of this from the character's NAMES in the first chapter, that's a bad sign.

Moral of the (confusing) story: Don't give your characters names that are blatantly obvious to the role they will play: i.e: Darknesspaw is EVIL, Moonpaw is the SAVIOR of the clans (coughcough Mary sue coughcough), Hawkpaw is (one of) the ATTRACTIVE TOMS that are mooning (quite literally) over the SAVIOR, and Whitepaw is TYPICALLY THE CHARACTER THAT NO ONE CARES ABOUT (i.e: ivypool) UNTIL THEY DO SOMETHING RASH.

Well that was an odd one, but I hope you got my point. Any other ideas for names? I can come back to them later, also.

I might be moving onto descriptions next, what do you think?