Released: August 17, 2012. (will be using this to help guesstimate update times for people)
Written: August 14-15, 2012.
Edited: September 22, 2012. (Version 1.1)
Alright, ye patient readers. Here be the fruit of your (and my) labors; The Turning Point. This, hopefully, is where the story will take off from somewhat-interesting to 'MY MIND HAS SPLORTED OUT OF MUH ASS!' awesomesauce. Enjoy!
"Talking/Jutsu"
"Whispering"
'Thinking'
"Text in a book"
"Demon/Summon talking"
"Demon/Summon whispering"
'Demon/Summon thinking'
(Not exactly proper grammar, but helps discern what-is-what when reading)
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Disclaimer: I will make it clear that I do not own Naruto or any of its characters, settings, and techniques save my own creations. If anyone spots a problem in my story that goes against this do please let me know so that I may correct the issue.(I may mistakenly take and use techniques, scenarios, or items created by other authors without giving them due credit. It is not that I don't want to credit them, but more because my memory is shit.)
Kyuubi Revealed: The Shattered Veil
"That boy has taken this prank too far! He must be held accountable for his actions!" A Jonin shouted, cries of agreement heard among the gathered ninja on the roof of the Hokage Tower.
'I'm getting too old for this shit...' One Sarutobi Hiruzen thought, looking over his gathered ninja. They were among his very best...
"Throw the brat in prison! Only place that would ever possibly find a use for him!"
They took missions that lesser men would shy away from...
"Fuck that, just kill him for the abomination he is!"
They were also-
"Yeah! You got the right idea, Kojji!"
The gentle man named Sarutobi Hiruzen wanted to talk them out of such dreadful thoughts, but the "God of Shinobi" wanted to grind their bodies down and use whatever little bits that were left to feed the Inuzuka hounds. Alas, the two personas compromised. "ENOUGH!" He shouted, effectively ending any other outbursts before they were made apparent to all present. "If any one of you says one more word, I will personally escort you to T&I Headquarters for personalized etiquette lessons from both Ibiki and Anko!" All present paled at such implications.
Sarutobi huffed. "Now that I have your attention, I have called all of you here due to the theft of an important village artifact; The Scroll of Sealing. The scroll was taken by one Uzumaki Naruto about three-and-a-half hours ago. The reason for his actions have yet to be determined. You will search for him and recover both the scroll and the boy intact; Lethal force is NOT authorized! Neither must be allowed to leave this village! Have I made myself clear?!" The aged Hokage bellowed, loud enough for those furthest away to hear his words.
"HAI, HOKAGE-SAMA!" The ninja present chorused.
"THEN GO!" The Hokage commanded, making a horizontal cutting-motion with his left arm. "HAI!" In an instant all of the shinobi and kunoichi flickered away, a gust of wind the only sign that anyone other than the Hokage had been on the roof of the tower.
'I don't know what you're doing, Naruto, but please be safe; No-one must learn of your secret...' Sarutobi thought, looking over his slumbering village.
Iruka was becoming increasingly agitated. He had checked three other spots within the past half-hour, but Naruto wasn't at any of them. This last spot he was checking was the last straw; If Naruto was not here, Iruka wouldn't know what he would do.
'You had better be here, Naruto.' Iruka thought grumpily, jumping through the foliage near Naruto's supposedly-secret training ground. Jumping into the open, Iruka had his hopes answered; The blonde teen was lying down in the dirt, disheveled and dirty almost as if he just got finished with a... training...session...
"Naruto..." He slowly hissed out, startling the recovering boy.
Naruto jumped onto his feet, staring wide-eyed at his former Academy teacher. "I-Iruka-sensei!? W-what are you doing here!?" He asked, still shocked by the sudden appearance of Iruka.
"Wha-WHAT AM I DOING HERE!? Is that all you've got to say for what you have done!?" Iruka yelled, bopping Naruto on the head with his fist.
Naruto was face-planted into the ground, his ass hanging in the breeze and a large welt forming on his head. "Owowowowow..." He repeatedly whined out. After a couple moments he suddenly jumped up, the welt having disappeared. "Iruka-sensei, test me again! I got a technique that will blow your mind!" He shouted, taking the Chunin off-guard by his sudden burst of energy.
Iruka pinched his nose. Having decided on the best way he could think of to reason with his ex-student without sounding condescending, he gazed down to the young teen, sadness racking his body. "Naruto, I ca-" "Speaking of tests, where is Mizuki-sensei? He said he would be meeting me around this time..." The boy cut in, asking his question while actively searching the clearing for any signs of the silver-haired man.
Iruka was caught off-guard by his question. "Mizuki? What does he hav-" He stopped as soon as he heard the whistling of numerous blades cutting through the air. He ran at Naruto, his arms outstretched. "MOVE!"
Naruto was pushed out of the path of the deadly blades. "Ooomph!" He grunted, skidding on his back a couple of meters. After regaining his bearings, he looked back to his previous spot. He was greeted by the sight of Iruka's kunai-riddled body. "I-I-Ir-Iru-IRUKA-SENSEI!" He screamed out. He immediately jumped up, but was stopped from moving any further by a new voice. "DON'T!" Mizuki yelled out.
Naruto spun around. "Wha-What have you done?! You killed Iruka-Sensei!" He yelled back, shock and confusion written across his face.
"He was after the scroll, Naruto! He was going to take it after he had killed you!" Mizuki responded, pointing an accusing finger at Iruka's body. Naruto was dumbstruck. "B-but why? He just-" "D-Don't Listen to him, N-Naruto!"
Naruto again spun around to see Iruka struggling back to his feet. "GET BACK, NARUTO!" Mizuki ordered, jumping down beside the boy holding his Hell Shurikens toward the bleeding shinobi. "Iruka will say and do anything to get his hands on that scroll! He may have acted kindly to you in the past, but it is all a lie! Don't let yourself be deceived." Mizuki glanced over to the boy next to him. "Naruto, this is a fight between Chunin; Far too dangerous for you to stay here. Give me the scroll and leave, as fast as you can; I can handle this!." Naruto was reaching back for the scroll's strap when Iruka's voice stopped him.
"DON'T, NARUTO! That scroll holds every secret technique belonging to this village! I along with many others have been searching for you; The village thinks you stole the scroll! If it were to ever get into the wrong hands... Naruto, don't give it to him! DEFEND THAT SCROLL WITH YOUR LIFE!" he shouted, gingerly pulling kunai from his body while pleadingly looking to his ex-student.
Naruto looked Iruka over suspiciously. "How do I know you're not just telling me this so you can take the-" "THEN DON'T GIVE IT TO ME! Ask yourself: If I did not care for you but instead for the scroll, why would I have taken the kunai meant for you!?" Iruka cut in, stopping Naruto from speaking any further.
Naruto froze. 'Is he... is he telling me the truth?' Before he could take that thought any further, Mizuki let out an exasperated sigh before looking to him. "Well, it appears I can't keep this charade up any longer..." He said before shoving one of the oversized shurikens' bladed edges to Naruto's throat.
Mizuki glared back at Iruka before a feral grin suddenly dominated his face. He turned to a wide-eyed and trembling Naruto. "...Say, do you want to know why the village hates you?" He asked, his sickly-sweet voice causing a shiver to tear through Naruto's body. Iruka knew where Mizuki was going with his line of questioning. "YOU MUSN'T TELL HIM, MIZUKI! The Law..." Naruto looked to Iruka, startled by his sudden outburst. "Wh-what are yo-" "Do you know what happened thirteen years ago?" Mizuki cut in. Naruto, though confused by change in subject, answered. "Of course I know what happened! The Kyuubi attacked and was killed by the Yondaime, but what does-" He was again cut off by the shurikan-wielding Chunin.
"The Kyuubi was never killed. He was sealed away..." Mizuki spoke, lowering his Hell Shurikan and unnerving the boy before him, both with his actions and speech. "That night, the Yondaime chose a newly-born infant to seal the demon into. Do you want to know who he chose?" He asked grinning wickedly, staring into Naruto's ocean-blue eyes. "He chose you! YOU ARE THE CONTAINER OF THE KYUUBI NO YOKO, THE DEMON THAT RAVAGED THIS VILLAGE AND STOLE IRUKA'S PARENTS AWAY!" He shouted. Naruto stumbled back, shocked by the revelation. "I'm... I'm the-" He whispered. He stopped once again when Mizuki leaned towards him. "...But the best part about this little story is... it's a cover for what really happened..." He spoke, gaining the attention of both Naruto and Iruka.
Iruka held a defensive posture as best as he could in his current state, but he, like Naruto, was curious about Mizuki's last statement. "The hell are you talking about?!" He questioned, glaring holes into his ex-friend's head.
Mizuki turned to Iruka. "While researching the Scroll of Seals, I found a very interesting piece of information about our student here. You see, he has a unique seal in-place between his eyes on the bridge of his nose. What does this seal do, you ask? From what I could determine, It is an advanced henge seal. This begs the question: Just what is it hiding?" Mizuki looked away from Iruka and back to Naruto, depravity emanating from his being. "WHY DON'T WE FIND OUT!" He maniacally stated before rushing towards Naruto, his arm outstretched.
Naruto edged away, taken off-guard by the sudden twist of events. "S-stay back! Don-" "RELEASE!" Mizuki shouted, thrusting his palm onto where he learned the seal was located, regardless of Naruto's pleas. As soon as his palm hit the hidden seal, a thick cloud of smoke blanketed the area, hiding everything in the vicinity.
Iruka was painfully squinting his eyes, trying to see through the smoke. He sluggishly staggered towards where he last saw the two. He was about to shout out to Naruto when he felt a breeze pick up. When the smoke cleared he fell back, his blood turned to ice. 'I-i-impossible...'
Naruto was unsure as to what was happening. One moment he was certain that he was dead, the next he felt a comfortable breeze flow around his body. He stood rooted to his spot for a couple seconds, waiting for the inevitable pain. When none came, he opened his eyes. Before him stood Mizuki; Pale, wide-eyed, and slack-jawed. A more perfect example of shock than anything Naruto had seen before. '… The hell?' Naruto thought, just before remembering Iruka. Turning towards his teacher he was met with more of the same reaction; Pale face, wide eyes, and a gaping mouth. What really had Naruto concerned was his teacher's trembling body. Worried, he stepped forward.
"Iruka-sensei, what is-" He stopped before speaking once more. "The hell is wrong with my voice?!" He uttered, reaching up to his throat. He rubbed it soothingly before taking another step towards Iruka, whom scuttled away from him. Distraught, he reached out to Iruka. "Why are... y-you..." He ended, whispering the last words. The hand, his hand, was no longer as it once was; Sharp claws extending half an inch from the tips of his digits. His skin was no longer visible, replaced with a luscious coat of rustic-gold fur.
Naruto's breathing quickened. 'No...' He shakily brought up his hands to his face; It no longer felt human. A muzzle similar to that of a dog, or fox, dominated his face, how he didn't see it before was beyond him. His heartbeat rose. 'This can't be real...' He reached up to where his ears normally were and, again, found them to have been replaced with... something else. narrow, foxy ears 1½-feet in length had replaced his small human set. His body felt numb. 'T-this is IMPOSSIBLE...' He slowly, jerkily turned his head to look to his rear, only to be met by the sight of nine lithe, mesmerizing 9-foot long tails spasmodically shifting behind his body. Naruto snapped. "Waah... AAAH... AAAUUUGGGHHH!" He screamed, now revealed to all the world to be the Kyuubi no Yoko.
And here be the end of this chapter and my initial release! Was a doozy to write, but finally got it done just after midnight here. So, how did I do? What could I do to make this better? Review and let this humble author know your thoughts!
FYI: I am looking for betas to help with story flow/development, possible jutsu, character development, and generally keeping the story believable. Any and all help will be appreciated!
EDIT: Some minor grammar changes.