ok to anybody who read this before i fixed this i am REALLY sorry when i put it in last night it was not a blook of text but you know how fanfiction changes you formatting sometimes i hope when i put this in this time it will be better.
Also about the first issue , everybody ****'s up somewhere especially when they are learning , and since I have already ruined this story in my eyes and other why not here ? but chances are I won't finish this story unless , I might but hold you breath , cross your fingers , collect horse shoes , find lots of 4 leaf clovers and insert whatever lucky charms you can think of as well as lucky rituals
In answer to tco99123's review, I do need the UNSC to have a few vulnerabilities and strengths, pulse the ODP were put there to defend against covenant, meaning to buy time for an evacuation before the glassing and, its 6 ODP's in the system which is even worse. Second secrecy has always been part of the UNSC's defense against invaders; I doubt the UNSC would just give away the location of their planets under any circumstances.
/\/\/\ UNSC fleet, aboard the ALMEGEDONS BLADE
"We can't reach admiral keys sir, however we are getting a message from one of his automated probes saying that the republic made contact at troy. " responded the com's officer . Henrick winced at this; troy was on the other side of Keys first response zone. That meant there was at least a 12 hour gap in order for him to get here, plus however long the fighting lasted."
"dam it "swore Henrick "Put a third of the frigates and destroyers under the Thermopylae a third under the forward into hell and the rest under us . Send the Thermopylae and company to Rohan, forward into hell to Victoria."
"Isn't splitting our forces a bad idea sir?"
"Normally yes but were outnumbered by too much, in these situations what the fleet should do is defend to ODP's. Just keep fighters and boarding ships from getting there."
"Sir incoming hail, preassembly them asking for terms of surrender." spoke the com officer, Frank, Franque something like that.
"Bring it up LT let's see how arrogant the republics military is." when the hail was on screen everybody paused for a second and just stared. "Well, at least the republic has the dignity and brains to have a super model to come ask for my surrender " Henrick thought aloud .as the bridge crew looks at him he curses and ask " was that out loud ?"
"Well I see you know why I'm here but let's get down to business and not get sidetracked, so will you surrender unconditionally?"
"At least let me get you phone number first before you try to take my pants off. "Stated Henrick with the thought 'already said I had the hot's for her so why not '. The republic admiral look embarrassed, and even blushed a little at this but Henrick continued. "But seriously could I get you phone number?"
"I am here to ask for your surrender, and to capture this system. So no you may not have my phone number, I don't even know what a phone is."
Henrick continued to stare at her , just staring until Carissa went to speak again , that was when he talked in a slow voice filled with regret " surrender is not in the UNSC list of tactics ; only victory , death or retreat . Please turn around so I that you don't have the blood of thousands on you hand. You have 60 seconds to turn around." After this Henrick used a gester (anybody who knows the right way to spell if form I want please pm me) to cut the transmission.
Henrick watched the republic ships gradually move towards Victoria, probably as that was where the slightly smaller frigates were located. He watched impassively as the republic sent in fighters to soften up the defenders, but then get cut to ribbons as the point defense systems came to life .then finally when the ODP's spoke with its beautiful silver voice of destruction.
Famed for being the destroyers of the unwary or foolhardy they lived up to that task . the 2 largest republic ships shattered like a glass vase after falling a 1000 meters to land on concrete . It took the republic a full 120 seconds to get out of the effective range of the ODP's. Twenty-four of the republics ships were nothing more than broken fragments. With another 12 limping away from glancing hits from the SMAC rounds (super MAC round = SMAC round)
And he then knew what to do, "get Thermopylae and forward unto hell on the line, I know how to boot out the republic now.
\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/ flagship of the republic fleet
Carissa stared at the orbital platforms, best way to deal with them was to board them or blow them to hell with fighters. Issue was how to get around the frigates with the monstrous point defense systems was the issue, she would lose half the invasion force just trying to get around them, and then there was the ODP's point defense system.
She was also having issues believing what she had just been witness too, 24 ships, 24 of the republics heavyset ships gone inside 120 seconds. Another 12 crippled and helpless in a fight by shots that had glanced them after smashing the ships in front of them into fragments. Not to mention her forces were cut by a third
And then things got worse, all the ships in system came at her, cannons flashing, and missiles flying. Nobody called out an alert; nobody said that they were coming towards her they were just by the ODP'S now they were here. She gazed on in horror as another 19 ships broke apart under the barge with 9 more flashing red to show heavy damage for a total of 21 crippled ships.
"Firfeak "she swore "tell the fleet to fall back we've lost, and force knows what else they have." All republic ships that were not a floating pile of junk went into hyperspace. Carissa turned to her sensors officer and asked, "How did they get that close without you seeing them closing ".
The hostility, the anger in her voice was enough to put the clone on edge. "I don't know, one second there over by their orbital defense platforms the next there in our faces. I'm running a diagnostic to find out what was wrong with the sensors now." little did they know that every other republic ship involved in the muiti pronged attack on the UNSC was asking the question 'how did they close so fast ' .
Later when Carissa thought about it she felt a shudder of fear for the ships that had assaulted harvest and marigold. Fear of what 10 of the UNSC's orbitals could do to a fleet of 150 ships in the 120 seconds it had taken here to turn away.
/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/aboard helms deep ODP in orbit of Victoria
Rico decided to voice his thoughts after witnessing a brilliant if risqué tactic by commodore Henrick "that's it? "
Nobody in the ODP's CIC spoke up as they all felt the same way. The skirmish if it even merited that term was a massacre of the republic ships. Granted Henrick's risqué slip-space jump hurt the republic badly, but he used at least 7/8 of the fleet's non-nuclear missiles to drive them off. if the republics ships had stayed for another 3 minutes they probably could have beaten Henrick and his fleet to scrap .
Fred finally breaking the silence spoke up "well you lose about 70% of you attack force inside or 10 minutes what else do you do? And before anybody says anything about this being a huge risk think about the Key's look."
"I… still. maybe I'm just pissed I spent my entire week planning for this attack, how the marines on the ODP's were going to fall back , ground battles , AA setup and well … this happens . Rico continued to sit there and stew until a crewman walked up to him and told him they had a single causality.
Rico now starring with incredulity yelled "we weren't even shot at! How could somebody pull a muscle let alone die!?"
"One of our engineers, Andrew Patton has a peanut alliglery –"
"How does that apply?
"Ummm somebody left peanuts in one of the tool boxes and he had an allergic reaction next to the primary power conduits and fell on the conduits." Answered the crew man.
Rico continued to sit trying to comprehend what he had been told, after about 10 minutes he gave up and decided to go and disable all the useless traps that had been set up.
/\/\/ authors note
I personally am not happy with how this came out , or at least the space battle bit . Any advice about that please advise me. Also I feel like I cheated you guys out of an infantry engament
And since this did not slip past fan fiction last time the email for anomos reviewers who want to pm me but don't have a fan fiction account ( after proof reading with the help of Microsoft office word I have to wonder if I am tenechily illeterlit … case in point for me being illiterate is I spelled though words wrong )
And before somebody says the ODP's are over power imp going to steal a line from one of night stalkers author notes " the halo universe if overpowered on cannon , star wars is comparatively underpowered " ( one of nightstalkers author notes from either the terran republic affair or halo adromear war ) very true statement . and while my figures may not be spot on I don't think anything but a solid 100 cubic mile asteroid is walking away from a 3000 ton projectial hitting it when traveling at a single percent of the speed of light . I would try to show some calculations but I tried and failed , been a while since physical science and I have yet to take physics but I will tell you right now 3000 ton object heading towards anything at a notable fraction the speed of light will leave a huge ****ing crater in whatever it hits if its not flat out destroyed . and while a rate of fire of 5 seconds is insain for such a weapon I will say cold fussion ,
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