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BOCD

The Auditorium

12:25 PM

November 5th

Massie could not believe all eighth graders were forced to particpate in this joke. The only upside of this was that Massie would get to spend an hour a day with Dempsey, maybe even get to kiss him WHEN she got the lead.

Mrs. Nickelson was the drama director they hired this year, and she was a power hungry lunatic and Massie knew a couple of things about being power hungry.

Massie sat anxiously tapping her foot on the cold marble floor waiting for Claire to arrive. She had not been in school for two whole days and Massie was suffering from serious BFF withdrawal. She needed to spill but Claire was the only one she really trusted with her secrets. Audrina had been acting so sweet to her lately, she needed to find a way to corrupt her and expose her for the home wrecker she was. But what bothered her the most was Massie had gone to Galwaugh Farms over the weekend to find that Brownie had already been moved to her father's private barn.

It's not fair. I didn't even get a say in the matter. What the hell is going on with my life?! I need to find a way to assert myself and gain control again. But how?

Massie was jolted out of her thoughts by her crouch vibrating. Well not really. Massie slumped over in her seat and grabbed her phone from underneath her boat. Massie quickly glanced around to make sure that Mrs. Nickelson was still back stage.

Claire: I'm on my way. I just had to pick up a late pass from the tardy office.

Massie: Hurry I'm losing my mind here!!

Claire: Calm down!! Hey look behind you.

Before Massie had a chance to follow the command, gasps and applause erupted from all around her. Massie turned around, trying to find the source of the spectacle.

There was a new girl in the back. She had long dirty blond hair with dark brown and red highlights. Her outfit looked like she just stepped off a runway. Everyone kept whooping and hollering as the girl made a beeline for Massie. As the girl approached her she realized she had really light blue eyes, exactly like -

"Claire! OMFG!" Massie screeched jumping out of her seat to go hug her friend. "You look awesome!" Claire's smile lite up the entire room as she made her why on to the stage to talk to Mrs. Nickelson. Massie realized Claire's walk held more confidence now, knowing all the girl's were now envying her look and the guy's were checking her out.

Now that this new information had settled in, Massie could not help but be a little angry at Claire.

Why didn't she tell me about this? I can understand not wanting to tell the whole school but I deserved to know at least!

Massie was once again faced with the losing power feeling. If she can not even keep tabs on her friends, how can she keep control over the rest of the school?

Massie at once felt like she was being suffocated. The room began to tilt back and forth until finally she lost her balance.

"Massie wake up . . . Massie are you okay?" she heard Dempsey called as her vision cleared again. He was kneeling over her so low to the ground Massie could just lean up and kiss him right now.

Massie slowly sat up, making sure to keep eye contact with Dempsey.

He leaned in and their lips were about to meet.

Bang!

Both Massie and Dempsey whipped their heads around to the source of the noise. The door to the auditorium opened once again to reveal Audrina. With purple streaks in her hair.

Massie could not believe it. That little bitch had copied her signature. Everyone crowded Audrina and cooed about how much they liked her new hair and her new look, which was suspiciously similar to Claire's.

Massie turned back to Dempsey only to find him smiling at Audrina. Massie whipped her head back around to face Audrina only to find that she was smiling back. Audrina giggled and looked down cooly, biting her lip. Dempsey was getting up and making his way over to her. Audrina broke through the crowd of admirer's and met Dempsey around the middle of the auditorium.

Massie was so angry she wanted to scream, cry and murder her sister at the same time. There was no way she was going to steal Dempsey from her.

Claire reappeared and Massie was ready to meet her with a newfound fire and a plan that would make anyone pee their pants. Quickly pulling out her Palm Pilot, Massie made another list.

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