Disclaimer: I don't own Peter Petrelli, Milo Ventimiglia, or Heroes, which is probably a good thing cuz I'd end up ruining it. For this chapter, I did borrow lines from episode 1.04:Collision (I get to watch the show, n not feel lazy. Yay)
I don't know if this is good enough, no seriously I have no idea what I'm doing except that I would be interested in something like this. I'd also like to thank TheDirtySouth, and especially Nikki, your constructive criticism really helped me, I think I'm more relaxed now, so thanks.
Feel free to point out the way you want this story to go and the stuff you want to know. I will try to fit in as much as I can. If my never-ending commentary annoys you, you can tell me I won't be offended (Promise), I'll stop, the talking, not the story, no offense taken. In case you didn't read this the previous times, I am winging the story…so your comments and directions would be a great help. It's twelve at night and I'm writing this, I need to get a life.
Now…..On to Heroes goodness of the PETER and Mohinder variety (plans might change cuz I can't control my brain) *no murder me...pwease?*
Peter….Price??
Chapter 7: The Meeting
Previously with Peter:
Sighing Mo asked him his typical question "What did you do?"
Now: Mohinder's pov
Now Mohinder knew that Peter was a great kid, loving, trusting, and reliable when you needed him. He might be a bit of a troublemaker, but he always had good intentions at heart, he was also very smart. Seriously, how many kids graduate high school at the age of eight? He remembered when he'd first met Peter, 2 years ago.
2 years ago (give or take a few days): Mohinder's pov
It had been two weeks and he still couldn't believe that his father was gone, forever, never coming back. He had only come here, to New York, a week and a half ago, hoping to follow in his father's footsteps. He had found his dad's laptop and software on it that he thought was a program for identifying and locating the genetic code of advanced people, but it was password protected. For the first week his attempts to crack the password had been futile, disheartened, he'd talked to his mom.
She'd told him something that changed his life; he'd had a sister, a big sister, Shanti. She told him how she'd been special and how after her death, his father had been determined to find people with powers. She said that it had consumed him, it was all he could think about, but she assured him that even through all that his dad had always loved him.
After moping about it for two days, he finally got it, Shanti, her death had changed her death so, he typed in s, h, a, n, t, i. Then finally the system opened and a list of people with the special genetic marker was in his hands. He was overwhelmed, he couldn't believe his dad had actually done it, He had found them.
He'd been working on marking those people on the map, when he heard timid knocks at his door, sighing, and letting go of the string, he walked forward to open the door.
When he opened the door, he saw that no one was there, sighing he went to close the door. Then he heard a squeaky, high-pitched voice say, "Hey, I'm down here!" Looking down Mohinder saw a little boy, who could have at most been 6, with a slim body and messy brown hair, with his bangs falling endearingly over his cute, angelic, baby-face. "
The little kid then said, "Are you Chandra Suresh?" He pointed at him with the book he was carrying.
"No, that was my father." He was barely able to hold back his grief.
Tucking back a lock of stray hair, the kid, as if unsure of himself, said, "Yeah, um..," looking down he continued, "Your father wrote a book about people with….abilities." Then seeming very hesitant, he said, "I...I think I may be one of them."
…TBC…
(Do you still want me too?)
Is this chapter just plain awful…be honest…cuz I could type another one?
So do you like the direction this story's taking? Reviews make me liable to update more..Jk. Still, if you see mistakes, point them out, also feel free to tell me things you wanna see, and I promise I will try my best to include them. So what do you think about Part I of Mohinder and Peter's first meeting?
Be honest, I would still appreciate your input and advice on how to make my writing better. More Mohinder and Peter back-story will be some time soon, you'll even get to see Peter's past but that isn't for another few chapters. Next Chapter will have Nathan, promise. Hope you like it, love Brownie…we're gonna go eat Mexican..woo!
I will also be introducing an OC, a girl, by the name of Rachel (for some reason, I love that name) Macentire, she will have been Peter's friend since his first day at the orphanage, potential love interest anyone? Also I will introduce Isaac Mendez, but his character might be a bit OC.
Once again thank you everyone on your reviews and keep reviewing. Reviews feed my muse…seriously..I am not even kidding. They inspired me to write 7 chapters in 4 days. ..Pwetty Pwease!!
*crosses fingers* hope you like it! With love yours, Brownie!
