A/N: I usually don't do A/N's in between chapters, but while I was at work I notice one reviewer spamming my email with reviews of each chapters and then start sending me PMs. I don't want to put it up on chapter 7 because it will be a long page. Well, I was at work working on my chapter 7 when I saw the reviews and pms and to this person I'm responding to please don't take it offensive or rude okay? This doesn't just go for this one reviewer I'm sure I had a few that are scratching head, so I thought why not go ahead and explain. I really thought it was straight forward but apparently some people do read "bad" stories in poor English. I know I'm not perfect in English but I always make sure my stories are not so choppy. Stories do need to flow and keep the audience on edge and wanting more.
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lara5170: when I respond to my reviewers I respond on some chapters in this formatting way. There are often times I'll give you guys a heads up at the end of the chapters of what I'm doing next. Example in chapter 5 when I said I'll post 6 the next day, but my timing was off when something unexpected happened which why I also explain at the end of chapter 6 of what had happened and will probably happen next, if not expect some delays. In your Pms you said you were feeling confused and sad and had sooo many questions and Kagome is this and that. I did mention in A/Ns in one of my chapters that I PROBABLY will make Sesshomaru and Kagome a bit OOC(Out of Character) just to make the story a bit interesting
The emotions you are feeling is quite normal to me lara5170, I want you to feel that anticipation but it'll be best if you hold off all your questions until the end of whatever chapter I have up because to me you're hurting my email and inbox with the same questions that are quite normal and repetitive. My writing style is probably something you're not use to seeing (which in my opinion good) and it leaves people questions of why this and how could this be and how is this possible? Perfect, keep those questions in your mind because when I write my stories I build up on those questions to be answered, I leave my reviewers hanging on a thread.
The most questions I saw you repeat constantly are how or why should Kagome die from broken heart and in my A/N you anticipated to see it in the story. No no no, you mistook it by reading a respond to a guy/girl that really wants to know what happened. I simply explain it to him of "Why should Sesshomaru bother killing her when she's unconscious and can be eaten by lesser demons." Sometimes you'll have to think like Sesshomaru when it comes to power. He usually doesn't attack unless he's threatened or his pride been bruised or feels the need to kill something that might be more powerful than him to prove superiority. Like a dog protecting his territory. Ironic, huh? Sesshomaru just does it in a graceful manner.
Another question you had is about her eyes changing colors and the inu-youkai she kept meeting. In most stories I read people makes Kagome transform right away and be all "oh yay now she's a miko youkai!" No, no no no, not for me. You'll have to think outside the box and see that Kagome is actually transforming slowly (Example in chapter 6 when her hair gotten longer once she changed back to human) and now I feel bad cause that was actually a freebie to the ones that didn't notice it yet. Her eyes changing is something very simple, tell me how would you feel being best friend with a guy for 3 years that you love very dearly after getting to know him and by pass the encounters with his ex but were too busy fighting demons and killing a supreme demon to save the world to worry about it? Then when things finally settle he confess to you having you think he's over his ex just to be with you only to see it later on a lie when you saw them together hugging and kissing. Would you not feel pain, sadness, hate, anger, betrayed, and, emotionless from that ordeal? That's why her eyes go dull whenever she goes back on the memories or had to speak about it to Sesshomaru and Takeshi. It hurts her, making her feel pain, the dull effects just shows that something is pulling it back, making her seem emotionless, but as the chapters progress she starts to feel better, which is why in the middle of the chapter, Sesshomaru doesn't want her to have those emotionless eyes, he rather see her happy and full of warmth and life, have her forget about Inuyasha and put her focus mostly on him. Her death is caused by Hyperventilation. Meaning she was panicking or overwhelmed by something to the point of making her unable to breathe in a rhythmic way, with running it speeds up the process.
Jeez I feel like I'm writing another story but anyways, the Inu-Youkai. She's a mystery; she's a character I want you to keep in mind because she is part of the buildup. So you do have to hang tight of who's is who and what's what. My paragraphs didn't repeat cause I do proofread before I post, which I highly suggest to most writers out there, it helps. One question did made me laugh, the kimono she worn going to dinner is NOT Sesshomaru's clothes. Sure he got them, but the way you said makes it seem like he wears them too. They are kimonos left for the Lady in waiting. Anyways I think you need to take it slow and reread the chapters because the questions you asked didn't really fit well with the chapters. To me my story seem to flow well and build up good intension to the reviewers. Expect anticipations and many questions, because I'm sure all of my followers and reviewers probably see this story in different ways of interpretation, which is fine because when I write the next chapter, I want them to be mind-boggle and blown. A "didn't expect that!" or "I knew that'll happen! My imagination is awesome!" or "I had that gutsy feeling it'll happen, but a better way." moments.
Anyways sorry guys if you expected this to be a chapter, I just had to let that reviewer and probably others of how I felt and clear some things. So lara5170 my suggestion is, don't just leave reviews after each chapters, read the WHOLE story while writing down some questions because some of the questions might be answered in the next chapters or future chapters. Whatever questions you have left over will probably be answered the future chapters, which is good and what I anticipated. Also build up some imagination and scenery in the story, I feel like you're skimming or skipping over couple of lines. I know some browsers the words probably look small, may I suggest zoom up the text in the browser so you can read each line clearly with understandings. Remember, it's a story not a quick few chapters and be done deal; no I want my audience entertained to the fullest. Expect no straight forwardness. Meaning don't expect something being the same as others, everyone has different ways of telling or writing stories, not all minds think alike, remember that. No questions are not going to be explained right away, it takes the fun out of stories and what makes it so dry and dead. Again seeing my reviewer wanting to know more or wanting to know what happens next is what makes me keep going to fulfill their enjoyment. As for the characters, again ooc or oc doesn't matter to me, I'll build them the way with a bit of oc, which is why ooc is invented so that way it can make the story interesting.
Anyways thank you guys that are following, favoring, reviewing with awesome reviews, and adding my story on alert. It makes me one happy author :)
