Howdy! So, it was brought to my attention, that i have quite a few mistakes in my story. I know age for one thing. I'm thinking of changing the age Yogi got raped, and his brother's and sister's age. Other than that, I'm not to sure what i messed up. Please tell me, it'd really help me improve this. So, PLEASE REVIEW!
I just recenlty read the latest Karneval chapters. I realize that now my fic is not really in time with what is happening. It's way off! So i had to change a few things with how i wanted this chapter to turn out, but it also gave me an idea. So, tell me what you think.
I was thinking of redoing chapter 6, pretty eyes. Should i? I'm not sure. I also think i should take out John and Carl, and replace them with the people Nai and Gareki go with. But at the same time i don't want to. Because so far, I'm not sure, is my fic an Au? Should i call it that? I wanted it to take place after Yogi's bandage came off, Obvious right? But my story and what actually happens is so different. IS that good?
Please tell me what you think.
I also noticed that there are more Karneval fanfics! That really makes me happy! They're good to. I hope people write more.
Fic time!
Liam yawned sleepily as he and Tsukumo walked into the train station. They had taken three trains that day, and Liam was TIRED. Tsukumo glanced back, to see Liam nodding off on his feet. Tsukumo shook her head with a soft sigh, a smile tugging against her lip against her will.
"I'm sleepy Miss. Tsukumoooo..." Liam whined softly in a whisper, his mis matched eyes fluttering closed and opening again. He sounded like a child. "We should find a hotel or something to stay in." Tsukumo said calmly. "We're in Springs, right?" Tsukumo nodded. Liam yawned. "I know a inn we can stay at. Really comfy beds." Tsukumo smiled.
"Lets go."
They walked for a bit until Liam grabbed Tsukumo's hand. Half dragging her to a small looking building, Liam stumbled along sleepily. "Here it is." Liam announced when they reached a small building. They walked into the building.
"Moriko?" Tsukumo heard a voice ask. She looked up and saw an elderly woman come down the stairs. "No, it's just me." Liam called out to her. The old woman shook her head. "Liam, Liam. You never write. You should realy kick Moriko in the butt. Get her to come back home." The old woman said, shaking a finger at Liam. Liam laughed. "I know, i know. She'll be home soon. I have good feeling that something will happen. She'll be back, then I'll be gone. "
"I didnt." "I know Emma. But things need to be fixed. Not just for Moriko." Liam turned to Tsukumo. Tsukumo, this is Emma. Emma, this is Tsukumo. We're going to go find her friends." Liam introduced the two.
"Hello dear. Liam, I'll go get you both two room keys." Emma left behind a counter and returned with two diffrent keys. "How long will you both be staying?" She asked. "Just tonight." Liam said, smiling softly. Emma nodded. "Alright. Sleep tight you two. I gave you the same room, but don't worry Sweetie." Emma siad winking at Tsukumo. "Liam wont pull nothin' he...has a sister." Emma said after a slight barely noticable pause.
Tsukumo blinked. "Alright." She said. "Good night you two." Emma said, as she walked away. "I need to lock up and head to bed myself."
"Come one Miss. Tsukumo." Liam said, wlaking away. Tsukumo followed Liam down the hall. They went into a room and Tsukumo closed the door behind them. Liam dropped his backpack on the ground and flopped onto one of the two beds, his by the window.
Tsukumo left the lights off and walked to the other bed, across from Liam's. The moonlight flowed into the window, and some fell onto Liam's body. Liam's back was turned to the window, so his face was covered in a shadow as the light shinned on his hair. Liam's bright mis matched eyes shinned despite the fact Tsukumo could barely see his face. Needless to say, a shiver went down Tsukumo's spine.
"You've been here before?" Tsukumo asked. Liam nodded. "Yeah. When i was looking for someone. I stayed here for a week, then a couple more times after that." Liam said. Tsukumo nodded. "Who were you looking for?" "Someone very close to me." Was his only answer.
"Nighty night Miss. Tsukumo." Liam said sleepily with a yawn. Tsukumo smiled. "Good night Liam." Tsukumo said. Liam was already asleep.
Gareki sighed. IT had been three weeks since they had come to the ship. Nai and him had explored the ship, and meet anyone else besides John and Carl. The ship was rather small, but there weren't a lot of people to crowd the ship.
Gareki sighed again, looking out the window. The past three weeks had passed by so slowly! Gareki was bored out of his mind. Nai wasn't, having made new friends and being a rather social person and all.
There was nothing to do. Back with the other , there was always something to do. Whether it be sparing with Hirato, or trying to ignore Yogi. Yogi.
Something in Gareki's stomach swished and Gareki frowned. The feeling was weird, not unpleasant in the slightest. IT was warm and made Gareki smile a bit. He frowned. Why did he get this weird feeling anytime he thought of Yogi? What did the feeling mean?
Gareki shook his head. IT was probably nothing. He was just wasting time. Then again, what was there to do? He sighed again.
"Gareki!" Gareki looked up when he heard Nai yell his name. "Gareki! I heard Tsukumo!" Nai said as he ran to Gareki.
Heard tsukumo? Impossible. No one , not even Nai had that good of hearing.
"What do you mean?" Gareki asked, looking at Nai. "I hear Tsukumo." Nai repeated. "I hear where she is! LETS GO!" Nai said, dragging Gareki away. Gareki felt his eyes widen, since when was Nai strong enough to pull him.
They ran into a room where John and Carl where. "I hear Tsukumo!" Nai yelled. They both looked up from their game of chess. "What?" Carl asked, looking confused.
"I hear Tsukumo." Nai repeated calmly. "I hear where she is. Lets go." Nai said. "You hear where she is?" John asked slowly. Nai nodded rapidly. He went to the window and pointed out the window east. "Her voice is coming from that direction." He said. John sighed and smiled. "Well, why not check it out. Shall we?" He said, "John." Carl said. John waved him off.
He looked at Gareki," Thing have been boring right? Let's go." He said. "Garek i smiled slightly. "Lets go."
Yogi sighed, glancing out the window in his room. Things had been so boring since Gareki and Nai left. He felt so lonely. Sure The doctor and Hirato where there, but everyone had been treating him weirdly lately. Like they had to be cautious of him. Yogi didn't like that, but he refused to say anything.
And Tsukumo was still where still looking for Tsukumo. They had no leads and had no idea if she was alright or not. Yogi frowned. It was his fault. IF he hadn't blacked out, he could have fought and helped save everyone.
"Yogi." Yogi looked up to see Hirato. "We've found Tsukumo." Yogi's eyes widened. "Come on, where almost there." Hirato said as he walked out the room, looking over his shoulder he saw Yogi still sitting by the window.
"Coming?" "Of coarse!" Yogi yelped, he jumped to his feet and followed after Hirato. He had to apologize to Tsukumo after all.
Tsukumo didn't understand what Liam was doing. The boy was just sitting under the tree, swinging on the swing. They had been in the small town for three weeks. Why? Liam said that her friends where coming for her. Tsukumo frowned.
"Why are we still here?" She asked. She was tempted to just leave and go ask someone else to help her find her friends. Maybe some one would have a way of contacting them? Perhaps.
"Sit." Liam said calmly when he saw that Tsukumo was about to get up. "Patience, Miss. Tsukumo. Honestly. I thought you would be more mature from working in circus. You are apart of Circus, right?" Tsukumo's eyes widened. She didn't remember telling him that.
"Here they come." He said as he looked to the sky. Two ships appeared. (Are they called ships? You now, what Hirato and Yogi took Gareki and Nai in, with the sheep? What are they called?) Tsukumo's eyes widened.
Hirato and Yogi appeared in front of her. "Tsukumo!" Yogi yelled as he threw his arms around Tsukumo in a hug. Tsukumo saw tears in his eyes, but they didn't fall. "I'm so sorry! It's my fault! Are you okay?" He asked as he looked at her, checking her for any injuries. Tsukumo giggled lightly, she threw her arms around his neck and hugged him back.
"I'm alright."She said. "Tsukumo!" Everyone turned their heads to see Nai running towards them. "Tsukumo!" Nai yelled as he hugged her tightly. Tears where running down his face. "Nai?" She asked.
Gareki, John and Carl walked towards them.
"What? No hello for me?" Everyone looked to Liam.
Yogi looked at The strange person on the swing and something in his mind clicked. The wing, those pretty mis matched eyes.
"Moriko." He whispered.
"Hello Yogi."
"Do you two know each other?" Gareki asked, looking between the two. Liam or Moriko, laughed, the sound rather childish and filled with something wicked at the same time.. "Nope. Not at all." Yogi said, a huge grin on his face.
The person with mis matched eyes hoped of the swing. Extending their hand to Yogi, they said. "Hello Yogi, pleasure to finally meet you. IN person that is."
Yogi smiled. "Likewise.
So, I'll stop there. Please tell me what you think, what i should fix, and all that. Please review! Tell me what needs to be fixed! It would really help!
Bye!
