Personal Pride


"Your sister has got a job in an awesome place."

'...'

"I wish I could afford to go there."

'...'

"I went to look at the cafe part once during their shift hours but I couldn't see your sister."

'...'

"Crystal shooed me out when she realised I wasn't going to buy anything."

"Rick."

"Yeah?"

"The food in the cafe isn't that expensive, you can buy cigs you can get something off the menu. Also Setsu runs the new take away cakes range they have. She cooks them during working hours so the only chance you have to see her is in the spooky fun zone or the spooky hunted house area."

"You really do say more when it's about Setsuka."

"and?"

"and I spend all my pocket money on cigs and games; there is nothing left for food."

XXX

"Being the hunted house attendant is so much fun, if I wasn't stuck in the spooky fun kitchen I would so take more sifts there."

"There aren't that many who go through the hunted house. If you weren't stuck in the kitchen you would be helping me out on the cafe floor."

"Oh, how dull"

"You're looking down on what I do? Alright then I won't tell the customers reaction to your Edible Frights."

"No, no you got to tell me. Crystal how did they go?"

"Sit still so I can un-tease your hair."

"Please,"

"Fine, of the four buyers I've seen one shrieked and dropped the box, two flinched then smiled and the last didn't react at all."

"Was the last brother?"

"... Yes,"

"The first must have been the marzipan dentals, they are so realistic. I modelled them after your grannies fake teeth."

"That would explain why the customer didn't try to taste it."

"Ehh?'

"They put it in the bin without looking inside again."

"I guess I should aim for flinching instead of screaming then."

"Really I'm jealous."

"Why?"

"We both work on the same weekends but you get paid more than I."

"It must be the cook title"

"It is, that and the cooking lessons you video and put on their website."

"Those? But the base recipes are so simple it's more about the spooky decorations."

XXX

"Cain."

"hmm?"

"What are you doing?"

"Research"

"I can see that much man. There are no assignments at the moment what are you looking into?"

"Acting classes"

"Why?"

"As the older brother I should have had a job first."

"That doesn't explain the computer search man. Anyone would recruit you as a bouncer."

"I don't want to be a bouncer, I want to be an actor."

"Your serious,"

"yep"


The chapters so far have been very Setsu centred so I should do something for Cain now I guess. The thing is I want them to be as Ren and Kyoko made them, which means they will have traces of those people but still be individuals shaped by there own life experiences.

So why does 'the fashion-esta with a heart of fire' have Kyoko level home maker skills. Why does Cain have the landmine of 'murder', is it like Ren misplaced guilt or something else. Why are they so physically close as siblings?(I refuse to take the favoured sexual route they are siblings not Ren and Kyoko).

Answering these questions on character building will probably be the end of story but that's a way to go yet.

I wanta add some actions in with the dialogue but its an all speech challenge.