Alright, first off, the 3rd person point of view was a failure, more than half the time I kept referring to Mark with a "I" out of habit. So I'll go with a 1st person point of view and sometimes throw in a different POV now and again.
Now for reviews!
Gunlord500 – Thanks for the advice. I will go into something that might be different from other Mark fictions hopefully. I haven't read all of them but I hope I can make it original. Please be a little patient until I can develop the story a bit more.
Red Daiman – Your comment helped me think a bit more about my characters personality. I kind of have an idea of what I want him to be like. I have no idea what Sue-ness is, sorry. I decided to go on a different approach and use the game script less, I use it as a reference on what things I should say or what's the situation.
Patattack – thanks for the reviews. I'm planning on adding some more stuff that might interest you more. I hope I can keep you reading this.
Now, as for my newest chapter, I might have left out a few things, I'm not sure but I'm content with what I wrote. Over 15 pages of writing so I'm happy. This chapter should have a different spin on this part of the story. I'm not sure if you guys will like it but I think I did good.
New development for Mark! WOOT!
Ok, now lets get rolling. Chapter….whatever this is go!
At the crack of dawn, we start our journey to Araphen, it's a few days from the border of Lycia. Apparently it's the second biggest city in Lycia. The trip there wasn't nice either. Our new additions to the Legion were not worth it. Erk is relatively mild-mannered so I don't mind him. But Serra… Serra is someone that most of the Legion cannot tolerate. She is very obnoxious, likes to glorify herself too much. I would have thought healers would be less chatty but Serra breaks that assumption. When it seems that everyone is going to snap from her endless talk, I usually have to take a bullet for the team and direct her attention towards myself, it's mentally tiring.
On the road I continue to train my weapon skills. Although training my body was rather easy, I just can't manage to learn how to use a weapon. Lyn has been training me with a sword for a while but there's little visible improvement. The new stuff I learned a few days ago is still beyond practical. Well, I am making progress with magic but not as much as I would like.
Magic is difficult, it drains me mentally. I feel like my life has been sucked out. Apparently that's not supposed to happen, I must be very bad at this then. Erk says that magic gathers the energy from my surroundings and you yourself concentrate it with your magic, but I feel like I'm using my own energy, weird. I'm tired right now, the light headache I had a few days ago got worse, I better rest on it today and hope it gets better.
"We should be pretty close to Araphen, I wonder what the towns like." I said.
"It's the second biggest in Lycia, it's sure to be busy." Wil said.
"That doesn't really mean anything. Even if it's big, the atmosphere of the town is what matters." I told him.
"Atmosphere?" Florina asked.
"Yes, a cities perspective depends on its people, if the people look depressed, it will show in the city, and vice versa." I told them.
"So depending from what we see from its people, we should be able to determine the cities condition? Why would that matter?" Lyn asked.
"Because, the way things run in the city depends on the marquess decides. If its run inefficiently we can assume that the marquess doesn't care for his people." I said.
"You can tell that from the people?" Dorcas said.
"Mhmm… it is also the same for groups of people and villages but that's straying from the topic. By the way, where's Kent?" I asked.
"He went ahead and asked the marquess if they could lend us there assistance." Sain said.
"I only hope that nothing bad happens." I told them.
"Mark don't say that, you know if you say it, it WILL happen." Serra said.
"I agree with her, don't give us bad luck." Sain said.
"I wasn't trying to; I was just… forget it." I gave up.
We started to approach the city. When we got into view we noticed something, which was not a good sign. Smoke, if there's smoke there's got to be fire.
"Audelia, what's happening over there?" I asked.
"The city is on fire, due to what looks like mercenaries running amok. The fire is enveloping the town." It said.
"Damn it! We need to go and help. Alright everyone lets get closer." I told them. We rode as fast as we could until we reached the town. It was bad, many people were fleeing. The solders are busy trying to calm the fire but they're too little of them to stop it. Most are trapped inside their barracks.
"Alright, for now, Serra help the injured, Erk you guard her just in case. Sain, Kent, Wil, Lyn and Dorcas go and rout the enemies near the barracks. Florina stay grounded until we know we took care of any archers; help Serra if she needs it. I'm going to go help the people inside that didn't get out." I told them.
"Wait, that's too dangerous!" Lyn said.
"That's crazy! You'll get burned alive in there!" Sain said.
"I know what I'm doing, my cloak will protect me more than your armor, and the rest of you have little or no cover from the flames. Trust me on this." I told them. They hesitantly nodded and we split up.
I run toward the barracks and looked for water. I found it and drenched myself with it. It will probably be safer this way. I got nearer to the entrance to see that it had been sealed of with flaming debris. I hope this won't hurt too much. I ran as fast as I could toward the door. I put out my shoulder bracing for impact.
BAM! I felt the debris give way and I landed inside, I wasn't as hurt as I would think I would have been. A large amount of solders ran outside the newly created passage.
"Is anyone still left inside?" I yelled.
"HELP ME!" I heard. I ran to the direction of the voice, there was a man trapped underneath a support beam and a man trying to pull him out.
"Help me get him out of here!" He yelled. I rushed over to pick up the beam, but it was too heavy for both of us. Damn it! Think…think…got it!
"Alright, I need you to back away for me." I told the man.
"What?"
"Just do it!" I yelled, he complied.
This is just a test but I don't know if it will work but it's got to. I gathered whatever energy I could muster and began chanting.
(This was supposed to be fancy writing but it couldnt upload for some reason)
Boom!
Smoke flew everywhere and the floor shook. Just like I planned but it was more effective than I thought. I used magic and concentrated whatever I could to ignite in one single point resulting in the explosion. It left me mentally weak, but I managed to blow most of the support beam off.
"Alright... now let's get that guy... out of here." I told the man. Damn it, I'm more tired than I thought.
We lifted the man and carried him outside. I notice two horses riding toward us. I see a familiar red armor, it must be Kent, but who's the one beside him.
"Kent! It's about time you showed up; the fun's just going to start." I yelled at him.
"Mark, where is Lady Lyndis?" he asked.
"Yeah I'm fine, thanks for asking." I said sarcastically. "I sent her to take care of anyone near the barracks with Wil, Sain and Dorcas, Serra is tending the wounded with Erk guarding her, and Florina is helping or is grounded. Who's your friend?" I asked.
"His name is Rath, the commander of the marquess's army. The marquess agreed to help us but the town was attacked and he sent Rath to stop it. Rath this is Mark, our tactician." He said.
"Rath… pleasure." He said.
"A man a few words huh. A man who appreciates silence, finally!" I exclaimed. "Anyways we should round up everyone; I just got the last people out of the barracks." I told them.
"Was that blast your doing?" Rath said.
"Yeah, left me a bit tired, but we got bigger problems, what's the situation?" I asked.
I got a situation report from Rath; apparently they got into the castle and started making a mess in there. Not only that, they're hold up in there and we can't just go through the front.
After gathering up everyone, there were a few wounds on the assault team but nothing a few heals wouldn't solve... Ok so maybe Serra was worth keeping around. But the problem right now is how to get in.
"Is there any other way to get in?" I asked Rath.
"… There is a secret passage used by the marquess if he should ever need to escape." He said.
"Great, where is it?"
"It's activated by three triggers. Once they are set up, the entrance should open. But the doors guarding it should be locked" He said.
"Ok, what's the number of enemies you see Audelia?" I asked.
"There are two Myrmidons south of you and the rest are solders holding spears, there's a lot of them... I cannot see what's inside so expect the worst." It said.
"Any archers?" I asked.
"None from what I see, the Pegasus knight is good to go." She said.
"Alright, Florina take care of those Myrmidons that are south of here. Sain, Kent, Wil, Erk and Dorcas, take care of any lancers you see, Dorcas you're in the lead, remember to check the bodies for keys... Lyn and Rath follow me." I told them. Rath was looking rather grunted.
"Err… Rath, I am sorry that I have to command you like this, I understand if you wish to not obey." I told him.
"No… this is our battle, you are the tactician, it is only right that you command." He said.
"Thanks."
After he said that he looked at Lyn. He seemed surprised and then started speaking.
"Are you from Sacaen?" he asked Lyn.
"Yes, I am Lyn of Lorca, a pleasure to meet you." She said.
"From the Lorca tribe? There were survivors?" he asked.
"A few, a handful at best. May I ask who are you?" she said.
"I am Rath of the Kutolah tribe. Our tribes might be different but I am still Sacaen, I will help my fellow tribesmen." He said.
"Thank you for the assistance. A thousand blessings upon us." She said.
"And a thousand curses unto our enemy!" he said.
"You know, that was pretty cool. Mind if I use it?" I asked.
"Feel free." He said.
"Alright, now lets get to work, Lyn you take the nearest house. Rath take the farthest to your left, I'll get the last one. Warn them to barred there doors and be on alert." I told them. Split up.
I ran to the house and knocked before entering. I went inside a rogue looking guy.
"Hey, there's trouble outside, barred your doors and stay on alert." I told the man before going outside again.
"Hey, wait! Can I talk to you?" he said.
"Who are you?" I asked.
"My name's Matthew, a specialist in acquisitions of all kinds." He said.
"That's just fancy talk for you're a thief. Well I assume that you're no ordinary thief." I told him.
"You're a sharp one aren't you. Yes, I have been keeping tabs on you. I cannot say for what." He said.
"Well, I can already piece it together. You were sent by some other marquess to spy on Lyn in order to see if she was suitable to claim Caelin, but basically you're a spy." I told him.
"How did you-, I really shouldn't underestimate you." He said.
"It was a lucky guess. Now I assume you will pursue us until we're done with this campaign so might as well pull your worth. If you're a thief can you lock pick the doors?" I asked.
"Yes… for a fee of course." He said.
"It's free or I'll blab to everyone that you're a spy." I told him.
"You- *sigh* Ok, I know when I'm cornered. It's a deal." He said.
"Good, so get going and open the door east of here."
"You're a demon, you know that."
"Thanks, only when I want to be."
After we left the house, we met up with Lyn and Rath.
"Rath I want you to follow our new companion to the door east of here, he'll open it for you." I told him. He nodded but Lyn seemed upset.
"So he's a thief?" Lyn said, with a slightly annoyed tone.
"Yes, he'll help us tremendously in this skirmish. He won't do anything he's not supposed to do." I responded.
"Thief's don't keep their word, are you sure he's going to help us?" Lyn said doubtfully.
"Don't worry, I'm blackmailing him right now, he won't do anything bad unless I tell him to." I retorted, she seemed slightly surprised but let the issue go.
Rath and Matthew got to the first switch; it opened up the hidden passageway.
"Alright, Matthew go with Rath and look for any other doors that need opening. Hit if any of our allies are in trouble help them and tell them what to do. Me and Lyn will stay here until we hit all the switches. Bring everyone back and meet up here." I told them, they left rather quickly.
I look around the town and then I got hit by a realization. Where are the damn guards? This is a big town, its only natural for them to have a big guard post, but there are a few of them here, helping to dowse the fire, where are the rest? Oh crap…
"Crap, I think the marquess is going to be bad news." I said.
"Why?" Lyn asked.
"I have a feeling that this marquess is very self-absorbed, meaning he doesn't give an ass about his people." I said.
"Why do you think that?"
"Look around, there's very few guards working on putting the fire out, he's probably ordering them to do something besides helping out here. This means he doesn't care about the people. Also this fire may be our fault." I told her.
"How so?"
"There's no good reason for anyone to attack Araphen, the only reason I can think of is that they were after you. Lungdren must be getting serious now. Who knows what he'll do next." I said.
"All the more reason to help out and stop Lundgren." She stated.
"That's not the point. This means-"but I got cut off with everyone returning. Well better let her find out herself.
"Alright everyone, stay alert, we don't know what's inside. I want Dorcas and Kent in front, Erk and Wil support them. Matthew looks around for any doors or something. Everyone else bring up the rear." I told them.
We proceeded inside and found a chest shortly after, why is there a chest in the middle of the room? People are careless.
"Treasure time! Treasure time!" Matthew chanted, it's catchy.
"Treasure time! Treasure time!" I started chanting too. Everyone looked at me. "What? It's catchy. But forget that, Matthew you know what to do." I told him.
"Roger!" he saluted and picked the chest. "Sweet, an Angelic robe!" he exclaimed.
"What's it do?" I told him.
"It helps increase survival in battle. It's for the less robust if you will. But it vanishes after a single use." He said.
"How?"
"Magic." He said. Of course…Magic.
"Mark! Stop stealing what's not yours." Lyn yelled at me.
"Err… I'm just making sure it stays safe. We'll return it later… that's right, later." I said.
"You better." She said and gave me a glare that scared the crap out of me. Note to self, don't piss her off.
"Alright, any more chests? There's one up ahead but there's a solder there." Matthew said.
"Alright, Dorcas you good to take him?" I told him. He nodded.
"Alright, lets go." I said. I went in with him. He got a good hit in on the solder but not enough to kill him. The solder charged at Dorcas and he got impaled in his stomach.
"Dorcas!" I screamed. Damn it. I grabbed his axe and beheaded his opponent. Elimine help me! He's bleeding too much.
"Serra, get in here now!" I screamed. Serra franticly rushed to his side and started healing him. I put vulnerary on him to help. We managed to keep him among the living. He just needs rest and he'll be fin tomorrow. But I'm not happy.
"Shit! We almost lost him." I cursed myself, slamming my fist at the wall. Everyone stayed silent.
…
"Alright, let's get going. I'll take the lead this time." I grabbed Dorcas's axe. Everyone wanted to say something but they held it in. Matthew broke the silence.
"Umm… the thing inside the chest… it's called an Armor slayer. It should help deal with the Knight up ahead." He said.
I told him to give it to Lyn. We got closer to the knight. He was wearing a large amount of armor. Too bad we just got an armorslayer.
"Gah! How did you get in… No matter, I'll wipe all you out." The man said.
"What's your name?" I asked.
"My name is Bool, a man who shall slay you." He said.
"I just wanted to know the name of the man I'll kill. Good-bye." I told him.
A hail of arrows was unleashed. His armor defended most of the arrows but some got through. Next Erk unleashed fire at him. His armor did not help him that time. I commanded Sain and Kent to attack; they broke through his defense and landed a few blows on him. Lyn landed the last attack with the Armorslayer. But still he didn't fall.
"Nghnh!" he was struggling to stand. "If I can't beat you, I'll take the girl with me!" he yelled and charged at Lyn. Crap, Lyn won't be able to survive that! I won't lose anyone, not while I can still do something.
I rushed towards Lyn and pushed her aside just as a spear was going to impale her. The lance went through my body. I was coughing up blood. But I won't let him do anything else. With the rest of my strength I held his spear in place. Dorcas, thanks for training me.
"Everyone, do it now!" I screamed. Everyone jumped at the enemy and with many strikes at once, the giant armored man fell, I did too.
"Mark!" Lyn screamed as everyone rushed towards me. There was a lot of blood; of course they would be worried.
"Don't move, I'll heal you!" Serra said. Wow, for her not to say anything, it must be serious.
"For the love of Elimine, you almost died back there, what were you thinking!" Sain yelled at the gravely injured tactician.
"I thought I would live, and I was right." I told them. They looked at me in question.
"What do you mean?" Wil said.
"Do you notice I'm not holding a certain magical robe that helps people survive?" I asked.
"You mean…" Florina said shocked.
"Yup, if I didn't use it, I would probably be dead right now." I told them.
"For all that is holy, you really are one to watch out for." Matthew said.
"Heheh… I try." I told them.
"You should count yourself among the lucky ones, don't go dying on us." Kent said.
"Alright, I get it, no dying while I'm with you guys. You sure don't make it easy on me you know." I said. Laughing off my fatigue. Lyn looks angry and worried. But I ignore her; I'm too tired to care what she says.
"Alright… Rath, take over from here. Rout any enemies that are still alive… you're a commander, lead your solders." I told him.
"No, I will stand with a warrior that risked his life to help those in my charge. I'll tell my subordinate what to do." He told me.
"Heh… suit yourself, come on guys, we got a marquess to meet." I said. I tried looking the best I could, but I know my condition. I'm mentally and physically weakened. My body is barely holding out because I was sick. Just got to make it through this part.
"Rath, you've done well." Said the marquess.
"Sir…If you have praise, it should be given to this group." Rath said.
"Hm? Who are you?" the marquess said.
"My name is Lyndis. I'm pleased to see that you are well." Lyn said.
"Oh… It's you. You're Marquess Caelin's—"he stopped.
"Leave us, Rath. I want to speak with her." He said. He said nothing and left.
"Now… Lady Lyndis. Do you know who was responsible for this uproar?" he asked.
"I believe it was the work of my granduncle, Lundgren." Lyn said.
"That's exactly right. This means my castle has been damaged in your family's petty inheritance dispute." He stated. I knew it, he's an ass.
"My apologies." Lyn said.
"When I heard that Lady Madelyn's daughter was in trouble, I thought to lend my assistance… I change my mind. I withdraw my offer." He said.
"Marquess Araphen! You gave me your word, my lord!" Kent said. I held my hand out and made him stop.
"Might I ask why you withdrew your assistance, Marquess Araphen?" I told him.
"It is because I was not informed about a vital detail." He said.
"And what would that be?" I asked.
"This girl does resemble Lady Madelyn, but… I did not expect her to be so tainted with the blood of Sacae." He said. This son of a bitch!
"And why does it matter if she is from Sacae?" I told him. I already want to kill him.
"Don't you think that the Marquess of Caelin would be troubled to meet this… nomadic mongrel?" he said. WHY YOU!
Kill him…
…What?
"It is not your place to decide for someone else. In that matter, might I ask where your guards were at the time of the fire?" I asked.
"I commanded them to protect my precious valuables, and sent whoever was left to deal with the fire." He said. This guy!
Kill Him…
Shut up, weird voice, I'm pissed at this guy right now.
"What about your people, did you send help to them?" I asked. I think I know the answer already.
"They can take care of themselves, I'm the Marquess, and it's only natural that the guards will guard me and my valuables." He said.
KILL HIM!
SHUT UP!
"You're despicable. A failure of a Marquess. We don't need your assistance," I said.
"Grr… you think you can stand up to Lundgrens forces alone!" he said.
"Yes, I'll make certain of it." I told him before walking away. Everyone joined me, before we left, Lyn had something to say.
"I am proud of the Sacae blood that runs through my veins. I will NOT accept aid from one who disparages my heritage." She said.
We hear him call the guards; lets get out of here before it's too late.
We reach the gates of the town to find a bunch of solders there. Rath is with them. Great, I had to shoot my mouth off.
"Sorry guys, I might have caused more trouble." I told him.
"Don't be, I wanted to punch the guy." Sain said.
"He's right; I wouldn't have done any differently." Said Wil.
"H-He was a bad person." Florina said. Looks like she isn't good at insulting people.
"Sorry, if I had only known sooner…" Kent started saying.
"Kent, its not your fault, you did what you thought was best." Lyn said.
"Well, it looks like this is the end, might as well go with a bang." I told them. Everyone got ready.
But to our surprise, the solders did nothing. Instead they opened up their formation to allow us to proceed through.
"What's going on?" I asked.
"We do not wish to capture you; we wanted to thank you for helping us in our time of need." Said a solder.
"That's right; you helped us out without anything in return. It's only right to help you guys out too." Another guard said.
"But what about the Marquess, won't you get in trouble?" I asked.
"No, we never saw anyone pass this gate, nor did we see which way they went. Isn't that right fella's?" another guard said, they cried out in a synched "Yeah!"
"Thanks guys, lets go!" I told everyone. Rath soon rode up to us.
"I wish to join you on your quest. I would add my strength to yours." He said.
"Did we get you in trouble?" Lyn asked.
"No… I overheard the Marquess talking to himself; he did not respect my heritage. I have no need for such a leader." He said.
"Then you are welcomed, we're counting on you." I told him.
"Thank you. Here… this is a thanks from the guards." He said.
"It's gold! I love those guards!" I cried happily.
"Is it alright to accept it?" Lyn said.
"Its rude not to. They gave us this gold so we can fulfill our journey, we can't let them down." I said.
"You're right, Rath thank you." Lyn said.
We continued on the road. I didn't get far before feeling delirious.
"Mark? Are you ok?" Dorcas asked.
"Actually, no I'm not. Sorry guys, I'm done for the day." I said before collapsing. The last thing I notice is everyone running towards me. I slowly close my eyes and give way to the darkness.
Hehehe… So you're finally here.
Wh-Who are you?
I'm you, idiot.
Don't screw with me, who are you? Where am I?
Wow, aren't you cranky. Don't worry, you just collapsed.
Why?
Why you ask? Because you were sick and it got worse, you pushed your body's limits by trying out that new spell and getting stabbed through the stomach. Your strength to get through all that has been used up too. It's only natural that you would collapse.
I guess… but that still doesn't explain who are you.
Might as well give you a hint. It has to do with your past.
You know about my past! Tell me!
Now now, that wouldn't be fun would it?
Tell me damn you!
Nope, it's something you have to find out yourself. Well, I better get going, your waking up soon, let's meet again, shall we?
Wait! I'm not done talking! Get back here!
It was no use, he was gone. I feel myself starting to wake up.
I wake up to see the roof of a tent. I guess they moved me to a bed. I still don't feel well but at least I feel better. I look around and I don't see anyone. How long have I been out?
"Where is everyone?" I muttered. Just then I see Lyn coming in. She looks at me for a while before I wave at her.
"Umm…Hello… Good morning… I think" I said, trying to start some sort of conversation.
She walks up to me with a relieved face but as she gets closer her face turns from relieved to "Oh crap run away!" Next thing I know I get a slap on the face. It hurt, I guess I deserve it.
"You idiot! Why didn't you say anything! I thought we were going to lose you again." She yelled at me.
"Err…sorry" was the only thing I could say. She was right, I couldn't myself of that either.
"Sorry isn't good enough, as punishment, you're not allowed to die!" she said.
There was a moment a silence.
…
Then I busted out laughing. Lyn was still mad but she started laughing too. Eventually we stopped laughing and stayed quiet.
"Sorry." I said.
"You better be." She said.
"You know, it's been a while since we talked by ourselves. How have you been?" I told her. She paused for a bit.
"I'm holding on." She said. Something up.
"Is something wrong? You're worried about something." I said.
"No…it's nothing." She said.
"Well, if you say so, I won't push you to say it. How long was I out?" I asked.
"Three days, everyone was worried you know. You suddenly collapsed; well I guess it's to be expected. You pushed yourself too much lately." She said.
"I know, but I did what I had to do." I said.
We stayed quiet for a bit longer before she asked me a question.
"Mark, what was your family like?" she asked. Crap, its something I didn't want to hear right now.
"Why ask so suddenly?" I asked.
"Because no one knows anything about you. Everyone has shared something about them, except you." She said.
"It's something… I don't want to talk about." I said. I lied, its not that I won't, it's that I can't.
"Do you trust us so little?" she asked.
"No. it's not that."
"Then tell me."
"Lyn, if that's how you're going to be, then I have to make you keep an oath."
"What?"
"Don't ask about my past. Otherwise I'll leave this group."
"Why!"
"Because my past is mine alone. Do we have a deal?"
"…fine."
"Sorry… I'll tell you guys eventually but not right now."
"I'll hold you to that."
"I know, now mind telling everyone not to worry now, I don't want them to worry anymore, also tell them not to ask about my past." I asked.
"Alright, stay in bed for the day." She said.
Through the whole day, everyone came in and told me a story about themselves. Probably in hopes of me opening up. Serra's was really long but I couldn't run away so I decided to actually listen to her. Wil had very good fictional stories, it was fun. Kent and Sain were somehow doing a comedy routine and they didn't even know it. Erk and Dorcas –who already recovered- came in and we discussed magic and Dorcas helped me with herbs he knew about to help me recover faster. Even Florina and Rath came in and shared a bit about themselves, Florina stuttering along the way and Rath about his clan. Audelia popped in eventually to have a look at me.
"You were reckless."
"I know"
"Do you regret it?"
"Not in the slightest. They were my actions and mine alone, I stand by them."
"Destiny holds more trials for you, will you endure?"
"Till my soul is broken beyond repair."
It was a nice conversation. Although Audelia was a bird of little words, talking to it always made me feel like I did the right thing. I have the best buddy in the world.
Lyn helped me walk outside and look at the stars, it was nice.
I need to find out about myself. Who am I? Who was that voice? There are many questions I need to answer. I need to find them; otherwise I can never get close to anyone. I will be force to lie even to the people I hold important… Damn it. Who or what am I!
Authors note – I thought that nobody getting hurt would kind of be unrealistic. I meant no disrespect by getting Dorcas hurt. Honestly I love the guy. In the game I considered him very reliable. I just looked at the game and a lot of the time, somehow my guys would get hit more of the time than dodging with the weapons triangle. I wanted to show that the weapons triangle does not always guarantee success. Also, Mark getting sick, I thought it would be interesting. No one got sick in the game so for a twist the tactician was the one sick. How did you guys like it?
Once again, I ask that you guys review this. I want to know if it's improving or not, I await your responses.
Till next time!
