A/N: This Whole Document Took Me 6 Hours To Type Up!
Your All happy that I updated, right?
You know what's coming: stats!
69 Reviews to date! I was going to type in "67 Reviews to date1!" but I realised I had another 2 more reviews that came in today! Yay! Thanks for all the wonderful support and reviews guys! This story couldn't been done without you! Why? You don't believe me? Well, if I hadn't received all positive reviews I would have given up at the beginning! And that is a fact! So, Thank you! OK, so my last post I had 59 reviews, so that's another 10 more reviews! WooHoo! Keep on reviewing! I have had 2185 views in total! OMG! Thank you for reading my fanfic! 109 of you have read all the way to my previous post "Chapter 6" So, keep on reading peeps!
Yep, it's everyone's favourite A/N segment: Recommendations!
Whose fanfic is it goanna be this week? Let's see...drum roll please... (Drum roll)...
My first recommendation this week is xmyMCRmyx's fanfic TheGhostOfYou. Ok, this fanfic is simply AMAZING!! If you're a My Chemical Romance fan like me, well then chances are, your goanna love it. After the death of Dave Seville, (Yeah, you heard me1- Dave is dead!), Ian Hawke takes in the chipmunks. Theodore and Simon think Ian is OK but Alvin is more suspicious. Can Alvin live with the guilt of...Read the god damn story, will ya! The fanfic concludes the hit single "Helena" by My Chemical Romance and sound awesome in chipmunk style (search for it on YouTube). "So Long Dave and goodnight..." My second recommendation is Kyrio's fanfic Simon & Theodore in: Twisted Tuesday. Simon builds a mind reading experiment but when Simon's machine goes wrong, Simon and Theodore feel themselves acting like the other! (I know, creepy! Theodore smart ad Simon not - LOL) What happens when Theodore knows more about the human brain and Simon feels empty headed? Can the two brothers get back in their own bodies? Well, read it and find out! What yall waiting for? My third and last recommendation this week is luckyfanpup101's fanfic Goodbye, Little Brother. In this fanfic, Theodore is run over by a car (OMG!) and Alvin feels to blame. Can Alvin get over his depression? Read the fanfic and find out! It's awesome!
And that, my readers, concludes this week's segment on "Recommendations"
OK, onto the real A/N:
Real A/N:
So, so, so, so, sorry you had to wait for this chapter! You had to wait 11 days for this! 9That's almost 2 weeks- as someone has mentioned in their review) OK, in my last post I told you all that I didn't know when I was going to update. I was being given a lot of work to do from my college and I have to get it done or I'm dead meat – yeah, just like how I got eaten by a lion from last week's post LOL! Anyway, I still got some more to do. I have been working on the work for the past, almost, two weeks now. As you can tell, getting free time to write up Chapter 7
(Chapter 7 not 8, BTW). On the computer has not been easy. I thought today I would have some free time as I had almost finished all my work. But, just as my hopes are up, my tutor from college gives 5 assessments to do! (AAGGGHHHH! So angry!) I have been working on the assessments all day long and, to my surprise, I have a little more to do! I was so stressed after college and my fingertips were killing me (We type our assessments on the computer) and I was so tired. But then I thought about you guys and how much u wanted to read "Chapter 7" so I thought "What the hell! I'm goanna type up Chapter 7 this evening!" (I finish college at 5:00p.m) 4K I typed up for Chapter 7 plus A/N's. (LOL Imagine how much my fingertips feel know! LOL) I just hope you all appreciate what I'm sacrificing to give u!
OK, so my fanfic is nearing 30K words long (that includes all A/N's and comments) That's awesome! And I have just checked that "Alvin And The Chipmunks" fanfiction category is almost 200 fanfics all together! (It's at 193 so far) Time to celebrate! WooHoo!
Reply's To Reviews:
Some people has asked me a few questions and here are my replies!
Reply to k8tbug14:
Why was Simon snoring so loudly? Good question. Well, if you watch the "Alvin And The Chipmunks" 2007 movie, in the scene when the chipmunks sleep on Dave's armchair, you can hear Simon snoring the loudest. Watch the movie and you'll see...I mane, hear! lol
Reply to lacey:
Yes, I know and I'm sorry for the long wait. But now u can read it, so go ahead. Enjoy!
Reply to xmyMCRmyx:
Hey! Thanks for reviewing my story! You're awesome too so don't go and changing! Hope u appreciate me recommending your story!
Things I Have noticed:
The other day, I was watching the "Alvin And The Chipmunks" 2007 movie on DVD and I noticed that the chipmunks scratch themselves with their feet. (Did u guys notice that? Just being curious) I counted to see how many times they do it and the total is 5 times! Watch the movie and you'll see. Anyway, when I saw this I thought "The chipmunks have to do that in my fanfic" I haven't done it yet but I will put it down later in the story.
To anybody who is really happy out there, this chapter may make you cry so go get some tissues. In fact, why don't u all go get some tissues as well. This chapter is by far, my favourite chapter! It is so emotional and sad! (Yes, I admit it I was crying as I was writing one part) Especially the ending – OMG – saddest part in the whole story so far!
If you guys haven't figured out by the chapter name, this chapter is all about Theodore, who is, my favourite chipmunk (No offense to fans who love Simon and Alvin – their cool as well!") As mentioned once before, I said you will see the story from other characters perspectives and point of view. This week is Theodore's and you get to see a lot from the youngest Chipmunk point of views of situations. Remember I said Theodore knows more than what his not saying? This chapter is high emotional and sad so please, if u find yourself breaking down in tears, don't blame me – blame my stupid brain! As you can tell by the chapter, it's called "Theodore's Nightmare". You'll probably be thinking "It's just a nightmare, nothing to fear..." Yes well the saddest part about this chapter is that half of it is based on a true event that happened to Theodore and the second half is a sort of what could have happened and views of Theodore's perspective – but is very creepy! I get shivers just think about Theodore's nightmare! Poor Theo...:(
I am so nearing the edge on this chapter! So, so nearing the edge for a T rating. If I go any way nearer and fall off the edge, this fanfic will probably go up to a T for Teen. I hope it doesn't though. I like it as K+ for now...
I think you'll either "HATE" This chapter or "LOVE IT!" I don't know, you guys gotta tell me what you think of it.
NOTE: BTW, read the A/N comments in the chapter while your reading the chapter – it will make a lot more sense.
OK, well, without further ado here is the most highly anticipated chapter so far – "Chapter 7 – Theodore's Nightmare"!
WARNING: (In a deep voice that I still sound funny) This chapter contains a mild scene of threat, some mild gun violence, some moderate blood violence and some scary scenes that may be unsuitable for small children. You have all been warned...again!
Disclaimer: I do not own Alvin and the Chipmunks (I wish I did tho...lol) or Dave Seville or Ian Hawke (I wish so I could kill him – lol) or Claire.
Sorry for bad grammar and spelling!
Alvin And The Chipmunks 2: The Chipettes
Tagline (Writing at the bottom of a poster): Here Comes Trouble...Again!
Written by mpkio2
Chapter 7
Theodore's Nightmare
As the song ended, and the concert came to an end, fireworks lit the stage and confetti fell from the theatre ceiling. The fans were screaming, kids going crazy, adults clapping as loudly as they could.(1)
Theodore's heart was bumping like crazy. He was sweating as well...he couldn't remember the last time he felt so exhausted...yes he could; Ian Hawke – that was the last time Theodore felt to tired to do anything. Living with him was a nightmare, a total nightmare for Theodore and his two older brothers. Ian was so mean to Theodore. He was so mean to Theodore that he made Theodore go on a strict "No-Sugars-Or Fatty Food Diet". Theodore could remember the day like it was yesterday... (2)
Two And A Half Months Ago...
Theodore tried his hardest to open the bag of muffins. But no matter how hard he tugged and pulled at the wrapping, the bag would not open. He had been trying to open the bag for 5 solid minutes and still he had no luck. The problem was he couldn't go and ask his two brothers, Alvin and Simon to help him because...well, his two brothers were going to be in trouble if they were caught helping Theodore to open a bag of treats. Oh how he wanted those muffins, those sweet, tasty, blueberry muffins! (3)
Suddenly, Theodore heard a noise. He turned his head around to look at where the source of the noise came from. It sounded like the front door was opened. What if it was Ian? Theodore would be in so much trouble if he caught him doing this! Theodore's heart was beating as fast as a car engine. He started to sweat a little, panic running through his whole body. "What should I do?" Theodore thought, panicky. He could hear footsteps echoing in the hallway. His heart was going as fast as the fastest car in the world! "I think my heart's going to explode!" (4) Theodore thought, getting more frightened the second.
The footsteps were getting louder..."It can't be Ian!" Theodore thought, frighteningly. The footsteps grew louder..."Could it?" Theodore wasn't going to stay and see if it was Ian; he had to get out of the kitchen and quick!
He couldn't believe what he was about to do, but he did it anyway; he dropped the bag of muffins on the kitchen counter and as he did so, he whispered to the muffins: "Don't worry, you'll be safe" "I just hope I'll be safe," Theodore thought, fearing for his life. He was about to scurry away, get out of the kitchen as fast as he could, but before he did, he looked back at the muffins. They looked so abandoned to him; he couldn't just leave them here? What if Ian did something to them? But he had to...
"I'll be back to eat you, don't worry!" He said assuring to the bag of muffins. (5)
The kitchen door opened. Not wanting to get caught, Theodore scurried as fast as he could under the kitchen counter. It was dark and smelled of stinky fish under the counter, but Theodore would rather be under the counter with smelly fish than being caught with the bag of muffins. He could see a pair of black shoes from where he was hiding. The feet moved right in front of him. Theodore dared not to move or make a sound because if he did, he was dead...
"I don't remember these being here," came a voice Theodore feared.
"Don't make a sound!" Theodore thought to himself.
"Well," The voice said loudly as if it knew someone else was in the room. "If these delicious muffins are nobody's I guess I'll just eat them," (6)
"Don't move an inch!" Theodore continued to think to himself.
"Well, I'm going to open this bag of muffins now," The voice stated loudly. Theodore could hear a tear sound; the muffin bag was open.
"I'm going to eat these muffins now," The voice said in an I-know-your-hiding voice.
"I have to save those muffins!" Theodore thought desperately. He couldn't let someone else eat the one thing that was truly his to be!
"Here I go; about to eat these muffins!" The voice continued in its somewhat mocking voice.
"No, he can't; he wouldn't!" But there was nothing poor, little Theodore could do. He couldn't be caught dead in this room, anything but being caught...but...He so wanted to save those muffins and eat them himself! He was stuck; either be quiet and not be found and let someone else eat him beloved muffins...or, he could jump up onto the counter and save the muffins, but get caught in doing so. (7)
"Hmm," The voice said in pleasure. "These muffins taste so good!" The voice was correct: the muffins were good. They even smelt good; Theodore could practically smell them! But the smell, to Theodore, was a cry for help. "Help Us!" He could hear the smell call him.
"I can't," Theodore replied, quietly.
"Yes, you can," the smell replied. It did sound very real...like it was an actual voice!
"No, I can't; I'll get in trouble," Theodore sobbed a little, holding back his tears for his loved ones.
"But once you have us, you'll feel better!" the smell replied. (8)
"I will?" Theodore asked the smell.
"Yes, you'll feel a whole lot better once we are together!" The smell did sound very sad.
"I...I don't..." Theodore didn't know what to say. He was nervous.
"Come on, we'll help you! On the count of three, you come and save us OK?" The smell said.
"I ...err...OK" Theodore replied, nervously. He didn't think it was a smart idea but he had no choice; he had to save those poor muffins...but he was so scared, oh so scared. But the smell sounded so sad to him and he really did want them to be in his stomach! He was so confused.
"1..." The smell said slowly.
Heart racing, paws sweating...
"2..."
"Muscles tightening, eye's focused. Theodore was about to save the muffins! (9)
"3!" The smell shouted.
As the smell signalled Theodore to run, Theodore did just that; he ran. He was going to save those poor innocent muffins even if that meant facing the man he feared the most! He ran from under the counter. He was in the clean fresh kitchen air. The kitchen was brighter than it was under the kitchen counter. Theodore turned o face up to the man he feared the most and, just as he did so, the man plunged hands first to snatch him. The man caught him and he picked him up by his tail.
Ian Hawke held Theodore upside by his tail. He put up to his eye level, a fearful expression on his small, chubby face. Ian smiled satisfied with his intimidation on the poor creature. He could feel Theodore's heart pumping through his body and, boy was it fast! Ian swung Theodore from side to side, starring directly at his small eyes with anger and hate. Theodore winced and started to shake. (10)
"I can't believe you feel for that!" Ian said, smile evilly.
"W-w-what?" Theodore, squeaked.
"The voice!" Ian spat and then, suddenly, his voice changed: "Help Us! Help us!" His voice changed to the smell Theodore could hear. "Then that means..." And, then, Theodore understood.
"It was you?" Theodore asked quietly as he swung from side to side. He couldn't believe it, he didn't want to believe.
"Of course it was me!" Ian spat at the scarred chipmunk. (11)
Theodore thought he was about to cry. He really did think he was hearing his muffins speak back to him. And now discovering that the voice was actually not the muffin's put the one person you feared the most; it was worse than seeing ice cream melt. Theodore was tricked, tricked but, not Ian, but by himself...him and his stupid brain.
"I knew you were stupid, but this; this is a new high for you, isn't it?" Ian said coldly. Ian was enjoying every moment of this, enjoying every fearful expression Theodore pulled, every wincing and shaking he made, every tear he saw on his chubby checks...
"I-I'm sorry, Uncle Ian!" And that was when Theodore started to cry. Tears rolled down his forehead and the tears dropped to the kitchen floor. "I was just hungry and I now you said I wasn't allowed but just saw them on the counter and...and...and I'm sorry!" (12)
"Sorry?" Ian said in forceful voice. He was loving this! "Sorry! Is that all you have to say?; Sorry? You think you're goanna get off that easy?"
Why didn't he just stay under the kitchen counter – no, why did he ever see the muffin's on the kitchen counter?
"I'm really sorry! I-"But Theodore was cut-off.
"I told you, you were going on a "No-Sugars Or Fatty Foods Diet"!I told you not to have anything to eat while I took Alvin and Simon out to get them fit in their new outfits! (13)
"I'm sorry-" Theodore gulped; he was petrified now.
"I'm goanna make sure you never disobey me again!" Ian said to Theodore's little petrified face, Ian's eyes full with ice.
"What are you goanna do to me?" Theodore dared to ask. Whatever it was, he had a feeling it was nothing pleasant.
"What am I going to do to-?" Ian repeated Theodore's sentence, sounding shocked. He started to laugh and say: "Nothing, I'm goanna do nothing to you,"
Theodore's muscles relaxed instantly. At lease Ian wasn't going to throw him across the room; he had done that once and Theodore did not like it.
"But, I am going to do something with these muffins!" said Ian as he picked up the bag of muffin's in his free hand, an evil grin spread across his face. (14)
"What!" Theodore said, fear escaping his words.
"Yeah, I don't want these muffins-" Ian gestured to the bag of muffins in his left hand. "I think I'll just throw them away,"
"No, you can't do that! Please don't!" Theodore begged. His eyes became big and watery. But Ian ignored Theodore's cuteness. He placed him on the counter and took the bag of muffins towards the trash can. (15)
"Please Uncle Ian, please?" Theodore was practically on his knees now, looking up at the evil man.
"Err...let me think about that" Ian said as he stood still, put a finger to his chin and started tapping his chin in thought. Three seconds later he said: "No," He said this as he didn't even care.
"I have to stop him!" Theodore thought, desperately. But, he didn't.
Ian threw all the muffins in the trash can – it was over. Ian turned to face Theodore, a satisfied evil grin on his face at the sight at the saddened Theodore:
"Now, you're going on a new diet: "No Food For The Entire Day Diet!" (16)
But that was then and this was now. Theodore and his brothers were now in the caring hands of their adopted father, Dave Seville. Theodore and his brothers were the happiest they could remember. Theodore was so glad Dave was always there for them. Theodore turned his head to the left of the stage to smile up at Dave.
Dave was off stage. He was smiling away, happy to see the boys were having fun, and he gave thumbs up at Theodore. Theodore returned the gesture by smiling more broadly.
Yes, he was happy Dave was always there...but in five seconds, Dave wasn't going to be there; he was going to be dead on the stage.
What Theodore saw next, made his heart stop for a second; Ian Hawke slowly sneaked up behind Dave Seville. He had a gun in his right hand and it was aimed at Dave's back. Theodore, staring at the murderous scene, didn't know what to do, what to say, what to think...He wanted to shout out, to shout out "Dave! Look Out!" But, he didn't, he couldn't, he didn't want to? (17)
Theodore saw Ian say something but Theodore couldn't hear him...It was now or never!
A loud "BANG1" Echoed around the entire theatre. People screamed, a loud siren could be heard, fans running out of the nearest exits screaming "Murder!" There's been a murder!" Paramedics rushed into the theatre...someone was dead!
Theodore walked up to the lifeless, bloody body of Dave Seville who was dead and was never going to return. Dave was completely covered in blood; his clothes were covered in it, his face all red, his eyes still open, his expression was happy...(18)
Alvin and Simon scurried as fast as they could up to their dead father. Alvin started to cry uncontrollably, shouting in between crying and shaking Dave's body: "Scream Alvin!! Scream Alvin!" Dave's body didn't move, no matter how hard Alvin tugged at Dave. "God damn it,
scream Alvin!"(19) Simon, who was also crying, tried to control Alvin but Alvin merely pushed Simon aside. Simon tried to calm Alvin down: "Alvin, his g-gone-" said Simon as his voice broke. "There's nothing you can do, Alvin... nothing...he's gone,"(20)
"His not gone!" Alvin shouted as a reply.
"He is," Simon said sadly.
"This is all your fault!" Alvin shouted and he directed this at Theodore.
Theodore forgot he was still there. He had been crying too much to realise he was standing right next to his brothers.
"M-me?" Theodore peeped.
"Yes you!" Alvin shouted down on his baby brother.
"His right Theodore," Simon said calmly. Theodore looked at Simon; he never went with Alvin's side! He always stood up for Theodore. As Theodore looked at Simon longer, Theodore realised Simon hand an evil grin. It looked like the same evil grin Ian had... (21)
"What did I do?" Theodore asked through crying hardly.
"It's what you didn't do!" Alvin screamed. "You should have shouted when you was Ian was about to shot Dave! You should have done something!!"
"But I didn't mean- I didn't know-" Theodore's heart was breaking in two; his two loving brothers were going against him for the death of Dave.
"You didn't mean this to happen?" Alvin said as he gestured to the dead body of Dave Seville. "Well, Dave's dead now and it's all your fault!"
Suddenly, the scene changed, the background dissolved into a dark red. Nobody was to be seen. Then Theodore saw Dave's dead body on the floor. It was as bloody as ever. He scurried towards, but then Simon appeared. He had the same evil smile Ian had on his face. (22)
"Simon, what's going-"
But Simon, grew, and grew, and grew. Now standing, in front of Theodore was Ian Hawke (23). He looked bigger than ever. He smiled down at the scared and emotional chipmunk and tried to grab Theodore. Theodore ran but Ian grabbed him and held him by his tail. He came eye level to Theodore and said:
"You know when I said I wasn't going to do anything to you?"
"Yeah?" Theodore chipped.
"I lied," Ian said as he smiled evilly and he threw Theodore onto the red floor. (24)
Theodore landed with a small phut. He stood on his legs and, when he looked up, he realised he was surrounded by many people; his two brothers, Alvin and Simon, Claire, many fans and, worse of all, Ian Hawke. They were all pointing at Theodore saying: "It's all your fault! It's all your fault!"
"No, it's not," Theodore tried t say but they just said it louder:
"It's all your fault! It's all your fault!"
"Please, I didn't mean-"
Louder and louder the voices grew:
"It's all your fault! It's all your fault!"
"No, it's not!"
"IT IS YOUR FAULT! IT IS YOUR FAULT!"
Theodore woke up with a shook. His heart was racing, his paws were sweaty, and his mind was dizzy. He awoke in the darkness. He could just about see the outline of furniture; he was in the living room. He looked beside himself and saw Alvin and Simon sleeping peacefully. Dave must have let them fall asleep on the armchair. (25)
Theodore was so relived it was just a dream; he didn't kill Dave, he was still alive, asleep in his comfortable warm bed in his bedroom. But a small question popped up in his mind: Would have been my fault that Dave was dead if that woman didn't save Dave?
Theodore didn't want to finish that sentence; what wanted was Dave; He needed reassuring. Getting ready to get up and go to Dave's room, Theodore could hear high squeaky voices...(26)
TO BE CONTINUED!
A/N:
A/N Chapter comments (The most A/N comments for one chapter – 26 my new record):
(1): BTW, this is at the end of the Chipmunks Comeback Concert on chapter 3.
(2): Theodore on a no sugars and fatty foods diet – now, that's just mean!
(3): Aww...poor Theo – I'll open the bag for ya!
(4): I couldn't resist not putting this quote in this chapter – it's in the 2007 "Alvin And The Chipmunks" Movie when the chipmunks are in the car and are driven back by Dave after the singing in front of Ian Hawke.
(5): It's like his talking to a baby or a kid or something
(6): Can you guess who it is?
(7): What's Theo going to do/ His stuck!
(8): A smell is talking to Theodore?
(9): Oooo! Tense! Go Theo! Save the muffins!
(10): The idiot Ian had Theodore and his holding by his tail! Theo's upside down! And Theodore's terrified! I swear to god I'll kill Ian one day...hey, I can! I can writ eit in the story!
(11): I knew a talking smell was too good to be true!
(12): Now Ian's made poor Theo cry! Angry face
(13): You guys remember the outfits the chipmunks are wearing at that concert near the end of the movie? That's the outfits Ian's talking about.
(14): He wouldn't dare do that!
(15): Too cute for words!!
(16): No food for the entire day! You goanna be kidding me! I'm goanna kill him, I swear!
(17): Pure tense drama!
(18): I told you it was sad! Wait there more...
(19): Pure Drama, awesome drama from Alvin and Simon!
(20): The line Simon says is actually taken from the book "Harry Potter and the Order of the phoenix" It's in chapter 35 where a character dies...so don't read the quote if u don't want to get spoiled if u haven't already read the book or seen the movie. I just really likes that line.
(21): Creepy!
(22): If you don't like creepy mages, Don't read the following: That image of Dave covered in blood is just scary to see and his still smiling with his eyes open...freaky! I was actually going to make Dave's body come alive and the body was going to come straight for him and Dave's body was going to say something like "All, your fault," But, I figured I was crossing into T for Teen territory so I didn't put in the chapter.
(23): Now that is just plain scary!
(24): Scary Ian and how cruel was that he threw Theodore!
(25): AT least it was only a dream...well, part of it was!
(26); You can all guess who that is!
So, how was that, eh? Well, did you cry? Was it emotional enough for you? Did you feel Theodore's fears? Feel how he was feeling? Feel the emotions? Well, did you?
Did u think there was to much gore and violence in this chap? I wasn't so sure about the whole bloody body part of the chapter so let me know by either PMing me or leaving it in a review! I am really nearing T zone her!
Review, please? Review, please? Review, please? REVIEW! Please tell me what u thought f this chapter by reviewing and let me know what you think is going to happen! Please, review by clicking on the grey button that says "Submit review" Come on, it's not hard!
When am I going to update? I can honestly tell you I have n ides! I rather tell you that than lie! But if u guys read and review, I'm sure a chapter won't be far off! Yay for you!
OK, tell your friends about my story (If you can do that)
Hope you liked this chap, stay tuned for updates!!
Peace out for now!!
mpkio2
