Story time!

Any of you who know this boss will know the feeling of first killing him.

So, on Sunday, three days ago of this chapter going up, I was playing Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix, fighting the Lingering Will.

On my second attempt that day, I beat him.

I was so overjoyed that I bashed my knee against my face and gave myself a nosebleed.

Did I mention I'm actually pretty strong?

Yeeeeaaaaaah, that bitch hurt for two days straight. Ouch.

SO! New news!

As of now, every chapter I post will be beta read.

And the way that it's going to be beta'd is by brutal, cold-blooded murder.

And that's just how I want it :3

And now, for chapter six!

Bloody Hell...at this point, I think there are only two chapters left O.o

I'm making a sequel. There's no way I can't!

Of course, I can't deny the notes!

"Good chapter, I don't have anything else to put in this review so I'm just going to stop now

- TheOtherSanics"

Nuuuu, don't stop reviewing! That's what gets me up in the morning with the thought "I wanna write more today."

Honestly, all the reviews I've gotten are amazing. And I have twelve of them. Twelve amazing reviews from dedicated (I hope) readers! All of you are awesome!

"Don't feel bad about discontinuing a series you've lost all spark for, I've been there too many times to count. Remember, you're doing this cause you like it, not for anything else :3
And your writing is steadily improving!
The prose is getting more smooth, polished even, and the dialogue is easy enough to follow.
One rule of writing I have seen you skip over a few times, maybe by accident, would be "Make a new paragraph every time someone new speaks"
Something like:
"Hi," Smiley greeted.
"Hello," Zack waved.

One of the many things I've picked up over the years :3
(Smiles is getting the short end of the stick here, damn.)

Anyway, that's my review. If you'd like to chat more in-depth about writing-stuff, feel free to shoot me a message :)

See ya!
Erin Hasse"

...Pasting this actually lagged my computer for a second O.o

Yeesh XD

I've already contacted you about this, and, to save people from rants the size of chapters, I won't put what I PM'ed you about here XD

This person, Erin Hasse, is the person who is beta reading this from now on (I hope)!

Her works are amazing, I especially love her "Riddle School" fanfic. All of you, go check it out! She knows writing a hell of a lot better than I do XD

"Nice story! I love how you putted Smiley as the hero and also, I like the way you write, im practiceing! Please continue this! :)

- Huntress"

Mmkay, so, basic rule of writing, words such as "practice" or "idle" don't keep the "e" with "ing". Instead, it would be "practicing", or "idling".

Sorry if you find this offensive, I'm not trying to be, I'm just tryin' to help a fellow writer :D

Also, "putted" would be "put" in this scenario, as "putted" isn't quite a word.

ANYWAYS, without me rambling any further, I present to you...!


Chapter V: Ready, Set, Go!


Slowly raising herself off the ground, Smiley stared Zadicus directly in the eyes. His forward stance hadn't shifted since they had started, she hadn't been able to land a single hit on him, and she couldn't tell if he was getting tired or not. Taking a deep breath, seeing, out of the corner of her eye, Zack sitting on a chair that Zadicus had brought days before, she focused on what Zadicus had taught them. She charged, but stopped halfway, forcing Zadicus to punch too early, giving her a small opening to hit, which she took, launching a kick at his chest, catching him off-guard, sending him back a couple of paces, and forcing him to hunch over a small bit. The bit of his face that she could still see looked...extremely mad.

He took a deep breath, before saying "And that concludes today's training, Smiley."

"Zad, I-I'm sorry, I didn't mean to-" she began, stepping back, raising her arms in a "please don't hurt me" gesture.

"It's fine. I just need to cool off, is all. Don't sweat it, you're getting nothing but stronger. We go tomorrow. Zack, your training is in an hour," Zadicus finished.

He walked to the door, and said "I'll be back in a bit. You know the drill, don't leave here."

After leaving, Smiley slumped down to her knees. After ten minutes of silence, she stood back up, saying "I'm going after him today."

"Wh-Smiley, are you crazy?! You could die out there!" Gasped Zack, shocked. He walked towards her, face showing nothing but concern.

"Don't worry about me, Zack. I know what I'm doing. I snagged this while I faked him out today," she said, showing a small chip on the bottom of her foot, which she peeled off with her hand. "With this, I can find out exactly where he is in this place. Don't worry, I'll come back. I promise," she finished, with a smile.

But it wasn't a happy one.

"...Alright. I...I trust you, Smiles. Don't let me down," said Zack.

Hesitantly, the yellow, smiling girl walked over and hugged the pale, hotheaded boy. "I'll come back, Zack. I promise."

Without giving him any time to react, she released him, and left, leaving the boy to wonder what had just happened.

Leaving the room, Smiley realized she had no idea how to implant the chip. Sighing softly, she pocketed the chip, and went off to look for him.


"Journay Entry #725, June 29th, 2013," Zadicus wrote.

"I cannot control myself for much longer. The children, they are not normal. I can sense the darkness within them. It has not taken control, but if I do not take action, they will die, for good. I cannot let this happen. I must find a way to save them...even if it means sacrificing my own life to do so. I am next in line for the Vizion project. I know I cannot enslave the Earth, or destroy it...but, perhaps, I could be a ruler, if I so chose...no, I know I am no leader. I must end Vizion."

He hesitated, before erasing the whole thing, starting fresh.

"I cannot control this...feeling. This burning feeling within me. I cannot describe it, but...it wants to take over. It's almost as if...no, that cannot be possible. I am not one of them, it would make no sense for me to go berserker...still, I must add this to my calculations. And I must protect the children, at all costs. No matter what."

Satisfied, he placed the quill inside of the journal and pocketed it. "I must protect the children," he said.

"Even if I must destroy my body to do so."


Smiley ran up and down hallways, checking every door she came across, until she, quite literally, ran into Zadicus. "Z-Zad!" She cried, being shoved back a small bit from running into him.

"Smiley Sundae, what are you DOING here?! You are not to leave yo-" he started, a disapproving glare showing in his eyes.

"Zad, I'm sorry! I didn't mean to hurt you, and I didn't mean to make you upset! Please, stop just leaving like this!" Smiley said, tears forming in her eyes.

Zadicus, at a loss for words, was shocked. He had never imagined that he was hurting the girl by leaving so often. His face went from anger, to confusion, to empathy, before going completely neutral once more.

Looking down, he huffed out a breath. "Get back to your room. That's an order," he stated, before turning and walking away.

Once again, Smiley felt a boiling anger inside of her, just like she had when Zack had accused her of murder. "No," she said, coldly.

"Excuse me?" Zadicus questioned, stopping, not bothering to turn around. His voice was almost toxic. "You are going to heed my orders, Ms. Sundae, or so God help me, not even a restoration pod would be able to fix what I would do to you."

His hands were balled into fists, which were slowly turning white from lack of circulation, but Smiley wasn't afraid.

"No," Smiley responded. "I'm sick of this, Zadicus. YOU are going to come back, and YOU are going to stop disappearing like this."

Taking a deep breath, a small, red aura flickered around him. When he turned back around, Smiley could see he was EXTREMELY mad. 'Maybe bossing him around like that wasn't the brightest idea I've had...' Smiley thought to herself.

"Smiley Sundae," Zadicus said, in a voice that terrified her more than Viz's, which was almost demonic. She had to do something to calm him down. "This is what is going to happen. I am going to force more pain onto you than you can even imagine. Then, I am going to heal you, smash you into a wall, heal you once more, take you back to your room, throw you in, and lock the door. If you honestly think you can try and talk to ME like that, you are sorely mistaken. Now, prepa-"

Before letting him finish, and idea popped into her head. This had always worked for Phil to calm him down, so, maybe, she could only hope it worked for him. Running up to him and nearly tackling him to the ground with a tearful hug, Smiley was almost crying into his shoulder. "Please, Zad...please...just come back..." she begged.

"I...er..." he stuttered. Letting out a sigh, he returned the hug. "Fine. I'm...I'm sorry, Smiley. It's just...it's been more and more difficult lately to control myself. I am still unfamiliar with this body, and cannot use my own powers to their fullest. Yes, I was mad before, but that was because I had left myself open. These stubby little arms aren't much good for defense, which is not good for me. I just..."

Smiley could feel her shoulder getting slightly wet.

"I just want my body back...I just...want her back..."

"It's gonna be OK, Zad," she said, rubbing soothing circles on his back. "We'll get your body, and your girl back. That, I can promise."

After what felt like a decade, the two released each other. After a slightly awkward silence, they started walking back to their room.

"Attention, minions," Tecton's voice echoed throughout the hallway. "The girl and the traitor have been spotted in corridor fifteen. End them!"

"To hell with this," Zadicus grumbled. "Keep moving, Smiley, I'll keep them back! Just GO!"

Nodding, Smiley ran as fast as she could, passing guard after guard after guard.

And she never looked back.


And that's that!

So, I may not be able to upload any chapters for a few weeks, that's because I'm going on vacation!

Hooray!

I'm goin' to Didney Worl!

...My grammar Nazi hates me, my inner child loves me :D

This chapter was REALLY revamped from what it was. Hey, Erin, if you're reading this, you mind helping me revamp the other chapters for this, too? Maybe remake the story?

...Nah, that's dumb. Just remake the chapters XD

Only if you want to, though!

By the way, Erin also suggested the chapter name, and it's perfect :D

I forget if I've said this already, but go check our her works! They're amazing! They're way better than mine, at any rate...

ALSO!

Do NOT bug Erin to beta you just because she's betaing me! That kind of stuff bothers me. Just because she's doing it for one person, doesn't mean she'll do it for everyone.

And I'm not trying to be "oh look at me, I'm better than you, I have a beta", I just don't want people to annoy her with constant requests.

Anyways guys, my name is Unknown, with the help of the amazing ErinHasse, and we will see all of you lovely people, in the next chapter! Ciao!