Alright, I've been re-reading this story and I'm shocked at just how bad it is.

I've decided to stop this story for the moment while I re-write it to bring the standard up to how it is for the last post.

As such, I am requesting any suggestions that people have to make this story better, but only in keeping with the story so far. In other words, how a certain part might go better in your opinion, not not along the lines of: the US should be brought in; the TC should turn everything over to the US because only they can/should be capable of controlling it etc.

I'm looking for things like: you shouldn't have brought in this country because . . ., you should bring in this country; this isn't very practical, you should change it to this because . . ..

The only thing that won't be changed at all is the latest update, unless someone gives me some really good ideas for it.

You can send me a PM with them, and then I can remember to properly credit you for the ideas

Thanks

Samantha Carter_Potter