Yes I know long time no update, so to make it up to you I'm posting two chapters!!! That's right two.
Oh and I'm am not recieving feedback on my fic I need to know if its good or not so I know to continue working on my sequal. So please if you want another stroy after this one tell me so!
Chapter Nine: Mulling Things Over
As he walked down the halls of his flagship toward his room (he had nothing he needed to attend to). His thoughts were a jumbled mess and he needed to think things over and he wanted to do it in seclusion.
When he walked into his room he sat down on the chair that was situated by the window so he could look out at the planet they were hovering off of. His room was fairly large it had a medium sized table in the center of the room so that he could go over battle strategies and the wall that faced the door was all glass and then there was the chair he was sitting in.
His thoughts went to the day that he and Soreka had gone on the mission when he had met River. The first thing he thought when she bumped into him was that she was as stupid as one of the droids, but she had proven him wrong especially when they dueled.
Over the five months she had been with the Separatist's she had proven herself time and time again, she would feed off of her anger and pain to strengthen her skills, she always kept her cool when he had purposely antagonized her, and she showed respect to her leaders especially him.
She always stayed on a lower key than what she was used to. He would like it better if she acted like she used to, defending what she believed against what he would say and stand up for herself.
But she was a good apprentice, she had skill with a lightsaber and was open to new skills that she would eventually acquire, she didn't question his authority, and she was brilliant. But she wasn't perfect, during their first lesson she could have attacked when she blocked and visa-versa, but it had been the first one and he had a strong feeling that the next one she would improve.
The only thing that he was worried about was how he should be her mentor, like she said the other day they would learn things together alike and unalike. He could understand the unalike part but not about the alike.
Then his thoughts went to how he got her to tell him about her past. He hadn't pre-planned to ask her that question; he didn't even know it was a topic he was concerned with. Why should he care if his apprentice had ever been in love? He was General Grievous Supreme Commander of the Separatist's Droid Army for gosh sake's and the only thing that concerned him was if she had ever loved anyone. This extremely annoyed him, yeah he was curious about her past but he didn't want to know if she had been in love.
After he cooled down he started to think of ways he could get her to stand up for herself, and then it occurred to him. He would send her over the edge, he would find something, anything to criticize her. And he would enjoy it.
So what do you think? Should I keep going or no? And should I rewrite the story for a better writing style?
