Sorry for my bad English.
While writing another one of my fanfictions, some reader decide to post a review seeing that no one is interested in a fanfiction based on OCs. I know that by my own experience with the first version of this fic, because of the low feedback from the last version, I decide to delete the fanfiction and start from Zero.
In my own opinion, I think the first time did not work because seemed like I wanted to show off my OCs rather than made a real story. This made the chapter pretty boring and uninteresting. It was a mistake that seems I am not making in this fic. It really is going better than last time.
A problem that I think those fics have is the same of the first version of this fic. Whoever is writing want only to show their OCs, lacking in a good plot for their fic and not putting much effort on the story. I think that because I have another fanfiction based in a OC and it received a good feedback.
Of course it is just my opinion, everyone is free to write anything they want, and if is like that they want to make a story, who I am to say otherwise?
Enough talk. To the fic!
Vale
The started as the usual.
Sally woke up, make some jogging, took a shower, dressed her casual clothes, and eat break feast. With the exception of Ryan who went to spend the day with his older brother. Once they finished their meal, Ryan went to meet Howard, leaving his partner to meet some of his friends in Vale. This left she and Unicorn alone but not for so long. Unicorn said that she would spend all day in the workshop and left her leader alone. Sally asked if she could go along but Unicorn give a simple "no" and left their room.
Once alone, Sally decide that would be a good day to explore Vale. It would be her first time in Vale and she didn't wanted to do it alone but everyone was busy. She tried to ask Jaune but the one who answered his scroll was Pyrrha. When she asked if Jaune was free to hang out Pyrrha answered that he would be busy for the day, and when she asked with what, the redhead quickly said "things" and finished the call, leaving Sally very confused.
While seeing her reflex on the window of a cloth store, she thought about her social situation. She didn't have too much friends in Beacon like she had in Sactum. She wonder why is that. Perhaps because she hang out only with her teammates? Unicorn is not very sociable herself. Stoping to think about, her team is not very sociable themselves.
Ryan make a effort but her classmates don't seems to want to hang out with someone clumsy, Koro is pratically a thief and Unicorn refuses to speak a complete phrase, not to mention her relationship with the professors, specially Goodwitch.
She sighed and decide to enter in the store. She could use some new clothes, but the thought left her mind when she heard the sound of a trash can crashing on the floor. She quicly turned her attention to where the sound come and her eyes widened at the sight of her recent crush.
Kiron was on the other side of the street with his teammates.
The guy with armor from the first day she spoke to Kiron, wearing more casual clothes, a black hood and grey jeans. A boy with a baseball cap and dog ears on the top of his head, wearing a black shirt above a white one with long sleeves and jeans pants, something that captured Sally's attention about the dog faunus was his red and blue eyes. And Rarus, the one she meet in the cafeteria, was wearing grey tank top and black pants. Kiron himself was with a white button shirt and black pants. He was looking confused at Rarus who just have a bored smirk on his face.
-What was that about? -The leader of the team, Darkus, If Sally remember well, asked to Rarus.
-What to you mean? -Rarus asked playing dumb. -It was a accident.
-None of your movements is accidental Rarus. -Darkus retorted.
-How come you say that? -Rarus asked again, still playing dumb.
-Well, how about the time you... -The faunus stopped his talk when smelled something in the air. -Smell of chocolate.
-Kiron! -A female voice called and the team turned around to see a brunette haired girl weaving at them.
To Kiron to be more specific. Darkus actually heard about Sally from Rarus and discovered why did the samurai of their team just bumped in the trash can by "accident". Sally approached Kiron with a full smile on her bright lips.
-Sally! What a surprise! -Rarus spoke, not fooling none of his teammates. -How about a little introduction? This one with the ugly face is our leader, Darkus.
-I'm Darkus Mavros, nice to meet you. -Darkus spoke calmly while introducing himself.
-I'm Sally Highwind. Nice to meet you. -Sally introduced herself and bowed to Darkus. -He is a bit scare from a closer look. -She thought.
-And the one with the cap is Arno.
-I'm Arno Baskerville. It is a pleasure. -Arno introduced himself poltely as Darkus did.
-The pleasure is mine. -Sally said. -So, you guys are doing something interesting?
-Just hanging out. Why? -Arno asked her.
-I'm kinda bored myself. -Sally said scratching her cheek. -Is my first time alone in Vale and all my friends are busy.
-Sorry Sally. -Rarus spoke. -But we all are busy ourselves.
-Since when? -Kiron asked.
-Don't play dumb. -This statement from Rarus made Kiron frown. -You know that I have to prepare myself from when general Ironwood arrive.
-Three months early?
-The sooner, the better, right? -Rarus asked. Kiron thought that he would not be more obvious of his intentions.
-Stoping to think about it... -Arno spoke. -... I really need to make a call to my parents. They want to know how I am doing in Beacon anyway.
-And I have a training marked to the afternoon. -Darkus spoke.
-What kind of training you have with that outfit? -Kiron asked.
-A special one. -Darkus merely answered. Kiron cursed his leader's unbreakable poker face.
-This left only you. -Rarus spoke to Kiron.
-Only me to what?
-To show the town to our new friend. -Rarus said as he gestured to Sally whose the eyes widened at the possibility to be alone with Kiron.
-Rarus, if you think that could fool anyone with this act, you are...
-What is that? -Darkus asked pointing to the left.
Kiron turn his attention to where he was pointing and only saw the park. He was going to question his leader when from nothing, all of his teammates just dissapeared, leaving him Sally alone.
-Really? -Kiron thought.
-I'm a little famished. -Sally spoke getting Kiron out of his thoughts. -I heard about a restaurant called The Feeding Warriors, do you know where is? We could... you know... -Sally start to rub her index fingers together while talking. -We could have a meal, if you are a little hungry too.
Kiron looked at her for a moment before let a sigh.
-I'm... a little hungry actually.
Sally seemed calm from outside, but inside of her head, she squealed in joy. She followed Kiron to the restaurant she heard her classmates talk about while her mind was in her own world. This was her opportunity for her to get closer to Kiron and if everything go right, more closer will be to Kiron's head the idea of give a chance for them.
She could already see.
She and Kiron... alone in the middle of a meadow... sitting in a picnic towel... enjoying some food while talking... then he got hold of her hand... then to her cheek... he smiling to her as his face got closer to her's... and closer... and closer...
-Hey! You are okay? -Kiron asked. -Your face is a bit red.
Sally quickly turn around from him with her hands on her red cheeks.
-Don't look at me! -She squealed. -Kyaa! It is so embarassing!
-I will kill you guys for this. -Kiron whispered to himself as he keep walking.
The Feeding Warriors
It was not long before the couple arrived at the restaurant.
The Feeding Warriors was a popular place for the students of Beacon. To them it was a good place to hang out, have a good meal and even have dates. With black and white tiles. Windows all around the front and the left and right sides. The tables were located in the middle of the place and right at the side of the windows too. A balcony separating the kitchen and the tables. A fan on the ceiling for the hot days. And some machines like a jukebox, a pinball machine, a arcade machine and even a pool table on the corner.
Sally liked the atmosphere. Everyone around was chating happily and those alone seemed to enjoy their meal and those who were using the pinball and the arcade were having fun.
She and Kiron sat down in a table on the side of the window and waited for the waitress who didn't take too long to appear.
-Good Morning. My name is Marin and I am the waitress. What do you wish to eat? -Asked the blue haired waitress giving the menu for both of them.
-Give me the number eleven. -Kiron said before give the menu back to Marin.
-Beef Steak with fried vegetables, right. And your girfriend?
The word girlfriend made Sally start to blush again. She pointed at the menu while covering her red face while Kiron spoke.
-She is not my girlfriend.
-I-I-I will t-take the n-number six w-wit hot sauce, please.
-French Fries with hot sauce. It will be there in five minutes.
With that, Marin left leaving Sally alone with Kiron.
-Yknow? -Sally began. -I'm kinda curious about the name of this place. The Feeding Warriors, why choose that name?
-Who knows? I heard that the owner is a retired huntsmen who used to cook for his teammates. Perhaps he thought in something about "a warrior who feed warriors".
-So it would not be better The Feeder of Warriors as a name?
The food came as Sally and Kiron keep talking. After they finished talking about the name of the restaurant, they start to talk about their teammates, and complaining about them as well. Kiro actually questioned Ryan's existence.
Sally tried to ask about Kiron's childhood but seemed to be a sensitive topic so she decide to ask something else. His time at Beacon, his weapon, what he think about the professors, anything she could use to start a talk.
She was already used with small talk thanks to her aunt and her partner, but different from Unicorn, Kiron was more talkative and even made some questions to her. About her time in Mistral, her time in Sactum and about the Musical Festival, an event not so know around Remnant like the tournament. Once they finished their meal, Sally asked to Kiron if he could show her the town. She squealed in her mind again when Kiron said that he have nothing better to do.
They walked for a while, Kiron showing to Sally places that she would need know being a student of Beacon. A Dust Store, a Gun Store, she was confused why did he not wanted to enter into Tukson's Book Trade, a library store. Keeping some talk while walking, the couple did not notice where they were going and ended up reaching the Faunus District.
Sally stopped walk when notices that Kiron had stopped.
-Kiron, something is wrong?
-I'm not very comfortable walking in that place.
-I know that some faunus are a distrustful of humans, but is not like everyone of them are like the White Fang.
-They could be from Menagerie from what I care, but I don't like to walk among animals.
-C'mon! You don't need to be so-wait, what did you said?
Sally stood petrified after she understood the words what came from Kiron's mouth. Her crush just referred the Faunus as animals.
-K-Kiron, you shouldn't use this word while referring to Faunus.
-Yeah, I heard that before. -Kiron said in a tone like it was not a big deal.
-You may make them angry if you talk like that.
-So what? -Kiron asked. Both of them not noticing some civilians listening their conversation.
-What do you mean by so what? -Sally asked, becoming a little annoyed of how Kiron was acting. -Just because someone have dog ears, doesn't make him an animal.
-It is not my fault that whoever is, born like that.
-What's wrong with you?! -Kiron said nothing as Sally wait for his answer, but she knew already and yet decide to ask. -You... don't like Faunus? -Again, Kiron remained silent. -B-but... your partner...
During their talk in the restaurant, Kiron mentioned that Arno is actually his partner. The same Arno who she saw hanging out with Kiron's team, who has dog ears on the top of his baseball cap.
-Do you remember the rules of the initiation? -Kiron finally spoke and Sally just nodded to his question.
-The first person you make eye contact will be your partner for the next four years. I remember.
-Just because we are partners, doesn't mean we need to like each other. Me and Arno may tolerate each other while in a mission, but once back in the academy, we don't speak a word to each other.
-But today you was with him...
-With him and my Teammates. -Kiron suddenly sounded displeased. -It was just for us get over with our stuffs as fast as possible. Darkus wanted to all of us come to Vale to end our business, and wanted to make it faster with all of us coming today instead of let me or Arno come to Vale another day.
On the first time someone put their eyes on someone they like, they are perfect in their eyes, but once they know this person better, they start to see their faults. This is what Sally is going through right now. She expected a lot of this from Kiron and some faults as well, but she didn't expect that from everything, he dislikes faunus.
Sally had nothing against faunus. One of her friends back in Mistral is a bird Faunus and Sally loved her company. She even defended her when a couple of guys tried to hit on her and her friends, but once they saw her wings, they start to make fun of her, Sally immediately put herself between her friend and the guys and told them to leave her and her friend alone, and she would do it again if happened.
But unlike last time, none of the guys was someone she fell in love with. It was love at first sight for Sally and she wanted to be with Kiron. It was what her heart wants. Even after she discovered this side of him. Aside what can't stand to be closer to Faunus.
Speaking of which, in the middle of their talk, they did not notice a group of three Faunus was listening to their conversation. Sally then adopted a worried expression confusing Kiron.
-Oh no. -She whispered. Before Kiron could ask what was wrong, a voice cut him off.
-Hey. -A Faunus with lamb horns called, followed by another with horse ears and another with big and what seems to be sharp nails. -I heard just know you call us animals?
Kiron did not was intimidated by his tone. He merely glared back at the lamb, lamb's friends standing in each side of Kiron and Sally.
-If what I said?
-You should listen your girlfriend, pal. -Horse said. -I don't think she will like to see you beaten to the floor because you can't hold your tongue.
-I can. Different from you, I don't go around licking the crap from the other.
-What? -Horse asked, becoming angered.
-Why have four ears if all of it not work well?
-Kiron! -Sally called him in a low tone. He could hear anger in her voice. Not that he cared. Neither the Faunus around them.
-Okay punk. I will give you three seconds to you apologize for not hold your tongue before I teach you some manners! -Lamb said loud. His friends also angered and ready to take any violent action.
*Three seconds ahead*
-Are you going to give me your trainer's number?
Are you going to...
-Gentleman, it was nice and all but we must leave like right NOW! -Sally interrupted Kiron, putting herself between him and the group, trying to pushing him away.
-Wait there lady. -Horse stopped them, blocking their path. -We did not heard this punk apologizing.
-Please, there's no need for any drastic acts. -Sally said trying not make the situation end in violence. -I know he did not mean to say what he said.
-Don't put words...
-Kiron! -Sally interrupted again.
-Let him say. -Both teenagers look to the Faunus with claws. -I want to hear what he want to say.
-Y-you don't need to...
-If you insist.
-But Kiron...
-He insist. -Kiron coughed before start from the beginning. -Don't put words in my mouth Sally. If I want to apologize with animals, I would throw a piece of meat for them.
-WHAT?! -The three of them said in the same time.
-Kiron, can we please... -Sally again stopped her phrase as her eyes widened. Surprising Kiron, the brunette grabbed the clawed hand of the Faunus and kicked his face for try attack her crush. Once the one with claws fell on the floor, the girl notice what she done. -Oh no.
-Oh yes baby. -Lamb said cracking his knuckles. -We would have let you leave, but you just have to do that!
Lamb dashed against Sally but had his face punched. Coming to his senses, he sees that Kiron put himself between him and Sally. Normally, the girl would be ecstatic for him to defend her from an attacker, but now, she knew that this would mean problem.
Lamb growled and dashed forward Kiron this time, aiming his fist at his face. Kiron did not move a muscle as the punch connects with his face. Lamb then fall on his knees holding the arm he used to punch by the wrist and his face writhing in pain. Sally seeing everything not understood what happened, he was sure that the first make contact with Kiron's cheek.
She then ducks a claw attack from the Faunus she kicked. She dodges another attack from Claw and hold him by the wrist and threw on the floor away with a judo throw. Kiron keeps watching Lamb on the floor and did not notice Horse behind him holding a piece of wood found nearby and using it to hit Kiron straight on the head. It didn't even budge.
He turns around and punched Horse on the face and Kicked Lamb on the stomach as he tried to attack Kiron from his back. While Kiron was dealing with the two Faunus, Sally was cornered with her back against the brick wall as Claw approached.
-I don't want any trouble.
-Should have thought about that before come here! -Claw tried to cut her pretty face with his nails but Sally dodges every attack he gave.
Claw got more and more frustrated for not be able to land a single attack against the girl. Sally did not want to fight but don't seems he was open to some talk. Not after what Kiron said.
Claw was starting to become tired. Attack repeatedly a target what could dodge his attacks was running down his energy. Sally grabbed Claw's hand and threw him against the wall, where he sit down. Panting heavily, Sally knew that he would not try another attack. Turning around see Kiron holding Horse by his hair and Lamb on the floor with a purple eye and a swollen cheek.
-I did not planned to teach some manners to some animal, but seeing that you lack of control... -Kiron then raised his fist. -... I will gladly be your trainer.
-Kiron! Stop, please! -Sally's begging voice stopped Kiron from delivering another blow to the poor Faunus in his grip. She approached him with a pleading look and seemed that was about to cry as she made her request. -Please, let's just go back to the school.
Kiron was known around the academy for being a rock, but even him would not refuse the request from a girl who is about to cry. Without saying another word, he let go of the horse Faunus and start to leave the place. Sally followed him but stopped to give one last look the three faunus before went back to the academy.
If she had to look for one more second, she would have see the hatred in the eyes of their three.
Beacon
Corridors
The walk back to Beacon was very quiet. Normally Kiron would not be bothered with something like an awkward silence, but the expression on Sally's face actually made the situation a bit awkward for him.
The normally cheerful and talkative girl didn't speak a word since they little quarrel in the Faunus district. She refused to look at him and keep with her gaze on the floor all the time. After what seemed hours of walking, they finally reach team STRK dorm room.
-Thank you for today... I guess. -Was the only thing she said before open the door.
-Sally. -Before she could enter in her room, Kiron called her. She finally sees the boy in front of her with what seems an apologetic face, surprising her. -I'm sorry. -And she becomes even more surprised after hear him apologizing. -I shouldn't let my personal problems cause trouble to someone else. I should had listen to you and have left instead of cause trouble.
Finally, the smile returned to her lips, which disappeared from his point of view to give Kiron a kiss on his cheek.
-I accept your apologies Kiron. And I had fun today since I could be with you. -If Sally's cheek becomes redder, her head will be like a tomato. She averted her gaze, this time for shyness as spoke. -And I would love to spend the day with you again sometime.
Kiron stood with a blank expression for a moment before say his next words.
-Yeah. Maybe. If I'm not be busy. -With that answer, Sally had a smile so big that could be see from behind. -See you then.
-See ya.
Kiron went back to his dorm as did Sally. She closed the door behind her and start to think about the events of her day. She was able to spend hours with someone she fell in love with but also discovered that Kiron is not so perfect like her eyes showed to her. The fact he is racist toward Faunus is not something she approves and would be better if she does not socialize with him too much. But she likes him, and would not want to ignore him after spending so much time by his side. She wants to be with him but did not know what to do about his prejudice.
The knock on her door stopped her thoughts. She open the door and meet a pair of angry yellow eyes from a blonde girl. She was wearing a yellow beret, a black shirt, a grey skirt and a pair of military boots. Her hair tied in a ponytail behind her head.
-I think I'm the girl who resides in the dorm you just knock the door. -The girl just raised an eyebrow. -And no. I can not read minds. At least, not yet. -Sally thought the last part.
-At least you know why I am here?
-I told you. I cannot read minds. So how I would know?
-I just want to make everything clear to you. -Sally raised an eyebrow. What this girl is talking about? -To start, my name is Laura Bolt. And what I want to make clear is that I'm after Kiron make a while now, and not going to be some ordinary lady who smell like chocolate who will stand in my way.
Now Sally understood what Laura was talking about. From confusion, Sally assumed a more aggressive posture.
-Oh really? And who's going to stop me?
-You are just buying a fight you cannot win.
-From what I could see today, I have plenty of chances. Different from you. He did not even mention you while we were eating.
Laura fumed through her ears after hear that. She approached Sally until the girls were eye to eye with each other.
-I just will give to you warning. I worked hard to get Kiron to notice me and not gonna be you or any girl around who will ruin what I worked so hard to have.
-I don't care about all work you have. If he still is single, I will not give him to you or any girl around.
-Oh yeah?
-Yes.
-So get ready to have your little heart smashed to the pieces because Kiron is mine.
-We gonna see about that.
The girls officially declared war, glaring sparks to each other and looking with all fury they have. Coming from the corridors and witnessing the scene was Ryan with his brother. Both watching confuse the girls glaring to each other. They practically could see the sparks into their glares, what was making them a little nervous. Laura turn around and start to leave, passing through Ryan and Howard.
-Sooo... -Howard began. -A new friend?
-As if! -Sally said turning around and entering into her dorm.
-Sally. -Ryan spoke. -What was that about?
-I... guess I just made a rival.
End of the chapter.
And the love rival appears.
I didn't plan to make this chapter this big, but I had to add some fighting to Sally even if a little, and I wanted to introduce another OC who already appeared on the chibi version and need to appear in this fic already.
Something that I regret not makes on the last version of this fic is some interaction between Sally and Laura. I mean, Love Rivals! Put those two together and something interesting sure will happen. I will try making those two interact more with each other and of course, give to Kiron some headache.
I forgot a chapter make a while now and I will upload in the next chapter. So look forward for more battles, because it is what will happen.
See you next time.
